Reviews for To Fight The Coming Darkness |
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![]() ![]() BelatedCongratz on exam passing. Story went off rails with neither Tonks or Lupin escorting Susan. Also, Susan would have had all 3 girls with her if she was getting a dress. |
![]() ![]() Your characters all have depth. whatever their role you make them pop and be present. great job. good luck on cert. |
![]() ![]() Nice take of The GodDaughter, Gaming, cliffhanger of multiple wills. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting ending. It's kind of open ended and shows possible problems in the future, but still gives us some resolution. Good story. Thanks for writing and posting it for all of us readers. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It makes sense that a phoenix, an almost immortal being of fire, could unleash a lot of damage if it was suitably motivated to do so lol. Fawkes was relegated in canon to mostly being a mascot, excellent singer, and fancy transporter, occasionally getting to show a little use by healing the odd basilisk bite, pecking the eyes out of said basilisk, or tanking an AK. That bird was underutilized. Darius didn't last long in his second life lmao. Good riddance. Rather amusing how Voldy got stuck inside those wards for a lot of the fighting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I feel bad for Molly here. Although I agree her defeating Bellatrix in canon was so idiotic. Just one of many complaints I have with book 7, which seriously disappointed me (even more than book 6, which I also rather disliked). |
![]() ![]() ![]() Meh. Walls of text, numerous typos, telling not showing. Unsure why this got as many favs as it did, but this is pedestrian enough for me not to want to bother. |
![]() ![]() ![]() There it is. I've long been open to the idea of a non-canon romance for Harry. The problem is almost nobody seems to be able to do that without also shitting all over Ginny. Like you just did. Ginny is not one to get hysterical. Ginny lashing out at Harry like this makes no sense, or else she would have lashed out at Harry in Book 5 when Harry was so sure he was the one who attacked her father. Instead, she remained calm and informed Harry on how silly he was being. That is what should have happened here - Harry shouldering the blame, and Ginny and the rest telling him off for believing that. But it feels like nobody can help themselves and *not* make Ginny a giant cunt. You've even set it before they got together, you can just have Harry and Susan get together instead! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yours is the first story I've encountered with Higgs existing as anything other than a Quidditch player |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why? Why couldn't you give us a triumphant Lockheart? A Lockheart with his memory back and an eagerness to regain his fame? It would've been the absurd situation you're readers deserved. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Auh damn, the battle begins! This part of a story is always interesting, especially in your work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, at least Harry learned the important lesson of "don't leave an enemy alive to stab you in the back later". |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heh, Dumbledore, knowing things he shouldn't because of logic. Fantastic characterization, and really nice handout to the readers as to just how Susan could have been able to attack Lilly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting, so even though she's a walking corpse, she still shows up under her proper name. Hmmm. That makes me wonder, what would be shown if Voldemort showed up with an army of the dead? |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know, if he wasn't brutally killing children who've not done anything yet... I'd be cheering for Longbottom. |