Reviews for To Fight The Coming Darkness
Kevin chapter 41 . 11/6/2014
I loved the "gritty realism" and "believable Voldemort" and the unique elements of this story. All together it has been one of my favorite stories.

I have been conditioned to a Voldemort invulnerable to everyone other than Harry and Dumbledore that seeing him get injured was a shock. I enjoyed your gritty realism here and at the rarely mentioned fact that schoolchildren with no training shouldn't be able to fight experienced warriors. There are only so many stories you can read before a couple of school kids defeating trained aurors using "teamwork" wears thin. Kudos for having the guts to kill characters off left and right, "it's a war" for everyone but the main characters that I really like.

You gave Neville extraordinary and unique character; you have a bunch of Slytherns proud of the fact that their parents are murdering the families of their classmates and nobody gets violent despite having lethal weapons since age 11. Neville going on a killing spree is honestly understandable; parents tortured into insanity, family murdered before you, daily taunts from their killers. You almost want to cheer him on because every single one of those kids is going to be torturing others next summer. Sympathy and disgust, understandable but unacceptable.

The unicorn vest ideas was brilliant as was Hagrid's last stand with Fluffy and Aragog.
Adapting Peter from a mindless idiotic sycophant into a powerful follower was masterfully done; the adapted Marauder's map is a great idea (suspiciously advanced for a few schoolchildren in an unplottable castle... anyway).

All in all your story is incredible; it is the best, most realistic, normal-powered Harry Potter war story I have read.
DylanL chapter 41 . 10/23/2014
A very interesting story. I did want to stop reading sometimes when u did things to characters I liked such as Tonk's rape, but I persevered and I'm glad I did because while I liked 'lie if lived' better, this is still a great story. I look forward to other ones from u including the conclusion of voldy for good in this universe. At least this one only leaves it open to a possible sequel instead of having a sequel needed for the story to be finished.
CPO Backstreet chapter 15 . 10/16/2014
Okay, that semi-negates one of my complaints although it still makes the emphasis in the earlier chapter a bit over the top. I can't quite decide if this fiction is trying to be even-handed or not, and whether we're meant to side with Harry and Susan when they dismiss Dumbledore making valid points or just see it as two strong personalities clashing.
CPO Backstreet chapter 14 . 10/15/2014
Sorry that my last review was a bit harsh, I wrote it at a bad moment. The problem is that this story is so well-written and plotted that flaws that would be acceptable in a lesser fiction are so glaring. I did like the portrayal of Dumbledore here, we've only really seen him from Harry's point of view up to now which has resulted in him being demonised a bit. The occasional use of Americanisms rankles (Scrimgeour would more likely reference the Territorials than the National Guard and you don't really get fixed term posts or interim ministers in the UK, they elect "permanent" replacements instead) but it's a problem I'm very familiar with and I know how hard it is to put yourself in the mindset of someone else's culture.
CPO Backstreet chapter 13 . 10/14/2014
I'm making it slowly through this of it's good, some of it not so 's falling into the same trap as a lot of stories that have Harry bonding with someone unusual, feeling the need to character assassinate, or at least character flesh wound, all the characters he hangs around with normally and destroy his existing bonds, which feels slightly lazy.I'm possibly being premature with that, so I'll look forward to seeing how it ends up.

But this stuff with the's just a start, it doesn't even say that only Harry can kill says "either must die at the hands of the other."Which means Voldemort could just as easily kill Harry, and that doesn't mean that no-one else can kill him if Harry fails, any more than Harry would be immortal once he killed it doesn't mean that anyone else who attacks Voldemort would automatically be curb stomped, otherwise Dumbledore would be splattered all over the ministry if you follow the prophecy exactly, there's nothing to stop them bringing him down, binding him in chains and dragging him to Harry so he can finish him your treatment of the prophecy, Harry's never in any danger unless Voldemort's present, which isn't a particular good dramatic tool.
FanFictionReader12 chapter 41 . 10/10/2014
I absolutely loved how realistic you made this story. And in the end, how you left it open for another tale to be told. Fantastic!
Guy chapter 21 . 9/27/2014
Holy crap. This has been the most bad-ass Hagrid I've ever read, and I somehow doubt I'll find one more bad-ass than this. He was a legend, and his death makes this world 25% less bad-ass.
kkeenergirl chapter 41 . 9/14/2014
I liked the story, in part because it was very AU and in part because you thought outside the box and didn't use Ginny or Hermione as Harry's love interest. I loved the Narcissa/Charlie subplot, different and inventive. I liked that Neville wasn't used as a shadow to the boy who lived but its sad that he couldn't find a little love or family of his own. I liked that Bill found Emmaline but I would have liked to have seen them get close, and actually get that chance, as Narcissa and Charlie got. Overall, I liked what I read and that it was unlike anything I'd previously read.

Sorry to see you aren't writing fan fiction anymore. But if you are writing your own original material, continue. I think, from what I've read, you have an original mind with lots of ideas and I would like to see where that leads you.
Guest chapter 4 . 8/25/2014
There was a goat in the hogs head in fourth year when they first met to sign up D.A. members... coincidence? I THINK NOT
Guest chapter 3 . 8/25/2014
xyp chapter 15 . 8/25/2014
Oh my god I really hate Penelope. Well done. I hope Harry finds out about her soon enough. Stupid bitch. My thoughts on Ginny... well... stupid little girl who doesn't consider the consequences of her actions. I guess she'll be terribly sorry? I have to say I think your Molly and Ginny are fairly out of character (compared to canon) and their different behaviour can't be explained away by events that happened here but didn't in canon. But it's certainly entertaining.
xyp chapter 14 . 8/25/2014
LOVE the political scenery you created. Very well done. I'm always a bit prejudiced when I see that a story is involving the goblins too much - we all know the stories where Harry smiles at them friendly one time and they'll practically jump at the chance to help the great and friendly Harry Potter in any way possible. This was refreshing and new. read it, loved it, looking forward to more.
xyp chapter 13 . 8/25/2014
Really like Peter. I mean he's totally bonkers but it's something different for once. In Harry's place I would've wanted to keep Susan's involvement with me to stay hidden as long as possible, to keep her safe. Rufus and proactive Harry are great. Rowling said more than once that she isn't great with Maths, even got a few dates on family trees wrong, so I guess there lies the root to her unrealistic monetary system.
xxx chapter 9 . 8/25/2014
I don't really like character bashing - and in my opinion that's kind of what you do with all these secret schemes Dumbledore, Molly and Lily pulled off. At least they still have (kind of) Harry's best interest at heart. I'm really curious how you will deal with the Severus-Lily situation.
xxx chapter 7 . 8/25/2014
If Percy dies regardless it would be kind of useful if he killed himself before the ritual. If he defies the oath he dies, but that won't matter anymore if he went that route. I like the story. Glad it is finished.
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