|Reviews for To Fight The Coming Darkness|
| kkeenergirl chapter 41 . 9/14/2014
I liked the story, in part because it was very AU and in part because you thought outside the box and didn't use Ginny or Hermione as Harry's love interest. I loved the Narcissa/Charlie subplot, different and inventive. I liked that Neville wasn't used as a shadow to the boy who lived but its sad that he couldn't find a little love or family of his own. I liked that Bill found Emmaline but I would have liked to have seen them get close, and actually get that chance, as Narcissa and Charlie got. Overall, I liked what I read and that it was unlike anything I'd previously read.
Sorry to see you aren't writing fan fiction anymore. But if you are writing your own original material, continue. I think, from what I've read, you have an original mind with lots of ideas and I would like to see where that leads you.
| Guest chapter 4 . 8/25/2014
There was a goat in the hogs head in fourth year when they first met to sign up D.A. members... coincidence? I THINK NOT
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/25/2014
| xyp chapter 15 . 8/25/2014
Oh my god I really hate Penelope. Well done. I hope Harry finds out about her soon enough. Stupid bitch. My thoughts on Ginny... well... stupid little girl who doesn't consider the consequences of her actions. I guess she'll be terribly sorry? I have to say I think your Molly and Ginny are fairly out of character (compared to canon) and their different behaviour can't be explained away by events that happened here but didn't in canon. But it's certainly entertaining.
| xyp chapter 14 . 8/25/2014
LOVE the political scenery you created. Very well done. I'm always a bit prejudiced when I see that a story is involving the goblins too much - we all know the stories where Harry smiles at them friendly one time and they'll practically jump at the chance to help the great and friendly Harry Potter in any way possible. This was refreshing and new. read it, loved it, looking forward to more.
| xyp chapter 13 . 8/25/2014
Really like Peter. I mean he's totally bonkers but it's something different for once. In Harry's place I would've wanted to keep Susan's involvement with me to stay hidden as long as possible, to keep her safe. Rufus and proactive Harry are great. Rowling said more than once that she isn't great with Maths, even got a few dates on family trees wrong, so I guess there lies the root to her unrealistic monetary system.
| xxx chapter 9 . 8/25/2014
I don't really like character bashing - and in my opinion that's kind of what you do with all these secret schemes Dumbledore, Molly and Lily pulled off. At least they still have (kind of) Harry's best interest at heart. I'm really curious how you will deal with the Severus-Lily situation.
| xxx chapter 7 . 8/25/2014
If Percy dies regardless it would be kind of useful if he killed himself before the ritual. If he defies the oath he dies, but that won't matter anymore if he went that route. I like the story. Glad it is finished.
| xxx chapter 3 . 8/24/2014
I thought you were trying for a clichéd manipulative Dumbledore. Canon!Dumbledore always supported Harry's crazy saving-people adventures and would acknowledge that he saved a girl that night. Of course he would also be disappointed that Harry killed somebody. Anyway, nice chapter, I hope Dumbledore won't be too manipulative. Can't stand your Snape btw although I quite liked his canon version.
| xxx chapter 2 . 8/24/2014
I really enjoy reading about your Harry Potter. I always hate it when authors make Harry unable to lie to save his own life just because he's a Gryffindor. Considering his upbringing that's not really realistic. I mean while living with the Dursleys he probably had to lie from time to time. I also like how ruthless he is. And Snape, not to forget Snape. Quite curious how he will turn out in your story. Thanks for writing this.
| xypx chapter 41 . 8/26/2014
I liked your story save for the last Penny - Anthony - Voldemort part. Before that it was a good ending, not all was fine but it was a fresh, new outlook with new players and new problems. Bringing Voldemort back into the whole thing completely destroyed the whole purpose of the story - in 15 years time everything will start a new, everything Harry did, suffered and sacrificed was for naught because in the end Voldemort still somehow won. The whole fight didn't really make difference, only delayed a new one. I as a reader don't appreciate the feeling that everything I just read was a nice ride but in the end for nothing because everything is still the same. Voldemort will lie low for a few years, try to kill Harry, will try to take his family from him, will try to conquer the wizarding world. So to sum your story up: Harry got rebellious, lost a bunch of friends and loved ones, Voldemort survived (or at least his imprint) and start the same war in a few years time. I don't know about you but I appreciate some real change in the world I read after about 340 000 words. I'm ranting, but I just can't believe you could ruin a good story with an end like that. It's not that I don't like it because it's not a happy ending - Scrimgeour's plans point in the direction of war as well and I thought that was a brilliant idea- but because it means that your whole story is just a tragedy that resulted in nothing. Now the wizarding world is at exactly same point as it was when baby Harry first vanished Voldemort.
As for the rest of your story. I really liked it. It's amazing how much you wrote and that you finished it. I mostly liked your characterizations. Harry and Susan were great. I liked the portrait idea and the secret room. Penny's background story was a nice addition. I appreciate that you didn't wait for all major character deaths until the end, it was more realistic, you are describing a war after all. I think a few deaths (like Draco Malfoy's one) felt a bit forced and unnecessary though. The whole Longbottom plot was great, a totally different Neville and very well done. Thank you for writing such an amazing story.
| ArthurShade chapter 41 . 8/19/2014
A truly great story
| PTHC.FFN.CAD chapter 41 . 8/19/2014
To have read this far too late; a highly enjoyable read; some of the great things from this particular work
1) Characters and characterizations: coming off reading one of your more humorous piece "The Lie I've Lived" I am pleasantly surprised that you daring attempt switching some of the characters form light to dark (and vice versa) and succeed in developing those characters and explored them into great leaps and bounds (e.g., a twisted version of Penny Clearwater, what a treat! I originally thought you would have gone even more twisted; to have Voldemort impregnated her and only later to survived inside her taking the soul of the baby...or something)
2) The ensemble cast: not an easy feat consider you how you are able to create and make them interacting with one another
some of the things I consider less positives
1) The structure and the balance of the story: this is clearly up to each person; I personally find the part of story was going macabre too violently fast , there were pure comedy moments in the early part of the story (e.g., Peter Pettigrew's motivational speech were humorous, divinely so, so was the moment when Voldemort with the death telling crystal ball) that totally absent even in small dosage, just make me feel unbalanced
2) The ensemble cast: you have cramp many, many characters, I go so far to say too many; of many of the interactions are supremely done and bought closure but some of character did not (e.g., redemption of sort for Hermione Granger, Tonks' mental status and recovery, how has Nassica Malfoy developed her closeness with Charles Weasley...)
overall I would recommended this story last to other readers (or maybe I am just too addicted to your writing on "The Lie" "Bungle in the Jungle" way too much to do this piece a just review)
thank you for sharing your wonder work with us and good luck with your writing career and hopefully we the reader will able to see more of your creations on this site!
| Fast Frank chapter 8 . 8/8/2014
Objection: Sirius should not be familiar with the expression: "The whole nine yards" since it refers to something that a Pureblood would not be aware of. (Most don't even know what a movie is.)
| steffon22 chapter 2 . 7/7/2014
Loving thissss. Omg