Reviews for Harry Potter and the Tomb of Libitina |
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Lordheaven chapter 1 . 2/18/2006 Intersting, I've to admit. Homorfus charm - sounds interesting (well not like the vial of moonlight). You're sticking to the cannon nicely and the story flows. I'll be continuing to read. Good job. |
Rosie5 chapter 2 . 2/14/2006 Nice little touch with Fred and George's extendable ears. Good chapter, though the action sequence was rather sudden! Though i guess that could easily happen ... :) |
Rosie5 chapter 1 . 2/14/2006 This is pretty good. Written in a very good style and so it has a nice flow to it. There are places where you have totally captured Jk's style, and other's where the writing is a tad meandering, but it's good enough to detract from that. There are just a few grammer mistakes ("farther") but I'm sure that was just a slip, and a couple of places where the punctuation isn't completely correct, like using question marks in the right places. Having said that, you are setting up a good plot here, so the nit-picking above isn't really important. Good job. |
xdaedreemer chapter 8 . 2/12/2006 Wonderful! Bravo! Please keep adding more... I hav no idea whether you're a boy or girl.. but I'm guessing... Male. It was a very hard decision though... You write boys and girls really well, and your lookup gives no hints at all. If you're a girl I'm sorry if I got it wrong... Keep writing! -Claudia |
blueangel994 chapter 1 . 2/10/2006 very, very good, i liked it a lot! There were a few spelling and punctuational errors but hey, nobody's perfect. You are very immaginative and creative. I would read the other chapters but I have to go to class now. Please continue and keep up the good work! ~*blueangel*~ |
J.P. Luvvor chapter 8 . 2/5/2006 I love the change of title! And I think your a male. And there is one other thing, other than being prefect, that Ron always beat Harry at... it Wizards Chess! Every time they play, Ron wins. Every time! Any way, I hope, I pray, that the person at the gate is Albus Percivial Wolfric Brian Dumbledore, but I highly doubt it is... :( |
lifeisharsh chapter 3 . 1/24/2006 It's a good chapter, but I noticed a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. I know no one is perfect, but it might not be a bad idea to have someone proofread your chapters before you upload them. In fact, I probably should do that with my chapters as well. I hate these 0-10 scales, but I have to say that the trio and Ginny are at least 7 (Harry being the farthest from character-I don't think he'd tell Ginny about the horcruxes). I don't think you've written enough of the other characters yet to judge on how close they are to the book. |
lifeisharsh chapter 2 . 1/22/2006 Good chapter, but a bit short. |
Shealtiel chapter 8 . 1/21/2006 Axerton, I think your main problem with this story is that you have a whole lot of gramatical, spelling and typing mistakes. I think you should go over the chapters a little more thoroughly or get someone else (a friend or family member, or maybe a fellow FanFiction author or just one of your readers) to read over it and correct any mistakes you ay have throughout your writing. The plot is good though, although I think maybe you should put something rather more gripping into the actual plot. As in something that will make your readers say, "I want to come back and read this because she has put an intersting twist ino the plot that I never dreamed would happen." Anyway, all the best with this story, and please update soon! I remain yours faithfully, Shealtiel P.S. If you ant, I would be happy to check your stories for gramatical, spelling and typing errors if you need to find someone to do it for you. |
lifeisharsh chapter 1 . 1/20/2006 Good so far. A few misspellings, but nobody's perfect. |
Shealtiel chapter 1 . 1/20/2006 Axerton, It is now 2:02 a.m. where I am right now, and I haven't a chance to read the rest of your excellent story, but I would like to tell you that what I have read so far (Chapter 1) has been a delight. I hope to be able to read more soon! I remain yours faithfully, Shealtiel |
Her-My-Oh-Knee chapter 8 . 1/19/2006 Hey, great story. Thanks for reviewing on my story, love the reviews. Please update soon! |
The-Phanatics chapter 1 . 1/19/2006 This is absolutley marvelous! You are very skilled and I hope there is more to come from you. |
hedwig136 chapter 8 . 1/10/2006 THNX! |
Fallen-Angel189 chapter 8 . 1/10/2006 My apologies, I must have missed it! Hope to see you updating again soon, I will definitely be watching out for chapter 8. |