|Reviews for Finding My Sweetheart|
| Sonic The Hedgehog 4321 chapter 3 . 10/13/2013
The ending was an unexspected turn of events
| Dreamsand Caster 2 chapter 3 . 3/30/2013
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| Guest chapter 3 . 3/19/2013
nemo the saddiest episode of
| GOBSTOPPPER chapter 3 . 3/8/2012
writers block, eh? well i got some ideas for what could happen next:
- Coral could start yelling at him and marlin could try and explain.
- Coral could move in, awkardly.
- there could be rivalry between coral and dory.
hope it helped!
| whazzup3929 chapter 3 . 12/3/2011
| Exmoorpony chapter 3 . 7/31/2011
In order to review, I can't log into my Fanfiction account. The above name is my fanfiction account. :/
I love this idea! Except the wedding was a little weird and technically Marlin and Dory wouldn't have been able to have a kid. I love the idea of Coral coming back though. The bubbles guy is actually named Bubbles I think, and isn't a girl. The cleaner shrimp's name is Jacques. The white and black striped male fish with scars is Gill. The girl starfish is Peach. And I don't know the names of the other fish. The angelfish might be named Angel, but I don't remember quite. If you look on Wikipedia, it might list Finding Nemo and the characters. :)
Great story. I'll keep watching for more chapters, for sure!
| werefen2 chapter 3 . 6/27/2010
FYI, Bubbles, Gurgle, Bloat, Gill, and Jaques are all boys. Deb/Flo is a not sure wat Peach is.
| Registered2Comment chapter 3 . 5/23/2009
Oh, I disgust myself. XD It was too late last night when I wrote that. I meant, "who and what each of the members IS!" ;;
| Registered2Comment chapter 1 . 5/22/2009
To all: just so you know who/what each of the Tank Gang members are!
Well, obviously you know Gill (the Moorish Idol leader.) But everyone else...
Peachthe starfish (female)
Debthe damselfish with her "sister-reflection" Flo (female)
Bubblesthe bubble-obsessed yellow tang (male)
Gurglethe germophobic royal gramma (male)
Bloatthe porcupine pufferfish (male)
Jacquesthe French shrimp (male)
| Justin chapter 3 . 5/9/2009
Don't listen to the *in people who don't like your 's good!Some mistakes but you can do it!I think the names are Deb for the "reflection" fish,Bubbles for the bubbly fish,bloat For the puffer,Jaques for the crab/lobster one,and thats what I on chapter 3 and waiting for chapter 4!
| Gilbert Winchester chapter 2 . 3/19/2009
HOLD UP CHICA!
dory said in finding nemo that she didn't remember if she even had a family. lol! whats up with that? anyway, this is very entertaining so far. good job! XD
| 1xbabiegal chapter 3 . 8/19/2007
Hey I love your storie I can read as much as I can. Its so romantic and really good. I hope you'll write more...!
| Mel chapter 3 . 7/18/2007
To Flamers: People, if you don't want to read it, don't flame it. This is a nice story and there's nothing wrong with underwater spaghetti, so just get over it.
To Author: Nicely done. This has a few minor spelling mistakes (nothing that interferes with the 'awesomeness' of your story) but I can't wait for you to post Chapter 3. Don't listen to flamers; they just want attention. Nothing but writing bullies. Anyway, glad to see romance between Marlin and Dory; I love this movie and wonder a lot about that! (P.S. The Finding Nemo people are making a SEQUEL! A Finding Nemo 2! Can't wait to see what he gets himself into next!)
:) Please Keep Writing! :)
| Ariels Lament chapter 3 . 2/28/2007
First things first...I am a huge fan of fanfiction both writing and reading, though this account has nothing posted yet, and I don't like flamers any more than the next writer. So I want you to know that I don't intend to do that. I'd just like to give you some sound advice to try to help out with more constructive criticism.
As an avid fan of the type of writing, I have to completely disagree with what Tajita said. The story making sense is a HUGE part of a successful fanfic. If it doesn't make any sense or has little similarity with the actual story it's based on, it can't really be called a fanfic. These So called 'fanfics' are what gives this type of writing a name that makes other writers not take fanfiction serioiusly and merely scoff at the idea. The most difficult part of this type of writing, is that the characters and settings are alread pre-defined for you. Oftentimes pulling this off takes a bit of research: from wikipedia, re-watching the movie to look for details, or doing a bit of homework on their surroundings and perhaps even their species. (Like how only clownfish can live in anemones, Dory's short term memory loss, clownfish and regal blue tangs are unable to reproduce with one another.)
Though imagination is good and crucial to a story, changing the material from the way it was presented in the movie is not a great idea, as the aim of a fanfic is to present a believable story that seems as if the animators had added on sequels or filled in earlier gaps. The imagination all goes into the plot of the story, not the way everything is set up. So even though furniture, cooking hamburgers, drinking water and watching tv all underwater was okay in Spongebob, the events of Finding Nemo were never set up like that. And a good, believable fanfic will have to respect what has been given in the actual story. So...Malaysian Gal says that fish have no eyelids and can't blink? Well, true as that may be, the fish in Finding Nemo WERE able to blink...so you held true to the material the movie presented in that aspect. However, I must say that knowing all of the characters that will be in your story is important as well...a little research and a few questions before posting goes a long way. PM someone that you've seen has written a story on the subject, and see if they know...and wikipedia usually has character lists for different games/animes/movies...
Anyhow, that's all for now, and I hope that you actually read through this. Your descriptions are actually very nicely written and the scene where coral came back was well done...I believe you have potential as a writer, I just hope I was able to say something to help you on the way...
| Tortall Tribe Freak chapter 2 . 1/28/2007
this is a really good story IGNORE ALL THE FLAMERS cos they don't give ur story enough credit