Reviews for Grand Theft Auto: Breaking the Vice of Liberty
RobClose chapter 1 . 12/25/2005
Thanks guys for the great helpful reviews i guess they are a bit hasty, although i wont change these as i want to show me how my writing progresses i have re writtern the chapters i plan to post soon to include more detail. I am also working on a Tom Clancy Style Fic for everyone out there... with plenty of detail ;)
tactik chapter 1 . 12/25/2005
I didn't have time to read the second and third chapters, but the first is definitely good. The plot is great, but you really need to work on the detail. It came way too fast that Tommy had gone from the Vercetti Estate to Stauton island in the first ten lines. So the only thing you need to do is move it slower. But good nonetheless.
Mr. Julio chapter 1 . 12/11/2005
Great Plot. Not enought detail. It jumps around to much. Overall I give it a C.