|Reviews for KotOR: Marisu Saves The Day!|
| Partsu chapter 1 . 4/29/2015
I can't continue, please go without me! ow my stomach is bleeding from laughing too much...
| Gray Shadow chapter 1 . 3/14/2013
I can't hear Carth's voice at all...I'm hearing some sort of deep baritone instead! Ha! I can't even recognize the guy! GJ!
| machievelli chapter 1 . 7/3/2012
Supposed to have been posted 15 October 2011, at and the Coruscant Entertainment Center in my The Critic's Two Cents. but I had problems with my computer, and flaked on attaching these reviews to the original story threads for the last year. Everyone say; 'Mach is a flake, Mach is a yo-yo'. Better yet (Waves hand) 'Mach is trying, but he's still a flake'.
Some of the work I read is what I consider professional class. These are marked as Picks of the Week. Go to to find the best of the week.
KOTOR on Endar Spire: The beginning with a twist.
For those who don't know the term Mary Sue is literal slang for a character in a series that outperforms all of the established characters and always knows more than they do. If you have read my Dxun memories, I was accused of creating one when my Exile lectures Revan (Who I had decided was a naval genius) on ground tactics. I didn't know what I expected with this title, and I would have been wrong to just say a 'Mary Sue'.
The character fits the name and characterization, coming across as a mixture of Lara Croft and a Valley girl. Upset because Trask is too busy gaping at her rather than moving the story along; killing a number of Sith with only one shot, and saving the female Jedi is only the start. I didn't have time to read the other segments but with this as a start, you have some fun time ahead! I especially enjoyed Bastila becoming Bitchila.
Pick of the Week
| I redact chapter 1 . 11/29/2009
I redact my prior statement. Upon further reading and analyzing I've come to the conclusion that this is a decently written parody. But as far as "fan-fic" parodies go, it could use a bit of work. The way that it's written makes it seem like it's just terrible fan-fic. If you were able to differentiate yourself from the bottom of the worst, it would hold much better. The tone is that of a junior high star wars nerd, tone is everything. If you elevate the tone and retain the audacious name scheme and awkward descriptions, then the parody may ring much truer.
| just horrible chapter 1 . 11/29/2009
there's no redeemable quality to this. I might suggest playing the game, learning to spell, learning the mythos and learning basic writing skills.
| LostThyme chapter 1 . 7/1/2009
You seriously need to write more of this. This is one of the few fanfictions I've gone back to read more than once.
| GeekGirl2 chapter 3 . 6/29/2009
Y'know, this story is *ahem* 'good' enough that it got honored on in their Parody Sue category. ;) I was laughing my head off the whole way. :)
Why are you not continuing it? ;) If the comedy can be kept up (if you haven't, get the Bastila on Korriban mod, there's a TON of more funny stuff right in game with that), it'd be great! :D
| Illyria's Acolyte chapter 3 . 3/9/2009
My hat goes off to your wonderfully executed Parody Sue. Many Lulz were had during the reading of this story. I would love to see this get updated if you have the time/energy to expand it into the entire KOTOR.
| a firebug chapter 3 . 8/5/2008
This is a brilliant parody - I haven't laughed so hard for a long time. Especially at the "" paragraph breaks.
| Somewhat Less Ultimate Aries chapter 1 . 8/1/2008
I understand that this is a parody, but 4'6"? These little girls actually think that's *natural* for an adult? To quote an author for Livejournal, sweet zombie Christ on a pogo stick, it's worse than I thought!
| Star Platinum chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
LOL, great parody of the female Revan Sue fics.
But you better not bastardize HK-47, even if it is for parody's sake
| The Lark chapter 3 . 7/28/2008
"A/N: It's AU,all right? AU!"
"Oh no, Revan was great. Apart from the whole Dark Side thing."
And all the characters hating on "Bitchila". This was great! Rock on!
| Chasing Liquor chapter 2 . 6/7/2008
Some of this is spot-on and hilarious, though I don't think the Mary-Su writers despise Bastila THAT much. Very comical, though. Your scene break made me laugh aloud:
| Nexus Prime chapter 3 . 5/2/2008
the random force-smash into the nearest wall was hilarious
and when she broke the light barrier, lol
of course, it does get a bit nauseating, but since it's the entire point of the story, it makes it funny. well done!
| Nexus Prime chapter 1 . 5/2/2008
this is great
I like the part where the Sith commit elaborate ritual suicide instead of fighting the character. that was witty and awesome.
going to read the next chapter now.