Reviews for Practice
anulka406 chapter 1 . 8/29/2011
Lol! I don't make reviews, but I will make an exception this time. When I read the description and then the beginning of the story I loled. You see, I often use this trick in my imagination... "Let's practice kissing" and then one thing leads to another. This is just perfect for getting Ren and Horo start something. Anyway, I find this story quite enjoyable. The sex description with all those details about feelings is great. Yet I think to put member in anus is not so quick as you described it. Escpecially for the first time it needs time. I don't have experience with anal to be completely sure, but I think so. And technically you lack commas. I wasn't sure what's going on at some points. I still like the story a lot, though. It's just an ordinary sex-oneshot to enjoy :)

Sorry for my english.
Soul of Shaman chapter 1 . 12/12/2009
That was very adorable! There were some spelling errors and some gramatical errors that could be fixed, but all-in-all, I really liked it.
BBPanda chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
I Loved it. I simply loved it.

But you need to work on some things, OK? You need to learn where to put comma's and other things like that. I got confused a lot during the story. But other then that, I Loved it!
SeekingSolaceProject chapter 1 . 11/22/2007
...that was really cute...though I'd kill Horo if I were Ren! xD Still cute nonetheless...xD Hm...good story...and it was a really good um...transition from just kissing to the real thing!
Micuko chapter 1 . 11/13/2007
Hahah, interesting
kakashiluveriam chapter 1 . 10/28/2006
don't mind my name some of the letters are capitalized, i'm just too lazy... by the way kawaii fic! Nicely done!
cpthe chapter 1 . 6/25/2006
haha..the excuse was actually horo-horo made it up..thats a good one well anyways really like your stories D..its funny and really sweet...and fluffy i suppose well keep making stories..hehe P
celesteialgirl24 chapter 1 . 3/18/2006
that was soo cute! horo made it all up. hes so clever! ren can be scary sometimes too! but go horo. that was a great story! thank you for writting a great hororen fic.

please write more!
Bishop Sasarai chapter 1 . 2/20/2006
That was very well written, but (there's that awful BUT word), I don't like to write "yay, that was cute" reviews, so here goes: (and by the way, this is NOT A FLAME)

I love lemons, and yours was actually one of the better ones I've read. I usually don't like them to happen so fast (in some cases it just don't make sense and I'm actually not a porn lover; i.e. a fic about sex with a transparent plot is really lame to me), but this WAS a oneshot, so sex in the first chapter was ineveitable. Plus, you explained that they had been friends for awhile, and they had been going to each others houses for a long time. So, it wasn't a random sexual encounter like some I've read. I like how you lead up to it with a very Horo-like story about the lesbians, and I really like how I could see Horo and Ren exchanging the dialogue they did.

Now, my one complaint that led to the BUT. You need to remember punctuation. It seemed you kept forgetting the periods. That was a little distracting to what was otherwise a VERY good story. Your language was used well, and the story flowed as a oneshot should.

Anyway, here I am ranting like some kinda expert; my stories aren't so well written, and they have the right punctuation (probably _). So, know that despite the perido-less-ness, you are a great author, and keep going and improving!
HyuugaVSUchiha chapter 1 . 1/6/2006
LEMON! lemon is one of the things i live for!thank you!
your pingu chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
AW! o warm fluffies all around! *wants to hug horo and ren for being so uber-cute but decides they'd not like that so instead cuddles you* BOOBOO! talk to you later Penguin!

XOXOXOXO
Froffify chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
aw blesses _ tht was DED sweet for ickle horo lol
KittyKalika chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
-sqee- I LOVE IT! ITS SO SWEET! -glomps ren and horo plushie- Good job! Make more!

1# Fan!
AmePiper chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
Squiz: -sparkles- That was so Kawaii!

Ame: Yeh! A really good lemon.

Squiz: I liked Horo's ex-...Ame...did you change th music?

Ame: No...

Squiz:...then why is it playing...barenaked ladies-pinch me?

Ame: ...-looks at list- Beacuse the list has changed, it goes corrs then them duds...

Squiz: Oh...-looks back to review page-...Crap!

Ame: Oops...we just wrote all that. Sorry, we're wasting your time. lol.

Squiz:-rolls eyes- Anywho! This was a really really cute one -shot, and really well writen, I really like it.

Ame: We love everything you do gift-of-the-elves!

Squiz: -nods- uh-huh. We hope to see more of your fics in the near near near future! -
Netami chapter 1 . 12/28/2005
Perfect! Plot, everything! I LOVE IT!
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