|Reviews for If I Had Words|
| 1wngdngl chapter 1 . 7/30/2012
A short and sweet little fic, a bit sad but hopeful too. I really wish there was an ending where things turned out alright for the time-tossed siblings, just to see what they might say to each other. Nice of Lucca to lend an ear to his musings.
| Zaichik Arky chapter 1 . 3/20/2009
Hey I liked your fic! It was short, but you did a good job with a well-thought out conversation between Lucca and Magus. Well-done!
| Mertiya chapter 1 . 7/26/2006
Nice job! I really like this story. I'm not an insane LuMa fan myself, actually, although I'm writing a story with that pairing in it now and I think it can be done, if the age difference is properly addressed/nullified, but what you've written is really very much rarer-a good sympathetic conversation between two people who obviously have no romantic interest in each other but still have the capacity to become friends. Ten out of ten! It was excellently written, too.
| Paige chapter 1 . 7/21/2006
Aw! This is a great look at Magus feelings. You did a wonderful job with this.
| Iced Blood chapter 1 . 6/27/2006
I'm always one for a constructive review (when I actually get around to writing one), and it's very rare that I can find a story with which I find no fault. The only thing I could possibly say about this that could be construed as criticism is that "straightforward" is one word, while you have it written as two. And really...that's pretty lame of me.
Anyway, it's rather rare (for me, anyway) to find CT fanfiction that's worth anything, and every once in a while I find myself looking around. This one kind of hit me by surprise, and I'm glad I found it. Most Magus/Lucca stories I've seen have a romantic angle, and while I don't particularly mind the pairing (it's one of the only two involving Magus that have real legitimacy, in my mind), it's refreshing to see one that isn't.
Very well written, as well. I especially liked the comparison of Magus to the undead, and the final line: "Everything." Just seems to encompass...well, everything. Very powerful, that single word.
Also, as a Magus fanatic (I've worshipped him ever since a friend of mine let me borrow the game about nine years ago), I'm impressed with your characterization. It's spot-on perfect, I think. Sure, there's not much as far as character development in the game itself, but I think all us Magus fans have agreed upon certain facets of his personality, and you have them all.
I think it's a shame that this story has so few reviews, but I suppose that's to be expected...this entire section of the site seems rather lacking to me in that regard. In any case, though, I just felt I had to tell you that you have an excellent writing style and I really enjoyed this work.
Lastly...I don't know if you'd be particularly interested, but I've been working on a Magus story of my own for a while, called "Anything But This." I'd appreciate feedback from a fellow Magus fan, and especially one with talent like yours. Thanks in advance if you decide to help me out.
Again, great work. I applaud you.
~ Iced Blood
| Ja ne Kat chapter 1 . 5/9/2006
i like it. it fits him. he doesn't say much but leaves the answer vague and mysterious. i kinda like to see someone write a sequel to this just so we'd have answer
| Zipis1 chapter 1 . 1/7/2006
Actual LuMa or not, it goes on my favorites list. You write beautifully, and I was particularly fond of these few lines:
"His heart was still beating, but he had died years ago, and there was no rest for the undead"
"Recent events were the first I’ve ever heard of Janus of Zeal.” Magus wound the chain about his neck through his fingers, pursing his lips. “Nothing but a dead memory,” he said finally.“Memories don’t die, Janus,”
I loved the interaction between the two. It was light yet dark. You could really feel the sympathy Lucca had for Magus.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
| RPLG chapter 1 . 1/7/2006
I agree with your assessment of Magus and Lucca's relationship. I never thought Lucca felt sympathy for Janus, but I digress.
I encourage you in your further writing endeavours (CT and otherwise).
| Wes Janson chapter 1 . 1/6/2006
good 1shot fic.
Like how you did Magus/Lucca. You got Magus dead on.
| Daryl Falchion chapter 1 . 1/5/2006
My but that's a lovely little fic. The descripiton is light but that makes it that much more effective. The dialogue is in character. The only issue I have with the story is that it sometimes there dialgoue tags that seem unnecessary. That's such a minor complaint though, and I certainly wish to see more of your work.
| Keeper of Shattered Mirrors chapter 1 . 1/4/2006
Truly beautiful and emotional. *smiles* Your skill never ceases to amaze me. I think I felt every emotion in this peace. Good job, ma. *huggles*