|Reviews for The Old Walls Crumble|
| Moewe24aol.com chapter 12 . 2/12
What an excellent story, such a treasure I'd never expected to find when browsing through the list of pre-DH-stories! Obviously I did not find it before because it is not registered as romance, so it passed my filter. But now I'm reading with bated breath. It has got everything... suspense, action, romance, some nice intimate moments without being to explicit, and Jenny is a wonderful character you invented. Just great! She's so NORMAL after all, so like you and me.. well, at least I can safely say: like me ;) it's so easy to identify with her and to see everything through her eyes. I've only just found one other OFC before that compares, who is so normal, so likeable, so very much NOT a Mary Sue, and that would be Zelda of the Severus-and-Zelda series of stories of Madam Emilie D. But she does not continue writing either... why do all of you wonderful authors who write such great OFC's not write anymore? It's such a pity, but surely there's a reason. I do hope you are well!
| etherian chapter 19 . 12/12/2008
Marvelously brilliant story! Jenny is perfect and so very well defined. I also quite like that she's not a cute, perky, 16 year old! LOL
| The Fluffy Ball chapter 19 . 6/19/2007
Honestly, I'm surprised that you didn't get more reviews. It is one of the best fics with an OFC I have ever read. You should be really proud of churning out such gold in a timely matter. Kudos to you.
Jenny is absolutely adorable. Lucius opening an internet cafe is... odd. Snape as a daddy made the world feel right.
There were one or two parts that didn't seem to fit, but as I didn't write them down, I forgot what those were.
Are you from northern England? If not, you really have your facts right. Not that I have room to judge, as I'm from the US (The northeastern US, which in my opinion has a similar culture to northern England, but I digress).
Ah well, I'll shut up now. Great story.
| Caeryn Lae chapter 19 . 5/30/2007
I absolutely loved your story, it was perfect!
| wynnleaf chapter 12 . 4/6/2007
Your device to introduce Krum into the story works quite well. And all of the scenes with Jenny coming to Grimmauld Place, the confrontations with the Malfoys, Snape, and Krum at Grimmauld Place, etc. all are nicely done.
| wynnleaf chapter 9 . 4/6/2007
Well done suspense!
Also, I like your Snape being perfectly at home with common food.
| wynnleaf chapter 7 . 4/6/2007
Lucius' decision makes a lot of sense. I could never see why returning to Voldemort in GOF was any advantage for Lucius, who was doing quite well for himself and his family with Voldemort out of the picture. I've wondered if Snape "start" at Harry mentioning Lucius in the graveyard in GOF was because Snape didn't expect Lucius to return to Voldemort.
Anyway, good chapter.
| wynnleaf chapter 5 . 4/6/2007
Sometimes it's hard to remember internet possibilities of 10 years ago. Still, many libraries in the states and in the UK will let you use their computers without a library card - although you do have to sign in. I used some in UK libraries just last year - no card. That's a minor quibble, of course. But since a lot of the story seems to be going to include internet usage, I thought I'd mention it.
Snape actually seems pretty in character, especially since he's not having to deal with students and living under the immediate scrutiny of people on both sides.
I like your OC. She's believable and I thought your making her connection to Snape be a shared history in school very realistic.
| wynnleaf chapter 3 . 4/6/2007
Just found this story and am much enjoying it. I'm glad you had Karkarof be dead. I thought you'd just made a mistake earlier.
I like the way you move back and forth between what's going on with Snape and what's going on with Harry.
| whitehound chapter 18 . 3/17/2007
The ceremony sounds convincing, and I like tghe idea that the tomb is visible in the Muggle world, even though it looks like an old grave.
| whitehound chapter 15 . 3/16/2007
Blast - I thought I was the only person to come up with the idea that Voldie was Harry's Horcrux instead of or as well as vice versa!
| whitehound chapter 10 . 3/16/2007
He'd be much better for not being so lonely, I think.
| whitehound chapter 9 . 3/16/2007
Exciting developments - and now he's got to add a breach of the statute of secrecy to his other problems. I loved Molly working out where Ron was.
Btw, as far as I know "chippie" and "carry out" are purely Scottishisms. I can personally testify (having lived 22 years in Scotland and 26 in England, mainly down south) that in the south of England they say "fish shop" and "take away", and I am assured by a friend from Derby that in the north of England it's "fish and chip shop" and "take out".
| whitehound chapter 6 . 3/16/2007
A nice simple, safe way of passing a message.
Btw, why would he go to the trouble and expense of equipping Draco with such a very obvious pseudonym as Drago Malakral - one which just screams "I'm really Draco Malfoy"? Wouldn't he have been better to pass him off as Ivan Zhivkov or whatever?
| whitehound chapter 5 . 3/16/2007
Snape seems perfectly in character. We've been shown in the books that he's capable of being quite pleasant to people he likes - he just doesn't like many people.