|Reviews for The Thirteenth Colony|
| EvilTheLast chapter 21 . 12/12/2013
Just read it in one read. Good story.
| chain.reader chapter 21 . 7/4/2013
If this is finished you may want to mark it as 'complete' in the system...
| tco99123 chapter 3 . 7/1/2013
The Twelve colonies all existed in the same system, thus any scan of the system would have revealed all the colonies. There would have been more than just the small group of survivors on Caprica than those lead by those of Sam Anders, it may have made more sense if there had been only those few around the capital city Caprica city. Also this is clearly the Pegasus galaxy which was dominated by the Wraith exclusively for over 10,000 years, the Wraith did not allow other civilazations to grow to a point where they might challenge them. This is why it was a poor idea to place the colonials in the Pegasus galaxy in your fic. Since the SGC have intergalactic travel capability it would have been sensible to make this an entirely new galaxy or at the least leave them in the milky way. The Goa'uld cared little for exploration for it's own sake and many civilizations had buried their gates long ago to escape Goa'uld dominion, so this again supports the possibilty of the colonials existing in the milky way. Also the Goa'uld power base was in the milky way, and considering the fact the Wraith do not tolerate any challenge any to their dominance and the fact that Jaffa and Goa'uld hosts are all a viable food source for them, it is again difficult to envisage the Wraith and Goa'uld occupying the same galaxy. Finally the Hyperspace travel, does not require hops or jumps as you call it. They do not have to exit hyperspace like Wraith ships. Hyperspace is only limited by the speed at which you can travel through it, as well as the crew resources needed to support prolonged expeditions. That said, I also feel you have gotten Tigh's character down well. I personally feel that the SG1 characters have always been 1 dimensional anyway, but if you can write the colonials as well as you have so far, this fic could get very intense very quickly!
Sorry for the long review but, many writers often complain of one sentence reviews without anything constructive in them. Hope this helps and is appropriate.
| tco99123 chapter 2 . 7/1/2013
This is not the 1980's foreigners don't even say Da and Ja in movies anymore. Also a battlestar should have been a hell of a lot bigger than a Prometheus class vessel. The landing pods alone would have made up a large chunk of the Prometheus' volume. There are a few too many relatives in this fic serving together, even if you except that a dedicated career woman and an old man would have that many children, the chances that they would all follow such familiar career paths as well as reach such promising positions in their respective areas while their parents are also still active, makes it difficult to suspend disbelief. But this is a good idea for fic, and I'm eager to read the rest of this, so I will!
| Just a Crazy-Man chapter 21 . 1/4/2013
| chain.reader chapter 13 . 7/26/2012
Rings can't pass through solid matter (ship's hull) unless there's a receiving platform at the other end.
Using rings in a clear line-of-sight target to deliver cargo is one thing, but what you described is quite off. (near ..."Lex caught a flash of light in the hanger bay")
And again you're misrepresenting the FTL methods of the two fleets, the BSG fleet uses near-instant 'jumps'; the Stargate ships use hyperspace, (near ..."we'll almost be at Atlantis")...
| chain.reader chapter 3 . 7/26/2012
ough, you're completely murdering the FTL used in stargate ships... it's not jumps a'la BSG, it's hyperspace...
| Andy-025 chapter 15 . 11/29/2010
Well Anubis that is at lest more original thab Ibis
| alokin chapter 21 . 10/3/2010
But too sweet at the end ...
Seriously , Im getting diabetes from it ...
| Neodammarung the Destroyer chapter 21 . 8/13/2010
Whatever happened to Sheppard and Co.? It would have been nice to see them!
| Sithking Zero chapter 13 . 5/11/2010
In your story, you mention the BC303 class of ships (AKA the Prometheus' class) a lot. In your story, is there the BC304 class (the Deadalus, Apollo, Korolev, Sun Tzu, General Hammond, Phoenix, and the Odyssey), as cannonically that was the next stage of development from the 303?
| witch20 chapter 21 . 1/19/2010
I love it!
| beldarath69 chapter 20 . 3/8/2009
Just finished the story and I must say it was outstanding. Are you going to do more stories like this one?
| beldarath69 chapter 4 . 3/2/2009
Normally I like to review after I have the entire story or up to what has been released. I must say that I really liked how you ended this one. Hope the rest of the story is just as interesting. Keep up the good work.
| Ranger24 chapter 15 . 2/10/2009
honestly kara was right.