Reviews for A Shattered Prophecy |
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Sonorous Serendipity chapter 26 . 12/1/2012 The story was fantastic and very thought provoking. Thank you. |
Regina-Ryddle chapter 26 . 11/29/2012 I loved your history! It was difficult for me (my enghlis is very poor :S ) but I really enjoyed it |
Queen of Corners chapter 26 . 11/8/2012 Hm... interesting. You've put this sign off AN months ago and I still see the stories here. I'm proud of you. Now, I don't mean for this to be sarcastic mean or anything like it, but I think it's a little bit silly of you to get upset about people judging your writing from ages ago. Sure, maybe it's not all perfect, but nothing is perfect. I actually liked the story. Well, I liked it until you went and rushed at the end. Let's just say that the last chapters were something I never entirely understood. I still don't get how it ended, but I guess I'm just satisfied with having my own ending in my head. Not that that one makes any sense. Either way, you had a good idea, good plot and great motivation until someone else went up and stole it. As upsetting as it is, don't you think it is also an ego booster? I mean, if someone went out of their way to copy your plot, it must be a great plot, right? Right. Both Voldemort and Harry here act in a way they should be acting... in the story circumstances, I guess. While I really hated that you rushed it up so much and messed it in the end, it was still something to remember. I'll be honest and say that I did go and read the other story and while the style (I'm not going to criticize that as you said you're writing for a living, so I'm guessing you already know your past mistakes) is better, plot-wise your story is on a scale from one to ten a solid hundred. In positive sense, of course. Relationships in the story are also well done. Now, I hope I'm not reopening some old wounds or something like that, I just wanted to show my appreciation for the story and say that it inspired my own plot idea. Mind you, it's not yet near its time to be published, but so far so good. And no, there's nothing similar to your plot aside from Harry being loyal to Voldie... sort of. I do hope you'll read this review and I thank you for a good story. |
Poet Wroet chapter 26 . 10/14/2012 I don't really know what to think about this story. I came upon this story by reading the three one-shots by VoldemortCan'tStopTheRock (or without the ', I don't know) based upon Kurinoone's trilogy, then I read Kurinoone's trilogy and now I have read this one. I think Kurinoone's is better, because it has more character depth and I can understand almost everything that happens there. That's not the case here. By the way, I think the few fights in the earlier chapters (up to and including Harry's capture) were lousy. They seemed to consist of three spells a fight, and that's just not realistic. I have a way of writing chaotic reviews and only pointing out the bad things, for that I am sorry. The two things I liked most was that Harry was without purpose near the end, sort of: I mean the emotion/something that is most prominent after he kills Dumbledore. Who is a git, by the way. The other thing I liked very much was that Harry stayed true to the Dark etc, something I was seriously miffed at that didn't happen with Kurinoone's. (not that I want to compare everything or something like that, just wanted to tell you how badly I wanted that to happen) I would probably have liked your story a great deal more had I understood more of what was going on at certain points. For example, I believe when James is staring at Harry and Harry promises not to kill James if he stops staring, Harry suddenly grins. Or he quite suddenly and, - in my opinon - without needing it, opens up. He lets Lily play with his hair, etcetera. Perhaps it is that it just does not fit in with what I wanted Harry to be at some points. Also we don't see much of Dorian, he only appears a few times but it appears as if there has been more interaction. There is just no description of that, which is also a point I'd like to make: you write scenes, but you don't connect them. There are about three interactions between Dorian and Harry, and nowhere do you say that they have interacted in between - no passing comment or something, nothing iat all/i, and then they suddenly appear reasonably close after Dorian has not been mentioned for a few chapters, that could have been better, I think. By the way, according to the time references I could pick up, Harry was at Hogwarts for less than two weeks, is that true? I would have preferred a little more indication. That reply to that Auror that takes over when James is Wizard's Baned, that he's paid to follow Harry around, had me in hysterics. Brilliant. By the way, Jonas should be a Puff. I seriously like that guy. So, in my typical fashion, I write reviews that make no sense and probably leave you with a bitter taste, although I did like your story. Harry's emotions/something in the last few chapters - with the climax at Dumbles' dead, those emotions - were quite well written, fitting and interesting. |
Poet Wroet chapter 24 . 10/14/2012 Does Harry kill someone at the end there or what? |
jane chapter 26 . 10/12/2012 u r immensely talented. ur plot is well constructed. i loved the direction where the story moved. i liked the ideas u put in the story. there are so few good fanfiction out there. urs had unparalleled depth which i found very intriguing and lacking in other stories. i hope u continue writing. |
ironhair chapter 1 . 10/7/2012 Reading |
HoosierCullen chapter 25 . 9/20/2012 I liked this story and no matter what others may have said about it you had a good one here don't let the ignorance of others get in the way of what you believe in. If you ever decide to write more HP fanfics I would be happy to read them you seem to have a good way of telling a story contrary to what others have said. |
old-crow chapter 26 . 9/12/2012 Hi, I liked it. Thank You for sharing your story. Old-Crow |
old-crow chapter 2 . 9/12/2012 Hi, The story has a great concept. My only suggestion for the second chapter would be to add a date at the beginning, so we have some idea if your Harry is 12 or 16. Old-Crow |
Yaraslava Rada chapter 26 . 8/31/2012 It's saddening to hear that you're going to remove your stories, I have only read this one, but I enjoyed it, regardless of anyone's criticisms. I'm glad I had the chance to read it before you remove it. |
Analyn 100 chapter 26 . 8/29/2012 Okay, so I'm a Kurinoone fan, through and through. That being said I find it hard to call what she wrote "Plagiarizing" since it's FANFIC. Pretty much anyone who writes fanfic is "plagiarizing" the original author JK Rowling and she did credit your story as her inspiration both in the fanfic chapters themselves and on her profile. But that being said, yours is awesome. I especially like Harry's reflection on the way things could have been in his confrontation with Neville and Dumbledore's reflection that Harry could not bear to kill someone on his own agenda. The most touching part was his giving Jonas to the Potters, thereby giving that boy the childhood that had been stolen from him. Absolutely amazing. Please don't take it down. I would love to see this finished. |
Cneasaigh chapter 26 . 8/26/2012 Loved the story and its 's too bad we won't get to see the end. |
Guest chapter 1 . 8/17/2012 I don't typically leave reviews, but in response to your taking down your fics: I understand. Thank you for sharing your stories with us. I wish you the best in all your future pursuits. |
mjkcsk chapter 10 . 8/13/2012 you should totally not takee this down! it's AMAZING! Keep posting! |