...writen well and with sense of emotion. But I'm not sure if the realism in this case was for the good. Usually I say never hold back reality or turn a blind eye, here despite some of the tenderness it just all felt wrong in every sense. Maybe it's exactly your aim - however the whole talking about his father WHILE he takes her is just...a little over the top of neccessary.

Awh man this was a sweet story, It's a shame it ended there, would love to see another chapter for this, heck even a sequil to it would work, verry emotional, espetialy for Rei, keep up the good work

good story..

if you do a follow-up chapter read "I hate you father"

Great alternate to your other story! I like this one better... I really dont like the triangle going on in your first fic, it seems like the poor guy is torn between the girl he loves to please the other, but thats just me.. Great job!

I thought the story itself was very well written. I will make one request though. Please don't let it end this way. I hate reading that Rei was hurt like that. Please redeem Shinji and make him come back. I am begging you. Please consider this for me.

nicely done.

this is story is real sad why you wirte such sad story? and i will tell you to write other chapter and meke it a happy ending but this is much better i love this ending

Hmm... Mixed emotions on this one. While it is out of character for Shinji, it didn't seem that too far off given that Shinji was forced to murder one of his only friends. The whole time I was waiting for Rei to tell him to stop or respond in some way. Thinking back to the episode where Shinji fell on top of Rei, and given how long it took her to tell him to get off, she probably wouldn't say anything. Overall, not bad, but not great. Given the nature of the story though, that's not surprising.

wow...that's deep and...so sad...well anyways, that's all from me. i could see ways she could stop him but...then again with her current state i don't think she would ever do that. now that's really all from me

Cheers Ja ne

Holy shit! I've kept up with this story from the beginning and this alt-chapter is fucking amazing. That was so sad! Rei's life found meaning and lost it in all of 10 minutes. Very well written and completely evil.

That was...good. Sad, but good. I haven't yet read all of 'Only In Your Eyes Am I Worthy' yet, and I really don't care if this is a spoiler. Drama like this is rather hard to come by, especially in a one-shot. Nice though, keep it up.

Damn that was a good take. Well done.

That hit ya right where it huts the most. And given this was a one-shot its probable than with Shinji gone, Asuka then Rei would be dead and Kowaru initiates Third Impact killig them all even Shinji where ever he ended up.

Sad yet rivieting.

dennisud

I'm sorry to say I really didn't like this story too much. It feels far too out of character for your interpretation for Shinji to do such things with Rei so early on it the plot. Even with the changes you made to him, it still took a long time to reach a point where he could kiss a girl, let alone force himself upon Rei of all people.

It was well written and insightful for his mind, but I believe the sex was completely pointless.

Good thing this was only an alterante vision or my heart would of just imploded! hope to read more from you _

Later,

NIN