|Reviews for Kunoichi in the City|
| Nowriting chapter 16 . 10/6
Omg, this story is golden. Great dialogue, in character with the prefect mix of comedy and humour, and great first person narration. I can hardly wait for the next update.
I really loved the allusion to Gai being a secret casanova. And I'm glad you made all the characters mature as appropriate for their age and profession. Kudos for not making the mistake of simply retelling the same story from multiple points of views. This way, you've got a great pace going with plenty of fresh dialogue and content.
| the TumTum tree chapter 16 . 9/29
Having come back to after a long time and become reacquainted with this story, I'm delighted by it all over again, especially as it has new updates! This story is definitely an au now, I agree, but I like it much better than the canon in many ways.
Most importantly, it's so good to see the kuoichi be on a team together and I hope you write more of them in action - they're very exciting, coherent, thoughtful scenes and the girl's abilities always seem convincingly possible yet impressive. I wanted to see them reach their full potential so badly, not just with flashy moves but with strategy, leadership, ingenuity, a broad skillset and knowledge base, maturity and professionalism and that is just what you've done. The manga universe was so disappointing in regards to that because so often their development as kunoichi and as characters with complex emotions, backgrounds and agency took second place to their male teammates (not to mention how sloppily the whole thing was written towards the end).
Seeing Tenten being the badass, even standing up to Sasuke successfully, was so satisfying and I am really enjoying her slow build thing with Neji _ I was really proud of Hinata for speaking up at the council meeting and for defending herself and protecting Neji when the interrogation unit required her services. It's cool to see the focus of her story be as the heir to the Hyuuga clan. I adore Ino in this: her confidence and sense of fun. I especially loved the point you made about how she isn't defined by any male character and nor should the other girls be. She brings some lightness and hilarity to balance out the drama and action too. I think you have a really good in balance in tone over all actually and it's impressive that you maintain the four girls' voices so clearly and independently.
It is still hard to read Sasuke breaking Sakura's heart but it makes more sense than just ghosting over the whole thing like it doesn't matter... although some part of me still wants to see him redeem himself in her eyes. Properly! I suppose I want to see him prove that he cares but I can see that that might not be the way this version is going and I like that it's uncertain. That said I am so invested in seeing her be a competent, confident leader of a team and a well rounded individual as she is written here - it makes me so proud!
I wanted to know if the council elders will continue to challenge Sakura and her team and how they will handle it? It's intriguing that Danzo is around and I hope he turns up as an antagonist for them later! After all he is a threat to Sakura's Shishou, Naruto and Sasuke. I'm probably reading too much into it but dammit it was such a wasted storyline in canon. Plus Sakura (and the rest of her generation) don't know that the massacre was a set up still! There's some complicated moral and political issues to deal with there.
Again I'm going off in a tangent here. I'm just getting over excited. I really enjoyed rereading this and I'm looking forward to reading more _
| Chrisfragger chapter 1 . 9/25
Ahhh... Neo-Feminism is striking into the realm of FanFiction...
We are all doomed.
| kenni no. 1 chapter 16 . 9/24
OMG! I love love this chapter! I reread the whole fic again too. I'm so glad you're back!
| Enbi chapter 16 . 9/22
THIS STORY IS EVERYTHING I HAVE EVER WANTED IN A NARUTO FIC... ITS SO PERFECT IM GONNA DIE...
| XxXangelkunoichiXxX chapter 16 . 9/21
YOU UPDATED! YESYESYES!
Sorry about that, this was one of my favourite kunoichi-centred fics I'm so excited that you started updating again. You have a great talent with writibg, I hope you always continue to write
| un4getabl3mem0ries chapter 16 . 9/21
OMG YAY THANK YOU FOR UPDATING! I love your fics!
I miss reading NejiTen (especially now that it's AU... :( ) and was wondering if you would ever finish this
| pregar chapter 16 . 9/21
Funny how some stories I've read few months ago I almost completely forgot but his one I remember quite clearly.
| Prinx chapter 16 . 9/20
Oh ho! A sleeping giant has risen once more from the ashes! It blinks the sleep away from it's eyes, shaking the fog of slumber from its head. It attempts to rise, disturbing and crumbling the rubble that had formed naturally around it, but stumbles, yet somehow retains its balance. Taking in its surroundings and its condition, it realizes it has been several years from when it last laid its head down to rest. It stretches, revealing its mighty form, built from the blood, sweat, and tears from its journey and ready to continue onwards. Question is... will it finally finish its journey? Or fall to another endless slumber...?
(I apologize if you don't like the comment, but the moment I wrote the first two words, this scene flashed before my eyes, and I needed to express how I felt about you finally returning back to us. I am beyond excited that you have dusted off and picked this beauty of a gem back up. This heralds the coming of a new era of updates across the land (hopefully...pretty please?). I send you much love and encouragement to continue writing.
A Faithful Reader)
| kusudama.ball chapter 16 . 9/20
hmm, i was just reading this story earlier this week, and when i saw the last update date i thought "it's such a shame this story is probably never getting finished"
thanks for proving me wrong and making all my dreams come true. this is a great fic, you've got such wonderful characterization and relationship building, its all the fun in a "girls clique high school" type fic all the fun of being a kickass ninja. major kudos.
thank you so much for the update!
| MindYourMind chapter 15 . 10/7/2014
I love this fanfic to BITS! So funny and crazy, yet everybody is still believable and in character! Very sad that this hasn't been updated in four years.
| FruitySmell chapter 1 . 8/19/2014
Please continue... I would love to hear more...
| This Username Is Classified chapter 15 . 5/2/2014
HILARIOUS STORY! PLS UPDATE!
| TheMasterOfEmocorns chapter 15 . 3/1/2013
I have faith in your ability to keep working on this fic!
It is great!
| madmaniacx chapter 15 . 1/7/2013
Please updateeee! :3 i love this story so much and i badly want to know what happens nextt! :))))))