|Reviews for Kunoichi in the City|
| DeGlace chapter 1 . 7/14
Oh man. I read this years and years ago - probably when you first published it, because 2006 is when I first started my FFnet account to feed my nardo fanfic fix. It's funny, the line that stuck out to me over all these years is that beginning dialogue and the argument over nicknames, and Ino's choice of Pizzazz, which is perfect for her on so many levels.
Life is weird, I was going to post about this story (looking for it - couldn't remember the title and googling Ino Pizzazz did not help me)... and then I randomly found it in someone's favourites list, and saw that opening dialogue, and was like THIS IS IT.
Thanks for coming back and updating! You're awesome!
| Shikaino-Nejiten chapter 16 . 6/20
Aww the naruhina and nejiten, bless my heart. This is very well written and i love how the girls accepted Ino's crazy personality. I have a request tho, for ino's pairing, could you please make it shikaino? Please please please?
| Lighthouse13 chapter 16 . 6/9
Oh, your back! I thought you left us forever; which would be a pity since your one of my favourite authors on this website. Please do not leave again.
| Amasian chapter 16 . 5/24
I haven't logged onto in months and months but I had a sudden wanton desire to read Kunoichi in the City. I DIDN'T KNOW YOU UPDATED! Thank you so much for writing this gem. I loved it when I first read it, I love it now (after the 12th time). Your characterizations are delightful and I hope to read the end of this. I wish you the best in life, wherever you are, whatever you're doing, and I hope to see more updates in the future! Keep it up.
| FairyTaleFancy chapter 16 . 12/5/2015
This is probably my favorite Naruto story and I am so so glad to see you working on it again! The way you write the relationships between these girls and switch back and forth to focus on them is wonderful. (also, this way I can pretend Neji is still alive and everything is great) 3
| Roseraindrops chapter 16 . 11/30/2015
Im sp happy uoure still updating! Its such a great story to read!
| half-note chapter 16 . 10/28/2015
I'm extremely happy I didn't lose hope on you updating.
Thanks for the chapter. Looking forward for this story to be finished one day. It really is a great piece of fanfiction.
We have your back istoria! Keep working hard! )
| Guest chapter 16 . 10/24/2015
yessssss i'm so happy you updated this fic! it's amazing :) i love the whole sisterhood vibe and their hilarious hijinks!
| LilithiaRW chapter 16 . 10/14/2015
Hahaha OH. MY. GOD. These last few chapters are fucking hilarious! I think half of the young male population of Konoha will be dead by the time those girls' parents are done!
I'm rereading this for the first time in years. Your writing has really improved!
| Nowriting chapter 16 . 10/6/2015
Omg, this story is golden. Great dialogue, in character with the prefect mix of comedy and humour, and great first person narration. I can hardly wait for the next update.
I really loved the allusion to Gai being a secret casanova. And I'm glad you made all the characters mature as appropriate for their age and profession. Kudos for not making the mistake of simply retelling the same story from multiple points of views. This way, you've got a great pace going with plenty of fresh dialogue and content.
| the TumTum tree chapter 16 . 9/29/2015
Having come back to after a long time and become reacquainted with this story, I'm delighted by it all over again, especially as it has new updates! This story is definitely an au now, I agree, but I like it much better than the canon in many ways.
Most importantly, it's so good to see the kuoichi be on a team together and I hope you write more of them in action - they're very exciting, coherent, thoughtful scenes and the girl's abilities always seem convincingly possible yet impressive. I wanted to see them reach their full potential so badly, not just with flashy moves but with strategy, leadership, ingenuity, a broad skillset and knowledge base, maturity and professionalism and that is just what you've done. The manga universe was so disappointing in regards to that because so often their development as kunoichi and as characters with complex emotions, backgrounds and agency took second place to their male teammates (not to mention how sloppily the whole thing was written towards the end).
Seeing Tenten being the badass, even standing up to Sasuke successfully, was so satisfying and I am really enjoying her slow build thing with Neji _ I was really proud of Hinata for speaking up at the council meeting and for defending herself and protecting Neji when the interrogation unit required her services. It's cool to see the focus of her story be as the heir to the Hyuuga clan. I adore Ino in this: her confidence and sense of fun. I especially loved the point you made about how she isn't defined by any male character and nor should the other girls be. She brings some lightness and hilarity to balance out the drama and action too. I think you have a really good in balance in tone over all actually and it's impressive that you maintain the four girls' voices so clearly and independently.
It is still hard to read Sasuke breaking Sakura's heart but it makes more sense than just ghosting over the whole thing like it doesn't matter... although some part of me still wants to see him redeem himself in her eyes. Properly! I suppose I want to see him prove that he cares but I can see that that might not be the way this version is going and I like that it's uncertain. That said I am so invested in seeing her be a competent, confident leader of a team and a well rounded individual as she is written here - it makes me so proud!
I wanted to know if the council elders will continue to challenge Sakura and her team and how they will handle it? It's intriguing that Danzo is around and I hope he turns up as an antagonist for them later! After all he is a threat to Sakura's Shishou, Naruto and Sasuke. I'm probably reading too much into it but dammit it was such a wasted storyline in canon. Plus Sakura (and the rest of her generation) don't know that the massacre was a set up still! There's some complicated moral and political issues to deal with there.
Again I'm going off in a tangent here. I'm just getting over excited. I really enjoyed rereading this and I'm looking forward to reading more _
| Chrisfragger chapter 1 . 9/25/2015
Ahhh... Neo-Feminism is striking into the realm of FanFiction...
We are all doomed.
| kenni no. 1 chapter 16 . 9/24/2015
OMG! I love love this chapter! I reread the whole fic again too. I'm so glad you're back!
| Enbi chapter 16 . 9/22/2015
THIS STORY IS EVERYTHING I HAVE EVER WANTED IN A NARUTO FIC... ITS SO PERFECT IM GONNA DIE...
| XxXangellostXxX chapter 16 . 9/21/2015
YOU UPDATED! YESYESYES!
Sorry about that, this was one of my favourite kunoichi-centred fics I'm so excited that you started updating again. You have a great talent with writibg, I hope you always continue to write