Reviews for After death
Tsuna97 chapter 1 . 2/3
aww how sad the beginning was, but it was great later! i love it already :3 Keep up the good work! ;D
malkallan chapter 3 . 6/16/2014
go on it kenpachi sama
malkallan chapter 1 . 6/16/2014
heeeeeey his zanpakutou is the tensha zangetsu?
Drewdragon chapter 6 . 6/21/2013
the motherly Kurosaki twin's name is Yuzu and the tomboy twin is Karin.
Tirion Fordring chapter 2 . 5/26/2011
"...Repute yourself fortunate. I think she likes you."

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Remember how much she "likes" Byakuya? IF it's anything like that, then I think i would prefer her not liking me, because then i could just avoid her so she doesn't munch on my head...
narutodekenzieboy chapter 12 . 1/22/2011
-Drooling at Hanataro,Naruto and Sajin Bankai-

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omally-dood chapter 1 . 9/29/2010
y the same as ichigos y not do something different like a sword the same length as sephiroth's
avatoa chapter 6 . 1/11/2010
Ichigo's sister name is Yuzu, not Chizuru. That's the chick with red hair and glasses they left at the bar.
avatoa chapter 4 . 1/11/2010
Wait a minute. I thought you said earlier in the chapter that the 12th Division wouldn't be entering anyone yet one of the two competitors who use Shikai in the tournament is from the 12th division. What's up with that?
HikariNoTenshi-San chapter 18 . 10/16/2009
Glad you finished and um THIS WAS SO KICK ASS I LOVED IT! XD
BlackRoseFire chapter 17 . 9/30/2009
Awesome story. I can't wait to read the next one. I do like Nemu and hate Miyuri.
daek chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
Just from the fucking beggining is a fail. Naruto dying like a bitch thinking of the promise he made to that whore and still worried about that filthy weakling of Uchiha. What is worse, HE'S STILL A FUCKING WEAKLING. THIS SHIT FAILS
ZMiDnIgHtSuNz chapter 9 . 7/29/2009
Every time i read this i wonder why you don't make naruto use his ninja abilities?
ominix chapter 2 . 7/16/2009
I think most people that watch naruto would have enough exposure to japanese culture to know what sakura is.

"Naruto knocked the door twice… And suddenly, he was flying in the air. The panel under his feet had propelled him high in the air. He was now above the enormous inner garden of the headquarter."

That was suppose to be a very exciting scene, someone suddenly getting catapulted into the sky should be, at the very least, a funny thing. you managed to make it sound like a physics lecture.

"Naruto hadn’t noticed her before because her pink hair camouflaged her."

It i remember right, all soul reapers wear black, so her pink hair can't have camouflaged her that much.

One time at week? I think you mean one time a week

"the Shinigami women’s association wasn’t a cute name"

you missed a verb there: association SAID IT wasn't

"Second answer: SHE GROPED ME!" SHE? I thought it was a guy.

we hang up? it is hang out, not hang up. You hang out with people, you hang up on a phone call you just finished. There is a big difference.

Santa Trinità dei monti, near hear…” it is near HERE not HEAR,

HEAR is a verb, to hear is to listen, HERE describes the location where you are presently at.

No author's notes in the middle of the story, why should I care whether the amusement park and the district shares the same name?

I really really recommend a beta. someone to proof read everything.

you got a good idea going, the plot is nice. keep up the good work.
ominix chapter 1 . 7/16/2009
do not include author's notes in your story, it is very annoying.

and instead of saying it is the same size as Ichigo's, you could say that the zanpakuto was as tall as he is. or hat it is the single largest Zanpakuto rukia has ever seen.

other then that, you got an ok story, keep up the good work.
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