|Reviews for History of the orions|
| Token Cylon chapter 1 . 9/5/2012
This is not a story. This is a big horrible block of text. There exist these things called "paragraphs" that you could use to make it readable.
| constentien9000 chapter 1 . 9/2/2007
this is one hell of a good story any more chapters coming to this story.
| Flick Montana chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Oh good lord, you need to have more than one chapter. I don't know if this was taken from the manual because it hurts my eyes just looking at the lump of words on the page.
Please edit this so it is readable.
| Napoleon Error chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
Not bad, not bad, but a couple of things you could have done better:
The story seems pretty much like "Copy and paste" version of the background given in MOO 3. Perhaps a bit of editing into a more story-like format, instead of the current history-book format. The happenings might make a good first-person story, for example the first meeting between the ancient races...
Put some empty rows into the story. You know, chapters within a chapter? Makes it a hole lot easier to read. Now it's just a jumbled mess that keeps on going and going without pause. It takes two empty rows in word or wordpad to appear as a single row in the FFnet. It reads somewhere in the instructions they give for writers...
But hey, do write more stories. I myself am a pretty new writer, so I know courage is in short supply for the first few chapters a person writes.
Courage and Honor! (Warcry of the Ultramarines)
| Psilontech chapter 1 . 3/4/2006
I don't have the MoO3 manual with me right now, but I believe this was ripped directly from the manual...