Reviews for Iceman's Promotion
sonofApollon chapter 1 . 1/5/2013
Wow I am speechless. That was truly amazing!
hero for a day chapter 5 . 5/22/2009
The presence of the wise sage Beast almost steals the whole story. His quotes and (seemingly) infinite wisdom helps guide these stray teens along almost as much as Xavier's. Nice touch indeed,. The way each character is captured and displayed, as well as the conjunction of drama and action has one to beg: Why aren't you on Marvel's salary?

Grade: A

Overall story: A

Some words are misused, mainly "than" and "then". But it's such a minor error in the large scope of things.
hero for a day chapter 4 . 5/22/2009
Alas, the action had to stop, but the dramatic flair is still fully in tact. The surprise element of the attack was something that deserves high accolades, and the fact that Bobby took some anger out on Scott deserves even higher praise. The two always seemed to have a bit of a strained relationship in the show, nice to see someone fleshing that out. And poor Kitty, always getting herself into some sort of high-school crush, but that's what makes the series so fun!

Grade: A
hero for a day chapter 3 . 5/22/2009
The intimacy of each battle scene is groundbreaking, especially in a story that has so much going on and explosions seem to be a staple, as they are in the series itself. These characters aren't just pawns meant to be included in an elaborate battle scene, and you clearly understand that, giving emotional insight to each punch thrown. Some glorious stuff indeed.

Grade: A
hero for a day chapter 2 . 5/22/2009
Sizzling action scenes that are written with keen insight and intimacy and are used to capture the anxiety/excitement/seriousness of the given situation. The cliffhangers may not be the most unique element of storytelling, but here it takes the action to a new level and leaves the reader wanting more.

Grade: A
hero for a day chapter 1 . 5/22/2009
Spot on characterization of each individual mutant, including a form of dialect and writing style that pays homage to accents and quirks of the varying players in the story. Cliff hanger that feels like it will signal a break, but in this case signals it's time to click on to the next chapter. Exciting!

Grade: B
vyn chapter 5 . 5/15/2009
A perfect conclusion to a very, very good story. Beast's personality was so fully captured and displayed, his small segment almost stole away from the entire story, and his quote was just icing on the cake. Yet, there is plenty more to be celebrated here, the most important was the character development of Iceman, and his argument with Scott will hopefully not die in this story, as it gives a chance to show the independence of the titular character. This story has certainly set something up, and that something - if anything like this story - is surely not going to disappoint.

The only error I found was a grammatical one. Sometimes (I think twice, maybe three times though) the word "then" was used when the word "than" should have been, But this is a minor detail and doesn't detract from the overall greatness of the story.
vyn chapter 4 . 5/15/2009
A nice ending and a good way to tie up the battle scenes. Iceman's promotion is just as much about battle skills as it is maturity and it makes for a good contrast in the text. A relationship with Kitty seems on the forefront, but the fact that it hasn't been massively highlighted or rammed down the reader's throat makes for an even bigger celebration. The battle was big, but the drama captures one thing, few X-Men writers do: restraint.
vyn chapter 3 . 5/15/2009
A nice mixture of the first chapter's character insight with the second chapter's action scenes. There's plenty to be praised here (Kurt's highlighted accent is just one of them), but perhaps the most noticeable is the depth of Iceman's fear in the situation. His constant eagerness is exciting, but showing the flip side of each action is what makes this fiction so captivating.
vyn chapter 2 . 5/15/2009
Exploding at the seems of the opening line, the second chapter further brings the reader into this world that is so familiar to the X-Men Evolution cartoon. The details aren't so much small and intimate as they were in the first chapter, instead, we get big booms and bangs and lots of weapons and attacks, which is essentially for the "Action/Adventure" tag that the story holds. Still, there's enough reason to be excited about clicking "chapter 3".
vyn chapter 1 . 5/15/2009
A nice mix of canon, imagination and most importantly: extension. The opening chapter of the story (and saga), seem to instantly capture the reader. Iceman's psyche is something worth noting and developing and his on-again off-again is-he or isn't-he status as an official X-Man in the Evolution series deserves its own story. It seems, the ideals are in capable hands and so far you've made something that is instantly memorable and truly imaginative.
Addicted-to-X-Men-Evolution chapter 5 . 4/24/2009
WHOA...just thinking about being in that situation is enough to make your life flash before your eyes! Geez! Man, this FF was have some serious talent!
Addicted-to-X-Men-Evolution chapter 4 . 4/24/2009

((hands fumble around, trying to pick jaw off of floor))

... OH...MY...GOSH ... THAT...WAS...INCREDIBLE ...

... ...

Addicted-to-X-Men-Evolution chapter 2 . 4/24/2009
Wow! You have me addicted!

The only part that seemed OOC at all was Rogue saying "sugar". She probably would have made it much more insulting...something like "you big hunk of ugly" or "bird brain" (yeah, those wouldn't exactly fit, but hopefully you get the idea. She always manages to come up with something as equally catchy as it is insulting, unlike me who can't even beat my 11 y/o brother in an "insult war"...ugh (LOL))
Addicted-to-X-Men-Evolution chapter 1 . 4/23/2009

Ah, just the way to start the morning off, huh?

I am really liking this so far. And if anything, I think Bobby should have an official X-Men status just to show the world that mutants are kids, too...pranks, hormones and all )
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