Reviews for Harry Potter and the Manipulator of Destiny
X chapter 19 . 2/15
Sixteen years old, in love w/out adult supervision, & Harry, at the very least, is going to be facing death. They're even engaged. And they're not having sex? Only in the fantasies of a repressed puritan. Yes, the story is fiction, but come on! Most teens wouldn't need even that much of an excuse - maybe a right-wing, uber-religious extremist, but normal teens would be physically expressing their love.
Faenlgiec chapter 21 . 2/15
Are they also with distorted time?
Faenlgiec chapter 20 . 2/15
Something to break Moody's esteem for Dumbledore...
Faenlgiec chapter 19 . 2/15
Luna is just too good... Why would Harry not apparate to Amelia? With elvish poping to the great hall, under his cape, then goblin popping to amelia's study, then see how she is with Dumbledore, then revealing (or not) himself to her...
Faenlgiec chapter 18 . 2/15
Woken? I look forward to seeing that...
Faenlgiec chapter 17 . 2/15
That is very... Dangerous... Of him, to influence Voldy...
Faenlgiec chapter 16 . 2/15
I think Harry's just right, don't stress you with it...
With the fact that he is engaged with her before even kissing him, I actually have not only problems with that, but also with the other fictions where the people ask out other people, go snuggling around, even go further, but when they say 'I love you', after much more snuggling, it is a big event...
For me, you should not even start to be boy/girlfriends if you are not quite sure of it... What's the point of going out with someone you're not sure you love?
Faenlgiec chapter 15 . 2/15
Very good idea, the marble maze... Although I think it would have been good to make it give the hour, also...
Faenlgiec chapter 14 . 2/15
I actually can barely think of Harry as Gryffindor... Fanficreader's deformation
If I ever had to give four founders'heirs, I would probably give these four, but Neville is truely in the middle of Gryffondor and Hupplepuf (maybe a bit more hupplepuf, but that gryffindor thing in the seventh book (teasing Tommy...)), Hermione being at the edge between Ravenclaw and Gryffindor, Luna being, according to what the true Luna is, a true Ravenclaw, a mix between ravenclaw and Slytherin, or a mix between Ravenclaw and Hupplepuffs, and Harry a mix between Gryffindor and Slytherin... But that's with an Harry that really think's by himself, a sort of OoC, in one way, as in your fiction...

It is the true problem with the term OoC... You never know if you can use it...
Faenlgiec chapter 13 . 2/15
Pretty good chapter...
Faenlgiec chapter 12 . 2/15
Are these lockets on the store? No matter how much they cost, I want one...
Faenlgiec chapter 11 . 2/15
I don't think your carachters are OoC... OoC is when, from the beginning, a character acts in a way that does not fit the book... Here... You could even argue that Ron and Ginny are not OoC...

Too much time shopping? I don't think so...

You can't write? Then, if someone thinks it, he can stop reading, it's not like you put a compulsion charm on it...

And this is a pretty well writen fanfiction. Îve read things that were far more uglier...
Faenlgiec chapter 10 . 2/15
Poor, poor, poor little Snak... Euh... Snape...
Faenlgiec chapter 9 . 2/15
How will he treat Ginny?
Maybe he could speak to her between four eyes (if it is the way you say it in English...)
Faenlgiec chapter 8 . 2/15
He will have hard time going on with Ron...
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