|Reviews for The Power|
| Guest chapter 15 . 9/16
When Hermione said “I sincerely hope you didn't control the direction and speed with your grip.” I thought she meant his shaft
| Ultach chapter 1 . 8/5
'a blank 20 x 20 room' ? I ask again,?
20 x 20 what? Millimetres? Metres? Miles? Leagues? Parsecs? Light Years?
Actual definitions would be appreciated.
| RatherFabulous chapter 2 . 5/23
It's concise. Almost a summary.
Plot points hit. Check.
Little development of character. Not much revelation of thoughts or building of world.
This was written over 3 years. Give it a chance.
With this style of story telling, the reader will be informed of what's happening, but fleshing out the world, and "suspension of disbelief" will be the reader's job, rather than the author's.
I do understand that it's finished, and that this chapter is an early one, in a fic that was written quite some time ago, so let's forge ahead.
| Guest chapter 25 . 3/12
| alsdjhfgljkwebgh chapter 10 . 2/19
How does this have so many favorites? You've changed nothing. It's literally just the books rewritten.
| alsdjhfgljkwebgh chapter 7 . 2/19
These are my favorite stories.
The ones where authors are so lazy and idiotic they literally just copy from the books and change nothing.
| alsdjhfgljkwebgh chapter 2 . 2/19
Wow, literally just canon. Maybe grow a brain and switch things up. Harry is the literal definition of a Ravenclaw, and he's still Gryff because you're too stupid to do anything original.
| LAB1 chapter 25 . 1/19
This story was quite amusing in places and almost a crack fiction. It got more fantastical as it went. Maybe in another 200 years he will grow up and settle down.
| Amargi'sNodachi chapter 2 . 12/1/2022
| Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 6 . 9/8/2022
Sooo... Hermione, who hates Ron in the books, suddenly likes him...for no percievable reason.
Harry knows Draco is onto them, and he clearly is too smart to be smart enough to make him think they'll deliver the dragon a day late, or something...
And a whole other minor inconsistencies that just makes this whole story feel like a toddler trying to slam a square into a round hole, and when it doesn't fit, he/she uses a hammer and FORCE it to fit.
PLEASE tell me that you are not planning to follow what happens in the books to the letter.
It makes NO sense a smart Harry would act like the same idiot he was in the books. Many things WOULD change.
And forcing your story to fit the exact pattern the books followed is just... painful to read. Again with the toddler methaphor.
You're a good writer, and the premis of this story has potential.
I would hate to seee that ruined by an attempt to blindly follow Canon rather than using logical Cause and Effect.
| Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 2 . 9/8/2022
Wait... How did Harry know that his aunt was jealous? Is he reborn or sent back in a younger body? Did I manage to forget that big detail between two chapters? Oo I REALLY need to stop taking breaks between chapters. Lol
And did he drink Veritaserum or something? He overshares worse than ME, and -I- creep people out with it.
He's lucky it's Hermione he talks to I guess. Anyone with more sense of social norms, and less desperate for friends would have backed away slowly.
(It also sounds really weird, because NO ONE talks that openly, and so casually, with someone they just met.)
Ignoring that, at least he asks questions more than in canon. So this should be interesting. _
| IJustWannaReadEpicStories chapter 1 . 6/12/2022
this story is so bad, it's literally just cooy and paste from the book, with randomly placed mistakes and a few added inside voice commentary. not worth the read
| plumbknot57 chapter 25 . 5/17/2022
Great story love sinecal Harry
| Ariadne Venegas chapter 25 . 5/9/2022
Also Hermione lived forever too and before when they were young still they have a daughter so they didn’t feel bad about anything else.
| micahmck2690 chapter 1 . 4/4/2022
even though I am commenting on chapter 1, I read till 4 and I have to quit reading. it's 99% copy and paste with 1% of the fanfiction authors work and it is mostly mental evaluations. this is crap