|Reviews for MOLAD: Breaking Light|
| Sora Tayuya chapter 10 . 7/9/2010
So…Sephiroth has been raging for 6 days straight. Not a bad haul for the most evil person in all of the worlds. I like the way you opened the scene. Also, this emergency is letting no-one concentrate on how Sora’s darkness is a bit awkward, so it can be accepted more easily now.
Well, I liked Sephiroth’s battle scene again. Interesting how he never got to say anything, but then, what would he have said anyway? Now there is only the part left for the people to react/accept Sora for who he is.
This was written very nicely, and it is unfortunate that it has been a number of years since you last worked on this. This is well aligned to have a continuation, but it is wonderful as it is. Not really an adventure of sorts, but it is an interesting development in the world that they live in. I enjoyed it very much.
Thanks for a nice, if unusual, story.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 9 . 7/9/2010
Wow, very intense battle. So it was Sephiroth, in the end. I wonder if they can beat him...
Fight scenes are always challenging to write, and you did a good job with this one. The raw power evil villians have is always so irritating.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 8 . 7/9/2010
Ah, another long chapter. Kairi’s entrance was good; I really didn’t know what you would do to accomplish the feat of stopping the fighters, but that was good. The real problem is, of course, stopping the raging people below. The concept is exactly the same as two warring armies. Even if both leaders stop, the rest of the fighters may not wish to stop the battle until they have won. (Although usually in larger numbers it is just ridiculously hard to stop the fighting due to lack of communication) Here though, it would be easy to get Goofy to stop fighting, and probably Donald and Leon next, but Vincent is going to keep trying to kill people to get to Sora, and Mickey will want to stop but not want to stop defending Sora. Pretty much, the problem here is Vincent’s lack of understanding about evil. I fear that someone will have to die to get the point across, though I seriously hope not.
It is good that Riku intervened in Vincent’s fight, because Mickey Would believe Riku and the Master of Light is the only one who could possibly make Vincent understand. Somewhat. Separating Leon and Donald wasn’t as hard, I wouldn’t think.
Oh. Well, this last scene was quite intriguing. So Riku was able to calm down both of his fighters, though of course, not without a lot of help from Cloud. He was very vital, being the Master of Twilight and all. …though…Master of Evil…hm…if it were me, I’d say that it could be Xemnas…but I highly doubt that…it could be Maleficent…but then again…it has to be someone Entirely evil, right? …hm…
Oh well, I'm a terrible guesser. My best guesses are Xemnas, Maleficent, or Sepiroth.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 7 . 7/9/2010
Oh, I didn’t expect this length. Of course, since there are only 10 chapters and at the rate you are going…I figure that there will less than likely not be a scene where Sora is asked to go to the dark side with some evil villains. That would have been very interesting, but it looks like you decided to not go down that path. It would have been much longer and more complicated, but it may still turn up in one of the next chapters yet. I’ll just have to wait and see.
It seems that no-one has the strength, or maybe cannot even admit to themselves, that Sora is the evil one. Well, so now it seems Yuffie will join Cid on the neutral side. As for Aerith, I bet she will follow as well.
Cloud holds so many wonderful points. He is probably, by far, the most powerful ally that has chosen neutral. He can see how pointless this fight is. I am very proud of him, and glad that you let him hold this opinion. He is rather wise, so that makes sense that he can understand when something is right or wrong. And, he raises another great point. Kairi.
I like how Cloud tells Kairi. No nonsense, straight out you-need-to-know. “Okay, so it’s Sora. What are you going to do about it?”. I like Cloud in this story, his calm, collected attitude is very in-character.
Oh, I understand now why Cloud is the first to understand how pointless the battle is. He is the living example that just because you can control darkness, it doesn’t mean that you are evil. That is the whole key. Plus, Sora has tons of goodness, as Yuffie so kindly pointed out a few chapters back. He could never truly be evil, but he can control the darkness. Cloud cannot stop this battle, but by letting Kairi know the truth, she can.
Hm…Master of Twilight, huh…that would make sense…that he was able to fully understand how to control darkness yet remain good. And the wings with the growing white…
I’m hopeful that neither boy will do some giant final-attack spell like before and Kairi will sacrifice herself or something (or Cloud) and that would stop the battle. Something good will come of it though.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 6 . 7/9/2010
And now, all of these ‘non-believers’ (in happily ever afters in fairy tales) are going to gang up on Sora. That is really, really bad for the kid. Hopefully, the people who still have some sense left can defend him. …it is just unfortunate that most of the people whom know that he is supposedly “evil” are ridiculously strong.
I enjoyed the reaction from Cid. I am also glad that he has remained neutral, because that will be very important. Those who feel that Sora will succumb to darkness, those who feel Sora can overcome his evil fate, and those who do not want to fight at all. Each group is well defined, and I like it.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 5 . 7/9/2010
Well, I’m really excited over the Disney people’s acceptance of it. If the king of Disney castle has accepted Sora, that is a really, really good sign. Of course, Sora has a point that other’s aren’t so understanding…I have a feeling that Kairi will be of the same opinion as the King and Donald and Goofy though. As long as Sora is really careful and doesn’t seem like he’s going evil or anything, then it ought to be fine.
The way that Donald was okay with Sora is important. He must really feel bad about abandoning him that first time with Riku, so he is very honorable by sticking to his promise of ‘friends forever’. He is compelled to stay with Sora, because he could not stand abandoning his friend twice. That is just cruel.
So the figure is Vincent…well, this picture is very classic. The person with a secret (dangerous and important secret) finally decides to tell everyone else, which could turn out decently if all went well, and instead someone less forgiving finds out before hand and tells everyone, setting them in a bad mood; betrayed, hurt, and possibly angry. No…Very angry. I doubt that Mickey would let Donald and Goofy follow Sora if he decided to flee, upon seeing a lot of his old friends turn against him, or even if they Could follow him if he ran. This is, as usual, just speculation until I read further.
Well…talking to Riku was a bad thing to do. He had doubts, serious doubts, that Sora really was evil. Their fighting style a bit back proved that. Now, through the way he spoke, Vincent has somewhat instilled doubt into Riku’s heart. That is bad.
The talk between Vincent and Riku is good. Riku's self doubts and his doubts about Sora's evilness are well shown. Vincent probably isn't doing this on purpose, he just believes (from experience, no doubt) that Sora Will be tempted and corrupted by darkness and just wants the right thing done. A lot of the Final Fantasy people are like that, because from where they come from, a literal 'fairy tale' ending is practically non-existant. They live in reality, and see these other people from different worlds slightly in contempt that they believe that everything will always work out. Which is a completely logical and rational way of thinking, but not evil.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 4 . 7/9/2010
Yuffie’s sneakiness is rather amusing; her hanging from the ceiling the whole time certainly wouldn’t have gone unnoticed by Cloud. The interaction between characters in this part is good. Cid is reacting the way that is normal (well, as normal as possible for the strangeness of a situation such as this) and the news is not coming out sudden and shocking. Breaking news of this magnitude is really hard, so the pace that you have set is perfectly understandable.
Huh, poor Leon. He’s got a furious Cid after him, not to mention Cloud. Well, since this is just a suspicion, I doubt that it could escalate too far. Something bigger will undoubtedly happen before too much anger can be directed at the Gunblader.
Hm…so King Mickey has shown up…I would have hoped that he would know that Sora was the Master of Darkness, but I suppose that he cannot know everything. Vincent Valentine is wandering around too? Oh dear…I bet he’s hunting Sora (though he may not know it’s him). That is also bad. Leon probably doesn’t want to tell anybody that the Master of Darkness is Sora, plus Cid is furious at his remark about wanting to kill the young Keyblader. Donald has convinced himself (very in-character, considering how Donald believes that he is right a lot of the time) that seeing Sora as the Master of Darkness was a trick, so he won’t tell anybody about it (he may admit it if Sora shows up and lets people know though, just because he could no longer deny the truth). So…a very interesting situation you have spun here. Who will be the first to move? Very intriguing…
Ooh…I wonder if Mickey could pick up the stench of darkness surrounding him. He should be able to, being the king and all, but he may not be able to. This is a very interesting development.
This area was played out well, again. I'm eager to see people's reactions when everybody has realized the truth.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 3 . 7/9/2010
Wow…Donald really is capable of angst. I never thought of Sora that way before, though it is very plausible.
Well, Sora turning up and confusing Cid was very unexpected. I liked that bit. The Keyblade Master must be feeling really confused right now. Also, he needs medical attention, so he’s weakened. He doesn’t know if Riku, Leon, and Donald have told anybody yet, or what their reactions would be. He is probably wondering if he should give into the darkness and go find other evil villains or try and resist, though he probably cannot find a reason to go back to his friends at the moment.
Well, Sora has a lot on his mind, poor kid. That scene was orchestrated really well too; I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
I would have to agree with you that the part when Donald and Goofy abandoned Sora is quite dreadful. When I saw it for the first time, I was shocked, and confused. I mean, stabbing yourself to save your friend is very old-time stuff, but having your best friends leave you for another person just because you lost your powers...that is on a whole different scale. Not to mention that it is DONALD DUCK and GOOFY that this happened with.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 2 . 7/9/2010
Well, I’ll give Riku a lot of good points for not being horridly angry at Sora or anything. Though…Donald’s reaction (with his temper in mind of course) was probably expected. Though still…it must have been a serious blow to Sora to see his good friend attack him like that the moment he found out about his dark powers.
Riku’s trying to break the news slowly too, which is a good strategy on your part. It couldn’t have been too easy to come up with this method, it being rather uncommon and all. After all, it isn’t everyday that the Keyblade Master, the hero of light, turns out to be the Master of All Darkness. That really bites. For Riku.
Ah, so none of the guys who have found out about Sora are quite comfortable with breaking the news quite yet. It should be expected, of course. And Yuffie overhearing their little “talk”…well, with her hyperactive-ness the word will get out fairly quickly now…still, I wonder how Kairi is going to take this…
Oh…so Donald really does care…well, that is really sweet of him. And Leon has a point too, though he, by nature, would feel that way. This is really well planned, and they are very in-character.
Hm…so Yuffie doesn’t completely know that Sora is the Master of Darkness, but does know that Leon wants to kill him and things that he is evil. And what is Donald going to do?
Heck, what is Sora going to do? I am worried that he will go and join up with some evil-doers…darn.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 1 . 7/9/2010
I was secretly hopeful there that Riku wouldn’t say anything, but I knew that Sora couldn’t just ignore it after he just had a life-or-death battle with Riku. So, it turned out as it should have, and as one would expect it to.
| arcnologia chapter 10 . 6/24/2008
I really enjoyed this story! thanks!
| xXx Fox Trot xXx chapter 10 . 5/28/2006
0_0 Wow. That. Was. AWSOME! I love the idea of Sephiroth being the Master... Yeah... That was cool... Um-hum... Yeah... Keep it up! _ Once again, write more Kingdom Hearts stories! _ I want to read them all! (KH2 is fun! I beat it in 35 hours tops! _)
Looking forward to your first book!
| xXx Fox Trot xXx chapter 5 . 5/28/2006
Um, hi again. Once again, this is an absolutly amazingly entricet story but I have one question... WHO THE HELL IS VINCENT VALINTINE? _ I may be a dunce, but I've never heard of him! Is he like, from FF? Sorry, but I really need to know... Right now I'm kind of imagining him as an Auron kind of guy... _; Look forward to more KH stories! GO YOU!
| Aros Iruk Leax chapter 10 . 3/24/2006
*gasp*YAY!THANKYEWTHANKYEWTHANKYEW!Kindaofa slow chappy but it rocked!
| Aros Iruk Leax chapter 9 . 3/24/2006
YES YES BWAHAHAHAHAHAHHA!