Dumbledore "revised" the prophecy? It looks like the original prophecy, to me. What part did he revise? Are you sure "revised" is the right word?

Dumbledore still doesn't want any DEs killed. I guess he wants them to be able to get free, so that there can be a big battle where loads of people die. If all the DEs are dead, the battle would be small - just Harry and Riddle - and everyone would be focused on those two. No? Did I get it wrong?

"Oh sorry Ron," said Crystal happily, "just having a little girls meeting."
"What about?" asked Ron suspiciously.
"Nothing that concerns you Ronald," said Hermione twice as happy as Crystal.

ROTFLOL! Nothing that concerns Ronald? Hmmm. Really, you need to include "humor" in your story description.

"... they both ran quickly up to [there] own dormitories leaving a stupid looking Ron behind." **sigh** Some things never change.

Wait till Harry finds out Hermione has moved on. This will not be pretty in any way. Either Harry will be broken hearted or - if Hermione decides she still loves him and not Ron - Ron will be livid with jealousy. I can't think this will go down well at all.

Absoletly brilliant i loved it. HxHr is my favourite pairing you did it fantastically loved the lemon at the end and the birth of there first child

Aaaaaand, nope. Nooo, that's just one too many cliches for me. Also, when typing the contraction of 'you are', please remember there are 5 letters and an apostrophe in it.

This isn't up to my standards, but you have some good ideas. Good luck with your future stories.

Neither of them thought to have Harry send an 'I'm okay' note with Hedwig? This time, Sirius' death is kind of his fault.

your other beta should have been shot for not doing a good job. your story is great, but your uses of their, there, and they're are not correct. neither are your uses of the words, too, to, and two. One a last note, your uses of the words no and know aren't always correct either. Your beta should have taken care of all of that for you. Now ia m going to delightfully read the rest of this story. good luck

Good story, lots of detail! The final fight was kind of a disappoint all that exercising and he could barely move for the final fight. Ouh and wasn't the Duresly's house destroyed? How was Crystal living there?

Besides that I really enjoyed it and read it all in 3 days! Thanks!

"screamed like a girl" thats a good one, oh boy, another one that thinks all girls need to be resqued

Very Good Fic and I Thank You for sharing it with us. I was not so sure at the beginning what to think of this fic but the more I read the better it got. Harry being gone for the two years training while everone thought him dead was something I would think would have the impact you put on it. Ron dating Hermione was not too far fetched and the way he acted when Harry came back was right with his character. Your OC of Crystal was the perfect fit to take Ron's jealousy and keep it from rearing its ugly head at Harry coming back and Hermione choosing him, also Ginny not having her silly fangirl crush was great too and I like her with Neville. The sad part is you had very little of Luna in the story but I guess with him not being there fifth year to become friends with her would put her out of their group. The way you wrote Hermione and Harry's relationship was great, I still wonder who the Head Boy was or if they didn't have one because of Harry being thought dead. Then you also made me cry with the death of Locky and then him losing his other Elemental Guardians and then them coming to help defeat Riddle in the end. I was also having trouble reading the chapter when Harry knocked Draco silly because it was too funny. I really liked this fic and if you decide to do a sequel I know of one reader who would love to read it.

I find it odd that Dumbledore would think that Harry died without much proof, there should be a body even if the house blow up. Since Harry was not there, they would only found 3 body's

Loved it! Please do the sequel.

A knight tale reference nice. almost had to change my pants lol

i cried. beginning and end. im not one to cry easy either.

Nice story. Thanks