Reviews for The Chasm Between
Kizna Himura chapter 1 . 4/24/2006
Aw how sweet!
Vampiress Yugure chapter 1 . 4/22/2006
eleanor44 chapter 1 . 4/8/2006

I loved this small story about Edward and Bella, and i think it was a good idea to show us how he would act when he was watching Bella sleeping. I liked how you expressed his thoughts and feelings.

scythe195 chapter 1 . 3/22/2006
Very well written story. :) Enjoyed reading it!
tenshi sky chapter 1 . 3/4/2006
it was so sweet! good job on portraying Edwards feelings._
Titan09 chapter 1 . 3/4/2006 cute! oo I love your...reenactments, I guess...of things mentioned in Stephenie's book! It's so awesome!

Keep on writin', Alphie! I'll keep an eye out as best I could for updates!

Wonderful job!

Sara C chapter 1 . 2/15/2006
oh my goodness, i LOVE this short...I read it after I read your other twilight story you started. I really adore your writing style, you do so well to epitomize the simplicity and flow of Ms. Meyer's writing style while adding your own flavor. Its writing like this that makes me check this site every day to see if my favorite authors have updated. Reading "the lion and the lamb" will hopefully tide me over until October when her sequel comes out-how are we all supposed to wait that long? *sigh* Keep up the awesome work! ~Sara
CrashedmyHarley chapter 1 . 2/14/2006

You have some spelling and gramatical issues, but those are easily solved. You wrote precede, it should be procede. And at some point you said that the smallest wave of her hand effected him in ways... something something something... effected should be changed to affected. Affect it when something does somthing to something, (lots of somthings) and Effect it what happened as a result. Like the cause and effect, what happened to get this result.

Srry, grammar fedish.

Still loved it though!

Kaytoko chapter 1 . 2/12/2006
oh ho! Wowness. that was good. . of course, i'm also a sucker for any good story related to Twilight. BUT anyways, i
Amanda The Stampede chapter 1 . 2/11/2006
Very Nice Story. I finished Twilight a month ago, and it's a great book. Do you know if Ms. Meyer has written any other books?
Elerie chapter 1 . 2/10/2006
Wow, you described Edward's emotions so wel! *_* I loved that part when Bella says his name and he decides to stay. I want them to be together! W00t!
heidi chapter 1 . 2/10/2006
wow...that was really good r u gunna add more to it...if so i cant wait to read wat else u write...!
Ashley chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
Hey. I just wanted to say that I read your story and LOVED it. I think it was very well written with the description of Edwards feelings. Its what I would have pictured happening as well. I like reading about what other people think of Edwards reactions to certain scenes. I hope you continue to write!

afallenblackrose chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
AWESOME! IS this just a one shot? Please don't make it a one shot. :)
CandlePen chapter 1 . 2/7/2006
Wow. . .this was amazing, beautiful. It took me a moment to realize what scene this is from, but I'm so glad you wrote this! It gives so much more dimension to that scene, and you described it perfectly. Wonderful, wonderful job!
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