Good job! I'm impressed with how much is written. Keep up the good work!

Good chapter! Keep up the good work! Please Update Soon!

Sincerely,

AshK

It had been a while. Glad to see you hadn't abandoned this.

Sadly, my hoped for Ranma/Kira seems less and less likely. Still hoping for Ranma/female though. What can I say, I like yuri.

You had me three quarters of the way through the first chapter. From there, this fic went straight to shit. Your plotline is very confusing, which if it's your angle only works after about four or five chapters.

I've pestered Innortal about this wonderful device known as a spellchecker. There're missing words throughout, the wrong word usage (are/our).

I can't follow what's going on anymore, and I get the impresion that you're of the Ranma/Ryoga-ship. Fine, but it's not my cup of tea.

GREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) Oh boy, Ranma going to have a BIG change to her life.

I'm sorry, but I couldn't get past your grammar to the story. Your very first sentence reads:

"Rei sat in front of the blazing fire as she did her annually fire reading."

Now "annual" or "annually" means "once a year". Rei does more fire readings than that. Secondly, you are using the term as a modifier for "fire reading", which means you should use the adjective form, "annual". "Annually" is the adverb form, which would modify the verb - "Annually, Rei did fire readings."

Then we come to the fourth sentence:

“Is any other people with extraordinary abilities like ours that might come and help us?”

You are using a singular verb and a plural noun. The sentence could start correctly in two ways:

"Are there any other people ..."

or

"Is there anyone ..."

Now, you could use atrocious grammar for Ranma - that is traditional. But Rei doesn't do that. And the author NEVER should.

Sorry to go all schoolmarm on you, but artisans should know the tools of their trade. If you were a carpenter, half your nails would end up bent over and smushed into the wood, instead of being driven in, neatly, up to the head.

Ellen

Excellent. I really love the fact that this story is like none other I've ever read before. Great imagination. Hope you'll brighten my day with another chapter soon.

It's a rather interesting take on an age old plot device. Unique enough to where I'd liek to see another chapter, if you please :)

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good story cant wait for you to update i love whats goin on here ,i really like that ranma has a friend that can help him and poke fun and tease him at times.

Does Ranma have Powers? So you know if you are going to Fuku Them yet? If you do that's cool if you don't that's cool too! Keep up the good work! Please Update Soon!

sincerely,

AshK

GREAT CHAPTER! (*3) and life gose on with NWC.

GREAT CHAPTER! (*x3) I think Ranma is ready for war.

Good work.

Lots of spelling errors here. The two most prominent being:

likelihood, not likely hood

Also, you use the word annual a couple times when I think you mean usual.

If this is post-Saffron, then Nodoka should already know about Ranma's curse. Also, Ryoga's pig curse is his most closely guarded secret. He would never willingly reveal it to ANYONE.

There's something about this story that just doesn't quite ring true. I'm not sure if it's because characterization is off for most of the characters, or just the poor grammar, or both. It may be because this seems rushed. I guess I'll have to keep reading.

Good. Can't wait for the action to start.