Reviews for The Aftermath
Ron's Sweetie chapter 1 . 2/13/2006
Oh my god what a great story. I hope you add Andy to it again in the next chapter i loved it.
softsyllables chapter 1 . 2/13/2006
Ok, a couple of things.

1. It was Dana who was Lu's partner when she was raped, not Andy. But it's your fic so whatever.

2. Lana wasn't a pshchologist when Lu was raped, she wasn't even a high school graduate yet, but again it's your fic.

3. Peter & Lu? Interserting pairing but give it some support, we know Peter and Lu are good friends but they never had anymore interest in each other. Tie the pairing together a little more.

4. I can tell your a good writer, but please check your writing over before you publish it. Don't rush along, check for spelling, grammar, read-through error a couple times first.

5. The Lu's rape topic is way to overdone on this bored. I know that using an overdone topic is good to start writing fics because you can get advice from other writers but try to branch out and come up with your own ideas, for example the Peter/Lu pairing could be a good fic on it's own

6. Keep up writing, I look foward to reading more of your fics.

PoetryxxPrincess
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