|Reviews for Me, You and Whipped Cream|
| JR Toguro chapter 3 . 11/1/2007
Nice build up of the sexual tension. Oh please don't leave the story unfinshed. I'm so ready for the next chapter. If you want to you can send me the next chapter.
P.S. Sorry if it got a little beggy but or desperate but I reallyu like the story.
| BlueBell chapter 3 . 8/18/2006
Please come back to this story. I absolutely love it. I'm sorry I didn't review, I was waiting for the finish.
| Babyangel86 chapter 3 . 3/26/2006
But best of all - he had cotton sheets.
i loved that line...
excellent stuff... coolio...
update soon... so good...
| BlueAngel137 chapter 3 . 3/13/2006
Oh, I somehow missed the 3rd part of this story (the M-rating :-( ).
It's absolutely beautifully written again.
I love the humor, their insecureties (-..., LOL) and Max "obsession" with whipped cream (-...“Really?” Max’s unruly mind flittered to the second shelf in his fridge to pick up the can of whipped cream and returned to the four inches of flesh peeking above the bedcovers. ...) hm
Great job again. THANKS.
| Jade-Tessier chapter 3 . 3/12/2006
love the ending! it reminds me of the end of blah blah woof woof.
keep it up :)
| Jade-Tessier chapter 2 . 3/12/2006
love, love it!
keep it up :)
| Jade-Tessier chapter 1 . 3/12/2006
keep it up :)
| angela-v chapter 3 . 3/11/2006
Great chapter. I love Logan's early morning unprocessed thoughts and Max's nervous sentences that run together. That whipped cream is begging to be used. I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Candra Jade chapter 1 . 3/10/2006
I love your story!Im so curious to see Max and Logan spending Valentines day that Max doesnt know much about these things,I expect some funny misunderstandings.
| 0101010 chapter 3 . 3/8/2006
Go Bob! So glad you are writing this-you write wonderfully. And I've learned a new word...gormless.
Looking forward to that can of Ready-Whip!
| Mari83 chapter 3 . 3/8/2006
Was again grinning for the whole chapter.
Love how Logan starts to ask about what he heard at Jam Pony and then is flattened by Max’s little speech.
“Or rather she had plenty of ideas of what to do with Logan or to Logan or for Logan just no idea if he wanted to do them with her” Hm… that’s the reason why this is rated M?
Cute – and funny - description of confused early-morning Logan “not wearing a whole host of other clothing items”
„having never done this before I was thinking that if you’re not doing anything tomorrow night .”
Max was looking at him with such anticipation and hope and vulnerability Logan felt himself freeze. She can’t be asking an old, self-involved paraplegic to spend Valentine’s night with her, can she?”
That’s my favourite part! Well, there are several others, too, but can’t quote the whole chapter here.
| Reilynn chapter 3 . 3/7/2006
OK, I officially love you now. This is great stuff!
I liked the line “How did she always manage to perplex him so easily?” It illustrated how much that Max gets to Logan.
Have I mentioned I adore your sense of humor? “Logan felt like a cartoon character, paused mid-air as the ground is suddenly rubbed out beneath his feet.” Now, I admit, I really enjoy picturing Logan, regardless, but this image is particularly treasured. “The spaced-out look did not suit Logan Cale,” is cute too.
I loved this line “Out of the frying pan (of her own making) into the fire (also of her own making).” But I cannot explain why. Still, for some reason, it made me laugh (all three times I have read it so far. ) Have I mentioned I adore your sense of humor?
“Check” is the perfect ending to the scene.
You used the time as a heading very well. Spacing the paragraphs one minute apart definitely conveyed Max’s insomnia and frustration.
Also, great job illustrating Logan’s disorientation upon first waking up. I don not know what time he usually get up, or goes to bed, but he did strike me as a bit of a night-owl.
RE: “Conditioned through years of male:female interaction, Logan’s brain became frantic.” Oh, sure, NOW he thinks of her as a female! Great line though.
Things I absolutely loved about that big long sentence/paragraph that starts with “It’s Valentines day …” and ends with “ifyouwant.”
1 – It was one sentence, albeit a run-on.
2 – You SO nail Max’s insecurities.
3 – Bling’s girlfriend ‘Maria’ that loves chocolate. OK, maybe that is an inside joke for DAR regulars (and maybe not) but I loved it!
4 – Three words “delicious chocolate thingy”! Captures Max’s appreciation of Logan’s culinary skills and how mystified the otherwise capable X5 is with cooking.
5 – Love the way the sentence speeds up at the end. If it were anyone other than Max you might think that she were running out of breath (hmm, maybe she was?) but my assumption was that she was losing the nerve it took her almost three hours to build up.
Logan is not that old, but good job tapping HIS insecurities.
As a geek I REALLY appreciated “began to run in safe mode” although I am not certain that any mode is really safe for the male in male-female interaction? ( I think not, but still nice try. ;) Have I mentioned I adore your sense of humor?
When I realized that Max was staring at Logan’s naked chest saying “Oh I have some ideas,” I just had to laugh. That was great! Have I mentioned I adore your sense of humor?
He should have got a clue at “His eyes settled onto Max as she slowly licked her lips, staring someway below Logan’s eyes,” (which is beautiful, btw!) or the “Oh I have some ideas,” but it IS more fun that he doesn’t. And she DID catch him in the morning without any coffee or even much sleep. Totally understandable. I wonder if he will pick up on it later!
One last great line: “not wearing a whole host of other clothing items.”
It’s wonderful to see a writer with a great sense of humor (or maybe just a sense of humor that is like mine?) Keep it up (speed it up, too, if feasible.) Truly a man after my own heart!
p.s. I mentioned I adore your sense of humor!
| an chapter 3 . 3/7/2006
Woderful! This is brillant! Funny, clever, amusing. GENIUS!
Why is Bling's girlfriend named always named Maria?
| annie200 chapter 3 . 3/7/2006
Great fluff. Very in character..and the line about logan running in "safe" mode made me chuckle out loud.
Enjoying 've managed to convey all those M/L insecurities about their desirability really well.
| Maria656 chapter 3 . 3/7/2006
Awesome and worth the wait! [though hoping chap 4 will appear sooner :-) ]
Loved the banter and the rushed speech and their thoughts.
and extra thanks for Bling and "Maria"! :-D