|Reviews for Spirit|
| The Amazing Flying Circus chapter 1 . 10/26/2007
Extraordinary. I love this story. It's genius; and you really know how to use that vocabulary, which I admire. You've got people in the palm of your hand with writing like this, you know. Good writers are ultimately the greatest puppeteers; they can play peoples' emotions like a xylophone, and that's a great gift. Congratulations!
| gamer260 chapter 7 . 9/24/2007
| The Lost and Found Box chapter 7 . 9/21/2007
MY GOD MAN CONTINUE THIS STORY!
I luff it
| Shady chapter 7 . 8/20/2007
OMG, I nearly cried. Actually, at some moments it's like wanting to laugh and cry at the same time, like how Yugi found his portal an insult because it's so small- that was really funny. And also moments like-
I told you I liked soap operas,” the spirit smirked despite himself.
“Yes,” the spirit replied. “Don’t worry; you don’t have to laugh.”
Yugi sniffed. “Then I won’t.”
- that was so nicely done, since I never expected that when Yugi joked around you're going to twist it around like this.
Also I really love your descriptions for the spirit nexus. All the similies and imagination just takes me away. And using Mako Tsunami was ingenious.
Yugi and Jou's relationship... just sweet.
The only thing is just that I'd rather you didn't make the Pharaoh "weep". It seems a little out of character after how he's been acting all along.
The ending was PERFECT. That's all I could say. I'm not very good with comments.
As a side note, Seto Kaiba will probably think about Yugi a lot when he learns that he's dead. They still hadn't had that rematch- the one in which Kaiba wins.
| Shady chapter 6 . 8/20/2007
The first part of this chapter, felt, frankly, a little out of place. Putting Shizuka onto the stage all of a sudden (even though it's used to express Joey's feelings through his dream) is a little weird. The fact that the drunk was Yugi was a surprise though.
A rather sentimental chapter... Though you are very good at using details to convey the emotions. And throughout reading the chapter, I couldn't help but think, so this is how it's like when a main character dies.
The only thing is the sentence "He was silent for a good few minutes". I just have a thing with people who uses the "minute" too casually. Try to sit still for a few minutes and one will begin to realise just how long it is. It'd be very awkward if he was silent for a few minutes and everyone just sat there and watched him.
I like how you end the chapter, going back to Yugi and all.
| Shady chapter 5 . 8/20/2007
I love this chapter! It's always nice when someone offers a way out of death. I love the way you used the idion "like the back of your hand" to bring in everything, and made the echo at the end. I didn't expect you to go from that phrase to the friendship symbol Tea drew. Very nice. This part was especially funny: "To most guys, a girl will smell like the perfume she’s wearing – strawberries, lavender, etc. To Yugi, she always smelled like a freshly opened marker pen."
Now things made sense- how things were at a standstill in the Afterlife world. You have a great imagination, and even though the river notion is not entirely new, the reader only realises now how important it is and remembered all the foreshadowing with the noise of it and all.
I also love the Duel-Monster-card way of meditation. It's so YGO. Putting the cards face-down. LOL.
It's a little sad to know that Yugi's friends wouldn't see them, but hey, I'll read on now.
| Shady chapter 4 . 8/20/2007
OMG, Yugi with no hair. It's funny and creepy at the same time. And sad. Even though Yugi is all dead, he's still in that other-world place. Very sweet interaction between Yami no Yugi and Yugi. This kind of thing would be hard to right because it has such a strong hint of yaoi. But you pulled it off and it's all very nice. I guess it's not entirely surprising to know that Yugi had died judging from what we read already, but still it's a little sad. *reads on*
| Shady chapter 3 . 8/20/2007
A little surprising how Joey was so mean before, and how his father plays such a big part in his mentality. But it's reasonable. A little sad though. Yugi is really sweet. Ouch, why did Bakura interupt right then? I want to know what Jou wanted to say. Risking his life for cards- just typical YGO-char behaviour. I'm wondering what Pegasus will say. ("God, people, I could just print another one for you if you ASKED"...?)
I am a little surprised that Yami no Yugi did not take over while Yugi ran back into the classroom. It seems like he wasn't even paying attention to the danger Yugi is in. I think he would have taken control under the circumstance. But then, he couldn't in the story because that'll mess up the plot. That's the only thing that isn't convincing. Otherwise, very good. Everything portrayed very well.
| Shady chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Gripping prologue. Very mystifying. Love the way you describe this other-worldly place. Especially this- "the sun had refused to set or even shift its stalwart position in the sky. Time, it seemed, was at a standstill – as was everything else in this godforsaken place. The boughs of the trees were stiff, refusing to swing in the breeze; the clouds hung perpetually in the sky as if they were part of some painted backdrop; even the grass seemed unnaturally rigid. There was no wildlife to speak of, either; the lack of birdsong was proof enough of that."
Very nice description. Oh, and what a relief when Yami no Yugi appeared. Though I found it a little weird Yugi calls him "spirit". I mean, in the Jap version Yugi called him "aibou" and "mou hitori no boku", and in the dub he calls him "Yami", but not spirit, as far as I know. But I haven't watched all the dub episodes.
| EagleFox chapter 7 . 8/15/2007
Aww that last part was sweet _
Hmm... not much to say. Uhh... I guess everyone else has already said anything that could be said?
I really like this story but I just lost my ability to stand parts where there are dead bodies. I blame my teacher! Oh well...
Yeah keep up the good work _~
| Dr. Watson chapter 7 . 8/11/2007
This is by far the best Yu-Gi-Oh fanfic I've ever read, natch. I hope your heart is still in this and you finish it eventually.
P.S. The part about Tristan's hair defying gravity had me in stiches :D.
| Yugisrose chapter 7 . 7/19/2007
Aw, such a good story! There has to be more though, right? RIGHT? Please write more Little Kuriboh(I know you're busy with the abridged series [which I love very much] but try and find some time to finish it!) I'll remind you on your website! (I hope I'm not nagging too much...I mean, you DO have a life...
Anyway, I love your work so keep it up man!
(Yugi's my favorite character too!)
| Yugisrose chapter 6 . 7/19/2007
Aw, that's so sad! It seriously made me cry at the end of the chapter! Good job! You are very good at storytelling!
| Yugisrose chapter 5 . 7/19/2007
| Yugisrose chapter 2 . 7/19/2007
You're such a good writer! You should definatley write more than two stories!