This is a good story-I really like your plot, but all the paragraphs of description weigh the reader down. In some of the wordiest places, I almost stopped reading. On the other hand, the dialogue was nice, and the way you're developing your characters as a family is beautiful. Please keep going!

Whoa. Now they -have- to go to Montfermeil. Definitely. No question.

This is great! I really like your wording and descriptions. And you're 13? That's just amazing how you can write circles around others your age.

I can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon! .

Yee! Why are they turning around?

Sorry about missing the last one. Not sure what happened. I really wanna find out what's in Montfermeil.

The village is Montfermeil? Woo, this should be very interesting indeed. Can't wait for the update.

A few nitpicks though. You're missing spaces between words, and you misspelled "and" in one spot. You also might want to go into more detail about what manner of crops the man had. "Crops" is very general.

If you want someone to beta, I'd be happy to volunteer.

It's a strange thing, walking barefoot on snow. It's freezing cold at first, but after a while you barely notice it.

You had a few spelling mistakes and the like. More than the other two chapters.

Wonderful. Really. It's well enough written to be an actual published story, which is pretty rare on Write more!

Yay, update. This sounds very interesting indeed, and I'm looking forward to more of it.

Interesting. I'm guessing it's non-canon, which is fine by me. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on it.