Reviews for A Moment in the Flames of Phoenix
lapaxlove chapter 1 . 8/26/2013
Oh my, I like the idea of not being able to burn down the remains of shinra.
really good one shot.
Seiji Kawazu chapter 1 . 5/8/2006
Hello! By the way, thanks again for entertaining my questions.

This story is really angsty! I can say that you are one of those in which FF7 was carved on their hearts. You can even reflect on every happenings and at the same time, you were able to evaluate Tifa's character deeply.

It was depressing to know that Vincent had suffered the same as Cloud's. But in the end, it was satisfying that he found peace in the amrs of Tifa.

I agree too with Darknightdestiny's suggestions but anyway, it didn't affect much on my reading (it's the thought that counts, alrighty? ;p)

Anyway, more power on your fanfiction career and if I have much time to spare, I would be glad to read more of your works.


Paint.With.Pain chapter 1 . 4/10/2006
That was such a sweet story, I really loved it. Great details and the phoenix idea was amazing!
Darknightdestiny chapter 1 . 2/22/2006
I enjoyed that very much. The visuals were enlightening; giving those old porcelain dolls a bit of personality and a searching nature which bore into her was a good idea. I also liked the part about how your Vincent would have wished to burn along with Nibelheim.

There are a couple of things I would like to point out, if you plan on making any changes:

"As long as they were kept alive, who knows when the period of suffering will occur?"

There are a couple of places where you mix tenses like that. I'm not sure exactly where that sentence fit in with the rest of the paragraph.

"Hojo-the sick and twisted scientist" and "original owner-the flower girl herself"

Technically this is all right, but normally when you see hyphens separating sentence fragments, you expect them to be phrases in the middle of a sentence; that is, you expect more to follow on the other side of a second hyphen. In this case, I believe that commas would be sufficient enough, and the text would flow much more smoothly.

Lastly, when you are writing a story, I do think it might sound much better if you spelled out "ShinRa headquarters," rather than using abbreviations like "HQ".

There were a couple of places where you used words where I thought you had meant something else, like using "very" where I'm sure you meant "every". I have posted several stories in haste and read them only moments after to discover that I missed a few things even when I made sure to do a careful read-through. But this story was a comfort to me, and you obviously have the potential to be a very good writer.

You write with feeling, and you use a lot of detailed description. So many authors would write this as a 500-something word fic saying things like, "She shivered." "She fell." "He was in the coffin having a nightmare and chaos had hold of him but she didn't know it etc., etc." You don't leave paragraphs unfinished, and you don't string important fragments together as if they were merely afterthoughts.

The main focus of good writing is to be able to make your readers feel what you are trying to get across. When you are sure that you have communicated your ideas to your audience, then you know you have a good piece of writing in your hands.

Congratulations on a piece well written.
ima hopeless romantic chapter 1 . 2/20/2006
Hey, nice chapter ] i like how they are so comfortable around each other. This is my first time reading a Tifa/Vincent fic so i hope its good! Heh . i think its kinda odd, them standing in the midst of flames and feeling good, lol.
BabyGurl278 chapter 1 . 2/19/2006
I really loved this! It was so touching and everything! I really think you should write more Vincent/Tifa stories, you do an excellent job on them! I'm loving this and I'll be looking out for more.