|Reviews for The 24th Chromosome|
| B10Reaper chapter 1 . 12/18/2008
Please move this to the movie section, this is the game section
| Banshee Queen chapter 1 . 8/6/2006
This was quite a good descriptive little fic, but I found this just maybe a little too abrupt in some sentences.
E.g. “John dimly remembered Sam sitting before him, gasping as she saw just how bad the bullet wound was and how deep it was buried in his flesh. John remembered feeling as if he were on the verge of becoming delirious with the sheer pain of his wounds, coupled with the shock of seeing his commander and his men getting devoured as if it were feeding time at the zoo...”
Just the starting of those sentences allows the reader to ‘neutrally’ read the rest of the fanfic, it sounds formal and abrupt, without feeling. Apart from that though, you did a great job at entailing the storyline, characters and scene. Good job. :)
| SuprChrgdBullet chapter 1 . 3/3/2006
Loved it! It was great!
| carljohn23 chapter 1 . 2/27/2006
Dang foo that bed sime gewd story yous gotts theres
| Caladhiel Elensul chapter 1 . 2/25/2006
Well, the summary was a little misleading. It seemed a little more like what happened after he woke up and not so much his thoughts on it. But it does have potential. The trick with these sorts of things is focus less on what's going on in the world, but in the mind of the character.
But I like it _ Grimm rox.
| Darkshadow008 chapter 1 . 2/24/2006
I tohught it was pretty good. Very detailed, awesome. Hope to see more Doom fan fic from you! .