|Reviews for Following Michael|
| mrmistoffelees chapter 2 . 9/4/2007
| Maliya Wong chapter 2 . 5/10/2006
Oh my god! Xians Suck is actually reviewing instead of bashing? I'll aplaud to that! (claps 100x) Anyways, I agree with the resent tensebeing slightly annoying to read. Past tense is better. If even Xians finds your story interesting then it must be good. _ Keep up the work, 'cause I'm crious!
| Lisa's Hope chapter 1 . 3/4/2006
You know this sounds like a really neat idea. But you have started writing it in present tense, and then you switch to past tense.
Present tense is really annoying to read, and it's hard to maintain, as you saw yourself. I recommend writing this again, in past tense.
And one other thing...your female sounds very Mary Sue-like. Watch out with the beauty and the curves and the locks etc and so on.
I don't give con crit very often. Get it while it's hot. Like I said, really cool idea.