|Reviews for Tangled|
| Castianamicheals chapter 35 . 11/18/2014
This is going to sound offensive and for that I apologize, however, you need a better proof-reader. The amount of spelling mistakes and improper word usage is...wow (and not in the good way).
That being said, I think that the story is fantastic and I will continue to read it.
| BloodFlowsLikeHoney chapter 37 . 12/29/2012
I know I said in an earlier review that I thought this story's plot was interesting. That was why I continued reading it despite the numerous and annoying errors. But this story was awful. All of the characters were out of character. Sam and Bobby just happen to find Dean in New York. Dean doesn't try to call Sam when he leaves the building with Alexander, even though the YED is a threat that Dean is worried about. All of the characters are completely stupid and stubborn and don't believe a word Dean says until they suddenly understand the error of their ways. And Angela and those doctors? They aren't psychologists, and yet at ever turn they keep asking, "Dean, how does that make you feel?" No matter the situation, they confronted Dean and bullied him into doing what they wanted and thought was best. Also, Dean would never be so forgiving. He would never even consider accepting Sam back after Sam left him three times. The way you went about writing this wasn't very good either. When the characters have arguments, they repeat the same things again and again: "It's impossible!", "He's my son too. I have a say in what happens to him!", "I thought it was for the best!" Are those the only things your characters can say? How about you write original and actually interesting dialogue. And Dean keeps saying he can't trust them for various reasons, yet he acts like he never said that and trusts them anyway. The way you wrote these characters is completely unrealistic and unoriginal. I applaud you for trying, and I suppose it's a decent attempt at a first story... for maybe a middle schooler or younger. I suggest you get a new hobby because you aren't very good at this one.
| BloodFlowsLikeHoney chapter 22 . 12/29/2012
I think the plot of your story is interesting, but I cannot believe that it is beta'd. There are so many punctuation, grammar, and spelling errors that I can hardly get through two lines without stopping because of a mistake. Also, you mix up words so instead of, "Dean said," you say, "Death said." Also, you wrote, "Fate to face," instead of, "Face to face." You made a ton of mistakes like that, and it is really frustrating to read through it even though I get the premise of what you're saying. Another thing that bugs me; Sam is completely out of character. I'm not even talking about when his memories were gone. In this chapter especially, he can't do anything but argue against whatever Dean wants. I don't believe that Sam would want their father in their life when their dad believes Dean has some monster or parasite in him that needs to be gotten rid of. It seems like Sam is arguing just for the sake of arguing. You even wrote that Sam had a lot of groveling to do, yet Sam isn't doing anything but being difficult, demanding, and self-righteous. You need to go back and edit your story properly, because I don't want to have to do it in my head when I'm reading.
| wolfiehowl-7213 chapter 37 . 12/3/2011
I know its been years since your last update, but I would really really really appreciate you continuing this story! I love it so much! I can't tell you how many times I've reread it over and over hoping one day you would suddenly update. Such an awesome story shouldn't be left unfinished, especially with Dean so broken! So please update even though its been awhile 3
| curiobi chapter 37 . 11/29/2011
hi, i just read this entire fic, and it is a very interesting story and i really want you to finish it, can i also say, i am a writer and i have posted fan fiction on this site,
i dont know whats going on here, but you seem to be taking way to much stick for spelling and grammer mistakes, this is fan fiction its for fun,no one has paid you to write for them so they can start complaining when things are not perfect, it does not have to be perfect, it just has to be a good story and this is a good story,
and i mean that i normally can not stand mpreg yet i read all of this becasue it was just so compelling and so heartbreaking in places
please, please continue to write, i dont know about you, but fan fiction really bought somthing creative to my life differnet from working on my own stuff, i guess its like when singers cover someone elses song, they get to put their own spin on it and have fun with it, and its not the same thing as slaving over your own stuff,
i dont mean to ramble, but please please, worry less about the critics and think more about the joy of writing about charecters you love, thats what fan fiction is about, please remember that,
there is nothing wrong with going back and fixing mistakes i do that too, but first and foremost, i love the creativity and the freedom of fanfiction and i love writing, please continue this story ;)
| BabyGirlTrina chapter 37 . 3/19/2011
CROSSROAD DEAL... CROSSROAD DEAL i really don't want baby Alexander to be dead...
| Lokisgrl chapter 37 . 3/15/2010
I have been trying to find this fic for about two weeks. Now that I've found it and read through it, I certainly hope you plan on finishing it, I'm thoroughly enjoying it!
| xXx SyroPhoenix xXx chapter 37 . 1/13/2010
0o0h Alexander! Why did it have 2 be him :'( ? 0k n0w that I'm d0ne grieving, when ya g0nna update c0z this st0ry is h0nestly the best Supernatural fic that I've read thus far, grammatical and spelling err0rs 0r n0t!(,)
| Tsunamarama chapter 37 . 12/27/2009
Please more! I don't care about mistakes! This story is addicting! I need more lol XD
| bunsdarien chapter 37 . 11/11/2009
Serious this is a great story, and don't let some A##HOLE ruin it for you. The baby dying is really upsetting.. but I look forward to reading more and how this story will continue. Write from the heart, and screw anyone that states otherwise. SarcasticShrew is probably some republican loser. I'll continue reading and hoping for more on your live journal.
| faith bonksie chapter 37 . 8/8/2009
U r so mean!
Let poor Dean be, and poor Alexander cant be dead!
keep going soon
| Fanpire109 chapter 37 . 7/24/2009
Alexanderf has to be okay/ This story is so aweosme but it will end up being horrible if that baby is not okay.
| annv chapter 37 . 11/15/2008
I cried when the baby died I know its been awhile since you have updated the story I hope you finish this story I like to find out if Dean gets pregant again or if he forgives Sam John and Bobby and if we find why the baby had to die
| janet1982 chapter 13 . 10/8/2008
how many chapter have you rewritten?
would like a update on wich chapter are rewritten:)
| janet1982 chapter 12 . 9/26/2008
is this chapter rewritten?