Reviews for Nightfall
Dixilo chapter 8 . 5/30/2022
Raises the question, is Bella really that stupid that any fanfic of her automatically latches on to her being slow and annoyingly stupid or does it become ooc even if the fanfic tries to only emulate her best qualities?
Personally, this fanfic is the worst Bella I have ever seen and I have read both Sharpest Lives and The Angel series. From chapter two, it has only been fillers with no plotline. I mean seriously you introduce a set of new characters but Bella cannot find the truth about them? And when she does some exploring she's threatened? And you deliberately show her to be stupid and weak? I mean why does she bite her tongue or leave the compound in the first place? Then suddenly Renee calls and becomes selfish? Maybe but she is never dismissive of Bella, like forcing her to do something she's not interested in? She's entirely against Edward but once she sees him for the first time tongue kissing her daughter she's like no no that guy is your home? You didn't even mention if the visitors left or they're yet to arrive.
And in this chapter Bella showing off Edward's money and glad that Lauren when failing to insult Bella starts on with Angela? I mean wtf. The only redeeming quality about Bella in the books is her sacrificial quality. I'm going to stop reading it right here because I have a feeling that the next two chapters are also dumb fillers and you have no story which is a real shame because your first two chapters had good promise.
raven haired girl chapter 14 . 5/11/2021
the story was so good untill 10th chp
BridieM chapter 14 . 3/9/2021
Thoroughly enjoyable. Thank you for writing
BridieM chapter 1 . 3/9/2021
Thank you for writing. This has a good start.
Guest chapter 14 . 6/9/2020
During this crazy times I found myself reading and looking for Twilight fanfics in order to keep me sane. During this 2 months of coronavirus lockdown I have read tons and tons of fics. Some bad, some regular, some good. But this I just read... It was the first fanfic that I can surely say is way way waaaaay much better than the real books. Don’t get me wrong, I love the books. But I also hated a lot of the drama and the holes in the original story. But this story that you created many years ago is amazing. I am grateful for the bad ass heroe that Bella turned out to be. I fell in love with all the interactions and pieces of normal life that we never got a chance to see in the real story. The plot! This fanfic has an original plot! Just thank you for creating this and sharing it. I hope that you are still writing. I’m sending you love and good vibes.
Guest chapter 2 . 1/6/2019
Why even bother having that conversation about the dream. Bella cant tell if they are inside or out, if its day or night...LMFAO. Bitch is totally useless. How is she even sure that it was her and Edward in the dream? I mean she cant tell anything else.
Guest chapter 1 . 1/6/2019
Please tell me that HUMAN Bella is not having dreams about the future. It would be pretty fucking weird for Bella to not only have POWERS whilst human but also have the same damn power that Alice has!
Kageyjay chapter 14 . 12/21/2018
Well, there were a lot of differences in this one. Some were okay, some were weird, and some were disappointing. You started before Breaking Dawn, so there was a lot that happened that you didn't know yet.
Guest chapter 8 . 5/30/2018
Bellas last meal was fucking weird. First up was eggs and toast? AS A LAST MEAL?

That shouldn't have even made the list!
Guest chapter 7 . 5/30/2018
This has all felt like filler, where is the meat?

No really, its chapter seven already when are you gonna start with a real plot?
Guest chapter 5 . 5/29/2018
That carethat Edward bought Bella? WTF? Bella would never want to drive that hideous piece of shit and I don't see him picking that ugly ass car out for her.

You know what I cant stand? When writers and I use that term loosely put themselves in the story by brand dropping. Or they put off their own wants as the characters even though it just doesn't fit.

Like bella gives one fuck about louis viwhatever luggage. NO ONE CARES
Guest chapter 3 . 5/29/2018
Weird how someone is hunting bella, planning to kill her and COMING from the south. But bella thinks its a great idea to go SOUTH to Arizona. Fucking morons.
Guest chapter 2 . 5/29/2018
Who the fuck are these vampires? And the humans know about them? I'm sure Aro will just love that.

AND I guess theres no problem anymore, they have a vamp that can make people do whatever he wants. BAM DONE

All they have to do is stick with him and he can get that other vampire to kill himself.
Varsini C P chapter 1 . 11/5/2017
It was great. Thank you for the wonderful story
Seethestarsinmyeyes chapter 1 . 3/26/2017
Considering English isn't your first language this story is absolutely amazing so far.
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