|Reviews for Time Warp|
| ObsessedwReading chapter 3 . 10/9/2014
Great fanfiction. :D
| ObsessedwReading chapter 2 . 10/9/2014
Fantastically written. :)
| ObsessedwReading chapter 1 . 10/9/2014
Great fanfiction. :)
| Sineluce Velius-Tristitia chapter 3 . 7/22/2014
TLC... Tomato, Lettuce, and Catsup... I think of Harry spreading those all over the room...
| Lord lover chapter 21 . 6/25/2014
You don't curse with the Lord's name! It is disrespectful to my religion.
| wishilivedinbooks chapter 7 . 4/16/2014
This story is great, and you have much better grammar than most fanfiction writers, but the French is terrible. it's uncongugated and translated word for word, not based on how the language is spoken. (Like, "je amour tu" should be "je t'adore). I'm guessing you put that into Google translate?
| UmmeXoX chapter 2 . 2/19/2014
Erm im confused, why is he taking it so well, does he even know where he is if yes then how
| Naiden chapter 5 . 1/1/2014
the classes sure are short in this story. Seem like they're about ten minutes long.
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/1/2013
You should write one were hermione gets bet by a werewolf and goes back in time and falls for Remus
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/7/2013
You're allowed to wear casual clothing on weekends. Anne-Marie would not have been wearing her uniform. I also respect that you may not speak French, but perhaps you should at least find a better translator... Personally, I like SDL Translation.
- 'J'aime bien' should be 'Je suis bien'. 'J'aime bien' means 'I like it'.
- 'Je amour tu' should be 'Je t'aime'. 'Je amour tu' is not a sentence in French, partly because you haven't conjugated the verb - amour. Actually, I'm not even sure that's the verb for 'love', I think you might just use 'aimer'. I think 'amour' is the noun.
- 'Tu as attendre' should be 'Tu dois attendre'. 'Tu as attendre' isn't a sentence in French. The closest thing to that sentence is 'Tu as attendu', which is the past tense. The 'as' part puts it in the past tense, as it's he past participle with 'Tu', and 'Attendu' is the past tense form of 'Attendre'.
- 'Oú est tu alles' should be 'Oú allez-vous'. Your sentence is incorrect as you conjugate the verb 'to be' not 'to go', and you're talking about multiple friends, so you want 'vous' as your personal pronoun, not 'tu' which is the singular 'you'.
- 'Que'est-ce que est mauvais' is not the simplest way to put it, and to be honest, I don't even know if it's correct. I would say 'Quel est le problème'. Simple, and correct.
- 'Tu t'appeles commet' should be 'Comment tu t'appeles'. You reversed the personal pronouns. And misspelt 'Comment'.
- 'Non, c'est-á-dire impossible'. I'm not even sure what you're getting at. Do you mean 'No, it is to say impossible'? Literally translated, that's what it means. If you want to say 'No, that's impossible' you would say 'Non, c'est impossible'.
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/7/2013
1. By this point, dragons would be somthing thwt might be covered in Care of Magical Creatures class, not DADA.
2. A couple chapters ago you had Harry say he wouldn't be setting any homework. He just set homework. Inconsistency.
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/7/2013
Okay, a second Q and A session? And again with all the angst - makes me want to cry.
Last thing - Harry loving pranks? So typical in these stories.
| Guest chapter 4 . 10/7/2013
A couple of comments -
1. What happened to Peter? He is still a Marauder, and a friend of Sirius, James and Lupin. He should be here.
2. Harry wouldn't have any pictures. He was impromptly thrown into the past. Possessions would also be few - he wouldn't have gotten his salary yet, so even if he'd had time to go to Diagon Alley, he couldn't have gotten anything.
3. The first part of the lesson would have taken max. 5 minutes in the real world. It's not possible there was only ten minutes left till lunch. At the very least show some time has past.
4. A Q and A session? Really? So standard, slightly boring. Everyone always asked the same questions, and get the same answers back. And angst is so common in those little sessions. It always makes me feel so embarrassed for Harry.
One last thing. You had him walk into the dining hall in the middle of the welcome feast and ask for a teaching position.
1. You've seen it once, you've seen it enough.
2. So melodramatic.
3. They definitely would have filled the position by then, even if the teacher wouldn't have been as good as Harry.
4. That blood? They all learnt the 'Scourgify' charm.
It's a good story, but you've got inconsistencies and plot holes, and ideas that are way too overused. Other than that, nice writing! Good luck with the rest of your story.
| KDTBpantherwulf chapter 6 . 9/25/2013
Wow. His class periods are reeeeally short. I mean, it's like, 'Hello class, today we're going to be working on hexes and cur-*bell rings* and that's the bell! Hope you had a wonderful class!'
| hate u chapter 6 . 8/10/2013
Terrible disguisting and bad writing. Writing just isnt your thing, go find something your good at because this is shite