Reviews for Detention
Optimistic Dude chapter 2 . 2/22
Hey, you need to work on your grammar, man. I know it's probably not a very big deal, and it probably isn't to anyone but me, but it's very distracting to the story. Also, you should change the word 'flesh' to 'skin'. If you use flesh, it reminds me of raw flesh, which isn't a good picture to have in your head. But it is a very well done story! I like how you stayed with the characters and really tried(and succeeded) to keep the reader interested. All you need to do to fix your story is to try to make it look professional. Just look through it, change what you want, and update us on the story so far!
Puck chapter 1 . 9/23/2015
Terrible what type of story is that, just hidden it was amazing please Wright MORE!
Guest chapter 2 . 4/21/2015
I really enjoyed how descriptive you were with the type of situations that were present. I would strongly suggest that you add more of his powers into the story because as I progressed through the reading and I came across the point where she said uncuffed me I assumed that she would turn into his ghost form and uncut himself I don't understand why she would have to do that and you know how much time will it take for her to get the key and unlock the handcuffs but that's just me. Overall, I give that a strong 9.5 out of 10 IGN would approve. And to top it all off I think that you are a very persuasive writer and you should continue to write because of the fact that you keep the readers engaged and at the same time leave a good me know arousal I am very intrigued what types of literature you'll create next who knows maybe even be 50 shades of grey.
Alice chapter 2 . 8/29/2014
same opinion. :)
darkcloud64 chapter 2 . 8/20/2014
nice cant wait read the next update
Techno Kidman chapter 1 . 8/4/2014
I like the story, but you really need to work on your spelling. I rate it 8/10
scotty chapter 2 . 7/27/2014
i thought it was really good but i liked thefirst chapter the best.
Guest chapter 2 . 6/13/2014
you really stoped it there? youre a lazy writer who doesnt finish things or make them longer or more enjoyable, why are all fanfiction writers like that? they have no鈥assion for their stories
Sexgod chapter 2 . 5/21/2014
This made me soooooo horny I jerked of right after
Guest chapter 2 . 2/5/2014
You have problems man. Big problems.
Guest chapter 1 . 1/20/2014
Not bad got me hard
Shizuolover chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
good job and kawaii
LW12 chapter 2 . 11/26/2013
you should have finish it and stop right there
Guest chapter 2 . 9/14/2013
I am a really big fan of danny phantom and i loved your erotic storie but it could use more chapters. like what the next day at school was like for them and how they got ti like each other man than friends. the storie was really great. gkod luck on ur next storie
Reaper Of Death chapter 2 . 7/25/2013
Boring and not enough pages could have been alot better suckiest fanfiction ive ever read
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