Reviews for Auto Pilot
Guest chapter 1 . 8/19/2014
This is a very interesting story and only wish that it should continue.
goth4ever chapter 1 . 1/8/2012
I have no idea what it is about this story that's so amazing, but I just can't stop reading it over again. Maybe it's the way you wrote it that I loved so much.

I love how you captured the rough and dirty side of the military. The side of the penny that isn't shined up looking pretty. It's much darker than other Fox and Falco fanfiction I've read, but definitely one of the better ones. I liked how there wasn't a gushy candy sweet happy ending to this too. I don't think it would have had a place in this story.

I can't really think of anything bad to say about this story, probably because there is nothing wrong with it. And I could probably go on and on about how wonderful it is to read. This will, by far, be my favorite Star Fox fanfiction, ever.
Shylittlebunny09 chapter 1 . 4/30/2011
Wow... You are truely a talented writer and I can't describe how amazing this story was. This was sad yet beautiful, and I loved how you portrayed Fox and his feelings towards everyone, everything, and Falco. I really love this story! :)
virtualsheep chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
Call it short if you will, but this is possibly one of the best peices of writing that I've read in a long time. It's hard to know where to begin. Three and a half years old or not, I just found it, so I'm going to review it, because I can~

The self narrative is used to good effect in bringing out the richness of character that you develop throughout the work; you chose a complex and emotional take on the cast of the game, then built a compelling, gritty, and inherantly morbid circumstance with it. The presentation of the thought process and mental effects of a war and subsequent chain of events, the contrast between the two differing points in the life of Fox, both viewed from one , present moment, keept that character building from being arbitraty or forced; instead flowing in inverted steps of consequence and action. Whilst not a groundbreaking concept, I'd also note that the occasional break into adressing a reader directly through Fox helped keep that biting personal edge alive, what with the underlying taint of cynicism and remorse in each addressal.

The handling of chronology was probably the other prominent feature to comment on, with the flitting between current and past events, based entirley on thought process again, keeping the stem of information entirley on your own terms. That control allowed you to build an exellent atmosphere; not only as above in providing insight into the mind of Fox, but as well building up a surprisingly sharp social commentary to run parralell with your own plot, a strong link with the real world to help a reader relate and loose themselves in the flow.

All in all, the affect was a deeply moving one. Playing with the immediate emotions of pity and guilt, but not sacrificing the relevance punctuated through, that left the story with a lingering, deeper felt link to the real world, and the striking parralells that exist.

The more or less absolute centralizing on Fox was, evidently, inevatable with the written style, but I do wonder if a little bit more explorative work into Falco, if only through the opinions and contemplation of Fox, would have provided some more depth of field. As a contrast, a point of contemplation, or even just a little more lingering of thought on him before Fox ran into introspection. Maybe it would, maybe something would be lost in the overall affect if you did, but a thought for what it could be worth.

Anyway, I've tried to keep my mind coherant enough to provide something valid in response to your work, and rest assured I will be religiously reading everything else you have written over the next few days. Keep up the great work, and don't ever sacrifice your style with written media, it would be a sorry loss for us all.

Fenrir Necros Jericho chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
I'm torn between wanting to comment on how good this is, or to say "to hell with it" and worship the ground you walk on instead. This story has a perfect blend of light and dark which helps show the many sides of the tale. I say you should write more and get something published because you would be rich.
Koganeiro chapter 1 . 7/16/2008
I'd have to say I loved reading this. It was quite emotional, though the scene changed confused me for a minute or two. All and all, it was a cute fan fiction, and the writing was amazing.
Vampire209 chapter 1 . 6/19/2008
That was wonderfully written! I couldn't even stop for a second! The language was emotional and really made me link with the characters and their situations and i really felt for them whenever they were discovered in the bathroom.

Excellent work, it was a pleasure to read
Shail666 chapter 1 . 6/6/2008
So, that was amazing. There was no specific part that I liked, though the ending and the number of flashbacks and occurances had be going, but this was very, VERY well written and it covered a nice topic. Thank you very much for posting~ *_*
GamerLioness chapter 1 . 1/25/2008
Very detailed and engaging. I also like the combination of longer sentences followed up by shorter, abrupt ones. Great job!
Apple Pornography chapter 1 . 1/19/2008
Uhh... Yup, you most definately need to write more to this. I'd like to say though, I don't like Fox's speech without quotations. It's kind of confusing, and it distracts me from the story itself. I'm not trying to be harsh or anything, it's just my opinion. I do love your writing skill, however, one of the best I've seen on or anywhere for that matter.
Elendraug chapter 1 . 6/13/2007
Y'know, this really is something special. I enjoyed it thoroughly, so the least I can do is give you some constructive criticism and praise in return.

First off, I think I caught a mistake: "Their dog tags; One is his and the other is one of mine." Pretty sure you meant "they're," but who knows. "Their" kind of makes sense, too. Technically that O in "one" shouldn't be capitalized, either, but it's not a huge deal.

Usually first-person POV stories annoy me, but the particular tone and wording you use here make it effective. Fox's voice as a disenchanted ex-soldier is bleak and haunting, dark, dirty, but delicious. If only more narratives were like this! I can't quite place what the whole thing reminds me of - like some combination of Fight Club and film noir. Your descriptions are visceral in a wonderfully harsh, grimy way. I loved the contrast between the high-class-but-fake military ceremonies and the dingy reality that they've had to deal - or not deal - with after everything's over. It's realistic, which is refreshing after reading so many OOC, idealistic stories.

I also liked the way you jumped around in the timeline; it was disjointed enough to seem like a plausible thought progression instead of a history-book-timeline, but not to the point of it being stream of consciousness and cluttered. The anger-management-meditation was amusing and endearing, and Fox and Falco's relationship was just explicit enough to fit with the rough, matter-of-fact story, but subtle enough to not come anywhere close to overpowering or sappy. It's certainly not a run-of-the-mill shitty yaoi fic - this is high-quality stuff. The only possible negative is that the writing comes off as a bit dry at times, but with the dismal situation, it's fitting.

Well done. I loved it. :3 Keep up the excellent work, seriously.
K. Hendricks chapter 1 . 5/13/2007
I was surprised to find a writer of this quality here. I liked the style he wrote in; his lack of quotes for Fox added a sense of "in your shoes" to the story.

This story was actually one of the better things I've read in a while, here or anywhere else. I'd like to see more from this guy. If his other stories are as good as this one, I'd say he has a future in writing.
Chiibo chapter 1 . 4/19/2007
I began reading this story a couple of days ago, and I just recently finished it. I would like to start this review with a list of things I definitely liked about it.

* The way Fox narrated the story gave a very accurate view of how people think about events of this calibur

* The way the people talked and were described was very realistic

* The way you presented the relationship between Fox and Falco was very beleivable

Next, I will list all the things I didn't like about it.

* The way that whenever Fox said (vocally) anything, there were no quotations around it. I can tell that you were trying to be creative by the way a new paragraph was made whenever he said something and how it made the reader see through his eyes to some degree. But the problem arises when it is in a conversation and I (the reader) can't tell if he is saying (vocally) something or thinking it.

* The amount of flashbacks was somewhat confusing. But I am not saying I don't like the flashbacks you put in it, because it gives a view into Fox's mind about what he is thinking about. But the amount of flashbacks somewhat muddles up the main plot.

In closing, this is one of my favorite stories on and I definitely think that you (if you want to) should continue this story. Thank you.

Please e-mail me if you have any questions.
Akebo chapter 1 . 3/20/2007
This was written in an interesting way. Not bad, but different. I would speerate the thoughts and words Fox is actually saying by some means. It got confusing at some points and I had to go back to understand it. Some minor grammatical errors which can be fixd through looking through it again, and some sentences that really needed to be rewritten.

It was an interesting pairing for me. I never really considered Falox as a legitament pairing because of their differences, but this actually was pretty good. While it wasn't dark per se, it was rather gloomy and something that I shall keep in my Favorites for some inspiration while I torture my characters with words.

I really respect that you brought a "what if", an obscure "what if", and tied it with a "what then" sort of deal, as in "what happened after the games?" and made it "What happened after the games and what would have happened had Fox and Falco gotten together?" It really seemed like a decent answer to some not-thought-about-but-answered-anyway questions. Kudos. I'd appreciate more action in something in this, but bggars can't be choosers.
Elyk chapter 1 . 1/3/2007
I thoroughly enjoyed your tale. Personally, I like dark fics and, in my opinion, this would be exactly how Fox and Falco's relationship would have turned into. A story well done!
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