|Reviews for silent but deadly|
| PaceyW'sgirl chapter 11 . 1/1/2007
well that sucks that he killed casey, i was hoping that she was going to find his gun and shoot him. he should die for what he did to olivia and casey, unless you do a chapter where olivia isnt died and she is just in the WPP but made everything think that something happend to her. well i hope that there is more of this story to come soon.
| Blaze426 chapter 10 . 9/27/2006
Great Chapter! Just read it, A little mistakes in a couple chapters but grl it was tight! Love it, cant wait 4 more.!
| Jazmine86 chapter 9 . 5/25/2006
oh no i hate gary that bastard update soon
| N. Halifax chapter 8 . 5/24/2006
"Why didnt you tell me you was pregnant".
its 'were' not 'was'
Your buetiful Case',If Gary (its spelled beautiful)
please spell check and grammer check! i know i tell you every time but you never seem to notice the advice im giving you!
if you want i would be glad to beta for you just private message me!
good chapter of over all
| mady chapter 7 . 5/8/2006
it was really good and unexpected (inagood way) but there were alot of spelling mistakes
| onetreefan chapter 7 . 5/3/2006
wow that was so good. i liked the update. if i got the pick the couples you set up next, you need to set up elliot and olivia (of course) and casey and fin. i like these coupling! please more soon!
huge fan of EOness!
| Jazmine86 chapter 7 . 5/3/2006
you really need a beta half of the problem is spelling and the other half is the way you wrote it it didnt really make sense not trying to be rude take this as constructive critisism
| N. Halifax chapter 6 . 4/30/2006
you need to reread cause you have lots of spelling errors in there!
why is casey spending the night at Elliots house when her fiance is at home waiting?
Casey is so mean to him its not even funny!
| N. Halifax chapter 5 . 4/18/2006
make sure you use a different paragraph when ppl talk so it doesnt all looked bunched up cause it makes it easier when its spread out.
make sure you use quotation marks cause on some you didnt put them in (spell check and reread your writing after you finish paragraph)
like always just send me a message if you got questions!
| YellowRosesAndHearts chapter 4 . 4/3/2006
The plot is decent enough, but I couldn't bring myself to read Chapter 2, b/c of the awful punctuation. Please. Please. Please spell check. More people will want to read if you follow the conventions. I don't mean to grill you, but, watch that.
| onetreefan chapter 4 . 4/3/2006
wow this is really good. im liking where you are taking this. good luck. poor gary though man! LOL good luck!
| N. Halifax chapter 4 . 4/2/2006
oh not cool casey! bad bad fin! you think i can mary gary? lol
good chapter, i liked it! damn fin is not nice and casey is mean to gary! i hope gary finds out and then yells at casey and then fin dumps her (not sure why but humor me) then she goes crawling back to gary but gary is to busy having sex with me! lol haha dont mind my imagination lol
hope you update soon! (with my idea) *winks*
| N. Halifax chapter 3 . 4/1/2006
good chapter! but im confused, who died? who did they lose? oh and dont write "Just seeing how you was doing thats all".
the 'was' is supposed to be 'were' cause it sounds better, i know people talk differently then the way its supposed to be written but the 'was' makes the line sound bad
write more how they feel, like what they are thinking at that moment cause it gives more feeling to the story!
hope the criticism helps! great chapter over all and i hope casey doesnt leave gary cause he seems super nice!
| N. Halifax chapter 2 . 3/23/2006
no! bad bad Casey! cheating is naughty! please make her brake up with Fin cause Gary seems nice!
leaving a review cause you leave for my stories all the time so thought i return the favor!
update soon! it just got intresting, I like this alot!
| Maureen Olivia Lockhart chapter 2 . 3/12/2006
What the-? Fin would never go out with someone who is engaged to be married! Did you not see my previous review? Ugh. Oh and I did report this story. I only read this second chapter to see if the story had improved but nope. I guess it hadn't. I am telling you. Do NOT continue!