|Reviews for Aphrodite's little helper|
| TrialLunatic chapter 1 . 4/23/2007
Very interesting and in-character! I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was light, and humored and also well devised. Good story.
Just out of curiosity... are you British? Because some of the things some characters say kind of threw me off...
| fledge chapter 1 . 3/15/2006
Well, another teacher's advice - hope you don't mind:
* don't see what wrenching is supposed to mean, my dictionary says it's 'a violent twist or pull' which doesn't make much sense here
* you RIDE a horse, but you RAID a village
* what's 'bad self-confidence'?
* generally, look out for the adverbs, they are nasty little buggers, especially as you don't have them in your own language (as far as I know, at least we don't have them in German, which is mine)
Good fun to read, especially the change of POVs is done very cleverly; and your description of 'Dite is great, also the way how her manner of speech is so very different from Meg's. And - "She kept not responding. Louder this time.' is something Terry Pratchett might think of.
| csigeeksmeetsharrypottergeeks chapter 1 . 3/11/2006
good story it's nice to have a non'joxer centric story poster once in a while