|Reviews for Shadow Fox|
| nero swordblade chapter 4 . 3/22/2013
very good but you need a bit more ideas for the extra stories at the end and also i know this is a story for 2006
| nero swordblade chapter 2 . 3/22/2013
actually even though you said "To anyone who read about halfway through this chapter and quits thinking that it is another "Kyuubi trains Naruto" fic, then you are wrong," you just turned it around it's not the kyubi who trained him it was shadow-fox which is somehow same to kyubi exept about the appearance, and personality but i still like all of this GOOD JOB!
| Eien Michi chapter 2 . 2/10/2013
I really laughed in chapter 2. Starting great already :)
| Sleyman chapter 13 . 1/29/2013
...Yup. I think there is going to be a palm-print on my face after this.
I held out on reviewing so far, but I can't just NOT comment at this point in the story.
To keep things brief, the way the characters -all of them- act is is deeply confusing. On one hand, they act like high-school drama students playing caricatures of Naruto characters with zero hours of practice or study. And on the other hand, half of them seem to be bipolar, uncomplicated souls that wantonly overreact to everything without giving half a thought to what will transpire immediately after.
The way some of the sentences and paragraphs are constructed is a little...disquieting. As in... I can't escape the feeling that they have some kind of hidden meaning or implicit message that I am consistently failing to grasp due to lack of explanation and/or context. The general tenor of the story also makes me feel like to properly "enjoy" it, I would need some kind of troll-creature following my reading over my shoulder and gently elbowing me in the side to try and encourage me to actually crack a grin at what may or may not be jokes.
More interestingly, for me at least, is the near-unbearable levels of *Marty Stu* going on. I'll grant that it was subtle at first, but by this chapter it has become glaringly obvious that Naruto is now harder/faster/stronger/smarter than everyone else (of-or-around the same age, at least). I guess all he needed to explosively improve was to run away from the highly organised and high-quality training Konoha could offer and go play with magical foxes that exist "because of reasons." I would personally put massive emphasis on the theory that Kimimaro taught him a disproportionally massive amount that the time frame or exposition would suggest, but Naruto's nonsensically efficient solo-training would seem to debunk that. I also refuse to believe that Orochimaru would ever be that accommodating with anyone for any reason ever.
You ranted a few chapters ago about self-insert characters, which I was willing to overlook at the time, but if you HAD put the "super-powered Naruto mock-story" in THIS chapter I would have needed to grow extra hands in order to give you the correct number of thumbs-up for irony.
| chrysanths chapter 2 . 1/8/2013
Honestly, I hated this chapter. I can't continue to read, but I will say what I thought was wrong...
Ninja in the Naruto-verse are more complex than the cliche all-black wearing "ninja" of popular culture. They need to be able to blend into civilian crowds, besides the obligatory would you take an orange jump-suited ninja seriously in battle? In direct combat, this should be seen as a bonus, NOT as a point of weakness. Maybe muted earthy tones would have sufficed but these kinds of choices make it impossible for me to take you seriously as a writer. The ANBU wear lots of black but it appears part of their profession, as uniform.
Admittedly, if attire was just personal preference, then he could have kept his hair color but wore a bandana when necessary. Personally, I always loved the fanfiction associated idea that being able to be stealthy in such bright clothes would have been the ultimate in tests for a stealth focused shinobi.
I liked the Kyuubi/Naruto relationship but that was a deal breaker for me.
Thank you and have a nice day.
| i-defy-fate chapter 18 . 1/7/2013
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO, WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY! :( I want another chapter
| randomdrifter chapter 5 . 12/30/2012
Again i agree the SakuSasu pairin is jus dumb & has nothin to bak it up in the love sense. Besides all crushs are the same right? Unless u count stalker/obsessed crushs.
| randomdrifter chapter 4 . 12/30/2012
Im REALLY late but i agree on ur NaruHina rant. Hinata always pissed me off cuz she nvr had the courage to say anythin. Wat use is her lovn him if hes still alone cuz she couldn open her mouth?
| yome- san chapter 2 . 12/2/2012
tramatic yet lovely
| Banjo chapter 18 . 11/10/2012
You... Bitch... FINISH IT OR ILL CUT YOU.
| NanoCarp chapter 17 . 10/9/2012
Wow... I was going to wait until the end of what you have up so far to comment on all the hypocrisy you have going on here with your rants, but this... I have to say something now.
First off, I like how you've gone and bashed all these other story types. Yeah, I admit, 99% of them are shit, and most of them don't interest me in the slightest, however, that does not mean that they are trash and should not be on the website.
Naruto & Hinta? Okay, yeah, you pretty much nailed that one on the head. BUT! Here's the thing. When done right, the story is captivating and makes sense. You have to remember that as FanFictions, all these stories, like yours, can take creative liberties and stray from cannon. The same goes for the other stories you've bashed. Again, I'll say that you're right that 99% of them on this site are crap, but that does not mean the concept is. The point of a FanFiction is that we are using the characters developed by someone else to write a story. Go to high-school? Okay, fine. It's not what many people would think makes sense with Naruto, but if you can make it work and be a good story, go for it.
Next stop on my counter rant? "Super-Naruto." Wow. You could not be further from the truth here. While most "Super-Naruto" stories do end up with almost no real reasoning behind it, once again, the trick is doing it right. I've seen a decent number of stories like this, where Naruto is made "super" and yet the story still plays well. I admit it's a bit crappy that Naruto kicks everyone's ass, but it can be made interesting through other aspects of the story if the writer knows what they're doing.
Next point. Yes. For the general population of writers on this site, most of these arguments don't apply to them because they are just fan-boys/girls who don't give a crap about writing. However, that doesn't mean that every story like those are shit.
Last stop, and this is the best part, your story. Oh boy. Your description touts that you have over 1000 reviews! Congratulations. I bet maybe 20 of them are because of your story and not the rants, but I can't be bothered to check. You interrupt the story too much with flow-breaking ANs, and your ANs at the start and finish are both repetitive and hard to stomach. I admit that your writing style is decent, but then... there's this chapter. What the hell happened here? Why, oh why, is this clusterf*ck necessary? It feels like you're trying to cram half the Naruto storyline into a single fight. Most of the participants would not have bothered getting involved off the bat if they were even there in the first place! I seriously hope that there is a good reason for this.
Last thing. Hey! I'm flaming you with an account! Who's the pussy now? Regardless, I've begun to recognize that you seem to be something of a troll, so reply to me all you want, I'm not even going to open the messages.
| sdphantom10 chapter 18 . 10/1/2012
whats sad is you could probably get people to take your "super OC" plot seriously...
ENOUGH OF THE SAD SHIT! GUSHING SUYOKI MANDA GAMABUNTA SHUKAKU SUPER MONSTER BATTLE! so...awesome...
| uchigatana chapter 18 . 9/12/2012
I was going to put this story on deviant art for you and maybe adopt it if thats ok
| Writer of Epics chapter 18 . 9/10/2012
this is turning into a crackfic, no offense.
| Writer of Epics chapter 3 . 9/9/2012
I know you're WAY beyond this point but i have to sa the authors not in this chapter, where you gave them the vote, i like the way you did it. You had an idea and gave them a vague idea of what they were voting for, if that. plus i would like you to know that i agree, while i do not hate naru/saku stories, my favorites are when naruto moves on, and sakura realizes what she lost and completely loses it. but other than that i mostly like naru/tem and naru/tayu.