|Reviews for Shadow Fox|
| narutohinata4life chapter 1 . 4/22/2014
I say rise all perverts if you are one then salute to it and I am considered a sadistic bastard to but not in a good way
| beastgamer118 chapter 1 . 3/27/2014
Lol great story! I must also commend you for your authors note lol funniest thing ever and also true.
| Mr.Chaos chapter 9 . 3/3/2014
bro i am so glad that you don't read lord of the rings fics because if you did there would be a nuclear armageddon loll
| Skylander403 chapter 4 . 2/23/2014
bash there asses
| Skylander403 chapter 2 . 2/23/2014
Bash sakura more she so desverses it
| Guest chapter 13 . 12/16/2013
He sacrifices in canon kin and zaku to bring tobirama and hashirama back I don't know who he sacrifices to bring minato though
| Flaming Kyuubi-Chan chapter 17 . 10/21/2013
i like your story and i dont mine that it is narukin. My favorite pairings are naruhina and sasusaku but im open minded. And no, i am not a fangirl. anyway its called sleep possum justu just so u know.
| Walk The Max Planck chapter 4 . 10/2/2013
I loved how short the flashback of Naruto meeting Kyo was; it was just funny how short and simple it was. It seems like you were making fun of how overly long many flashbacks about meeting people are, and if that wasn't your intent the it still made me snort with amusement anyway.
| Too lazy to log chapter 7 . 9/16/2013
You're an ass about pairings but your so right !
| ThatGuy chapter 14 . 9/2/2013
Lol it seems in the anime, all it did take was a genjutsu to control the kyuubi.
Great story by the way!
| 5th Dimension chapter 16 . 8/19/2013
Mary Sue/Marty Stu is a term of multiple meanings. There are multiple kinds of Mary Sues. The basic meaning that everyone uses the term for is one of three things: Overpowered character, self-insert character, or generically perfect character. There are also these kinds (names and descriptions from tvtropes):
Black Hole Sue — Everything is about me!
Purity Sue — Love me!
God Mode Sue — Power overwhelming!
Mary Tzu —I knew you would do that. In fact, I knew you would do that before I even met you, cuz I'm JUST THAT GOOD!
Jerk Sue — I'm a complete and utter bitch and I have constant PMS...love me!
Possession Sue — My favorite character is an even better version of me!
Copy Cat Sue — I'm just like my favorite character, but even kewler! (This article is where I found a link to you.)
Relationship Sue — You're my boyfriend now!
Sympathetic Sue — Feel sorry for me!
Anti-Sue — I'm genuinely useless, but everybody still loves me!
Villain Sue — I have you now, my beautiful slaves! Ahahahahahahaha!
Fixer Sue — No, that's not how it's supposed to go!
Parody Sue — Why don't they fall for my buxom charms?
You can decide for yourself whether or not the Kin as you make her fits any of these or not. I suggest going to TvTropes(.org) and looking up Mary Sue for yourself if you're not sure, or taking a Mary Sue Litmus Test.
| 5th Dimension chapter 7 . 8/19/2013
I've only gotten to chapter 7 because I'm reading your rants.
Your story is boring. It took a few re-readings to realize why.
It is very mechanical. It reads like a story made by a computer taking what it knew of Naruto and basic storytelling and combining the two together. This is made worse by the lack of shown (rather than told) events, the author's notes you put everywhere, the occasional remarks about fangirlish behavior (in your story, even, not just in your rants), the grammatical errors, the constant Japanese suffixes, and the dull, predictable, and blocky romance overloaded with way too many romantic cliches.
Your story up until this point can be summed up as thus: Sasuke dies but doesn't actually. Sakura yells at Naruto, who runs away. Naruto talks with fox-demon, who sends him on a path to obtain new powers out of seemingly nowhere (a little creative, mind you, but still not great). Naruto ends up on the opposite side of what he was in canon. Kin is painfully obviously connecting with him, with nothing left to the imagination or implied. Naruto must be sent back to his hometown because plot, and sees Sasuke, causing more weird angst (I don't remember angst being a large part of Naruto).
This might be a cool concept, but you don't do it well. You talk on and on with lots of details, but this is both overwhelming and boring. I want some things left to my imagination. Reading is an escape, not a study of events. This is partly why so many people write about romances you don't like and insert author-inserts. They're taking themselves out of reality. If you can't do that, your stories will always be dull.
Orochimaru's part in your story is kind of strange. He was a creepy bastard in the manga. He had powers that were terrifying and a mind so twisted that I wanted him to die (very rare for me, as I don't usually get that invested in characters). You've managed to turn him into a villain with the same goals but a generic personality. He isn't Orochimaru. You should just call him "Villain." Or "Campy Schemer Villain" if you want to be accurate.
Getting the character right is important. I'm not reading your story to read about "Campy Schemer Villain." I'm reading it to read about alternate-possibility Orochimaru and the rest.
I don't normally comment this much on stories, but with your rants, I almost have to. It's strange to me that you can see so much bad without identifying what truly makes for bad storytelling.
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/13/2013
I agree with that you said in your a/n and so far the fic is good
| Rosey Fox chapter 4 . 7/23/2013
LOL, You think 85% of NaruHina fics end like that? One shots do not count, and if they do here is every other character, oc or not with Naruto...
'Oooh, hey there stud, i'm so grateful that you saved me - Karin'
'Its no problem at all lady! I just like to help! - Naruto'
'Well how bout you let us help you, big boy - Mei'
'Alright! - Naruto'
| SkyRage chapter 4 . 5/20/2013
I agree with you on ALMOST everything you have said so far, although I do like the Neji/Ten pairing.