|Reviews for A Pretender and the Tomorrow People in Surbiton|
| RLS83843 chapter 1 . 3/24/2006
It is a nice introductory story. You might want to develop it into somethin g more. Now that they have ment, what are they going to do? Look at my TP stories. I have them older involved in issues. I've added characters. etc.
| tiylaya chapter 1 . 3/18/2006
An interesting story - and nice to see the TP getting a little recognition.
I did notice one or two slips - 'at university' is more common than 'in university', 'bus company' is used rather a lot in the opening paragraphs, and numbers less than ten are usually spelled out in text rather than written as numbers - but these really didn't detract from the story, which gave the TP and Jarod a shared moment of sympathy from others who could understand their anxieties.
| Mackon chapter 1 . 3/17/2006
Realy Realy needs editing paragraph and line breaks all but unreadable as is.
Good idea through Tommorow people not used enough.