|Reviews for A Love Born From Steel|
| Julie H Mayer Vognar-julie01 chapter 5 . 4/9/2006
I can't WAIT till Tom "figgers 'em out." Lureen was a surprise, but not too much of one (I was always more partial to Lureen than Alma anyway). "bigger tits than I have"-haven't made up my mind about that one...things that jarred: the word "weird," and (REALLY) "street smart." What street? How many, do you suppose, had Jack really seen? How can someone who's hardly ever been on a street use the words "street smart"? "people smart"? People are everywhere...
Bob and I nearly got into a fight about the "old style TV." 1) until they got cablized, country places more than 100 miles from the nearest city-didn't have ANY TV. A little unincorportaed grange in Northern California got cableized in '71..how "old style" is this TV supposed to be? I guess "small" is O.K. unless you want to go back before 1950, with the tubes,-and they sure didn't have any TV back then on this ranch.
Lureen sure is being nice, with telling L.D. it's her idea...
Keep it coming...please
| A Horse Called Hwin chapter 5 . 4/9/2006
What a ride! Lureen is so much easier to deal with than Alma, and I like the part at the end of the chapter!
| Valandil Eluch chapter 5 . 4/8/2006
i like this i loved it Ennis and Jack are so cute together
| Steve chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
This is really a good story. Plausable and impressively written. The dialogue is particularly good. It is hard to write. Also, I like the fact that they continue to have a "real life" including problems, despite the fact they have decided to be together.
| ILoveAnnie chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
2 words: Friggin' excellent! I am waiting for Chapter 5. Your writing flows, the dialogue is amazing and all the details are great. Do keep it up! Great work!
| Sam Cdn chapter 4 . 4/4/2006
I'm still really enjoying your story. I like the idea of having them crashing at this farm with this clueless professor ... sounds like plenty of opportunity for tension, mix-ups, and general excitement! Like MadLori, I'm eagerly anticipating learning what happens when Jack and Ennis tell Tom they only need one bedroom ... if they do tell him.
While I enjoyed the conversation between Ennis and Tom, I could have done without the entire history of his family and that farm. It just kind of came out unnaturally and, to be honest, it was kind of boring. If any of that information is necessary for the understanding and progression of the story, I think it should come out in a more subtly. But that's just my opinion.
Other than that, great chapter and I'm looking forward to more.
| MadLori chapter 4 . 4/4/2006
This is shaping up really well, MW. I'm really enjoying it! I can't wait to see where you take it next. How will the professor react when his new cowboys only need one bedroom...or will they take two and start sneaking around at night?
| Julie H Mayer Vognar-julie01 chapter 4 . 4/3/2006
Story is speading itself out nicely, slowing down. Tom sounds like he might be a good thing; Lureen is yet to come.
Fsat or slow, I like the direction you're going...
"Don't ask" sounded a little bit off...
What I DON'T understand is how 3 or 4 of you can take these best-belovewd characters of all of us, and send them merrily on their way wherever you want to send them..and we all love it.
Wonders are not likely to cease soon...
| SF Cowboy chapter 1 . 4/3/2006
Fantastic! Can't wait to read the chapters past #1
Pete in SF
| CadetBrujon chapter 4 . 4/3/2006
OMG, you added the eyeglasses! LOL!
Looks like you're building yourself quite a fan base, and I'm very, very happy for you and glad if you find any of my suggestions helpful.
I think you're moving this story in interesting directions. As I've said elsewhere, I think you do a great job on portraying Ennis's love of horses. I find that very touching and humanizing-there is more to Ennis than just his love of Jack. It might seem morbid to say I "like" the motif of Jack's depression, but as one who has known the black cloud behind the eyes, it adds a very interesting note of realism to the story.
Keep up the good work!
| A Horse Called Hwin chapter 4 . 4/3/2006
I really like the part in which Ennis comforted Jack!
| fenlyn chapter 4 . 4/2/2006
Love the precise details! You sure you never lived on a farm? Trailered two horses cross state lines? Stayed at a horse motel? Pacing, characterizations, just great. Thanks!
| onefreetoroam chapter 4 . 4/2/2006
Wow, this is great. Sounds to me like they might actually have a permanent home - although I'm not sure they'd like Texas or Wyoming? Waiting for the next chapters with baited breath.
| Peggyz chapter 4 . 4/2/2006
Ooh, ooh! It sounds so promising! I can't wait to find out what happens!
| Pip3 chapter 4 . 4/2/2006