|Reviews for When Locke First|
| Audio Pineapple chapter 1 . 12/30/2006
I really liked it - esspecially the way you used the repetativness at the start of the sentances.
| thefilmchick chapter 1 . 6/25/2006
There's a nice unstated parallel in the last line - that this is indeed the FIRST time he feels so alone - that caught my eye precisely because it wasn't stated. Nice use of restraint there, and likely accurate as to what Locke thought at that moment.
| Munchkin chapter 1 . 4/20/2006
Interesting. You captured my attention. You should add more to it.
| smiling chapter 1 . 3/23/2006
This turned out wonderful! Great job. And thanks for the rec :o)
| Tinkerbell99 chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
Interesting idea for a short fic, and I liked the look inside his head. Pretty believable following the whole father fiasco. Plus, you managed to hammer the point home without a while lot of extra words. Thanks for sharing!