Reviews for First Kiss
luvsdarkness chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
good story but needs more action but its really good
lizzie-rivers chapter 1 . 8/3/2012
Awww this was very good. I didn't see any mistakes. Well done!
Tony555 chapter 1 . 4/24/2010
it wasnt that bad. ive been looking for somthing with rin and Kohaku in it
WhiteTigerLilly chapter 1 . 6/24/2008
only because i like your story and i saying this:

BE CAREFUL with your pov and how you tell the story it's very choppy and too 'to the point'.

You have the makings of a great author. So keep up the fluff and try to add plot and story line!

Seshy101 chapter 1 . 7/7/2007
Aw cute _

Wish you added just a bit more detail.

But its really cute
Frannie-pants chapter 1 . 3/9/2007
aw, nahh it doesn't suck! it's really cute. :]
Kairi Uzeniba chapter 1 . 10/7/2006
It wasn't that bad. It was actually really sweet. KohakuxRin is so cute... _
Second Storey Stairwell chapter 1 . 7/30/2006
It didn't completely suck, but you should have made it longer and not end it less abruptly. You should have wrote about AT LEAST the first few seconds after the kiss.
Japanesegirl chapter 1 . 4/16/2006
it doesn't suck! it just needs more of a plot, but good work.
Kathrynzala chapter 1 . 4/8/2006
short but I like it! KohakuxRin is one of my all-time favorite pairings!
twilightwriter11 chapter 1 . 4/4/2006
lol short and not much happens but sweet
Amber Meek chapter 1 . 3/31/2006
jaleesa chapter 1 . 3/28/2006
That was so sweet!
KonohiIrriku chapter 1 . 3/27/2006
it is really disterbing considering that one is much older than the other.
My House Of Cards chapter 1 . 3/27/2006
It doesnt suck!I like it!
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