Reviews for Grey Maiden I: Philosopher's Stone
old-crow chapter 2 . 6/29/2013

I have a question on another scene.

"That's probably a good idea. The other reason is, well, complicated. The Headmaster of Hogwarts is a great wizard, Albus Dumbledore. You've read about him?"

Harry nodded and smiled.

"Well, he's very powerful and a great leader. But he also makes mistakes, like any human being. He did not want me to take you as a baby, for a number of reasons, but in part because he believes in the potency of Blood Magic. Do you know what that is?"

Harry shook his head.


How would she know of Dumbledore's thoughts or ideas? He wasn't there and I doubt that he'd have stated it in an Order meeting prior to the Potters' murders.

This one is more of your making, so I don't feel as bad about asking it.

old-crow chapter 1 . 6/29/2013

I do have a question regarding this scene.
"But how did this child defeat He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named?" the wheezy-voiced Elphias Dodge asked. "And where is the boy now?"

"I do not know, Elphias, how young Harry defeated the Killing Curse that was cast upon him."

Whispers and gasps followed this proclamation.

"He survived the Killing Curse?" Arthur Weasley, the red-headed father of seven children, asked quietly.

"I believe so," Dumbledore said, mixing fact with educated conjecture. "It appears that Lord Voldemort cast the curse at Harry and it was somehow reflected back at him, ripping his own soul from his body. He is gone for now. As for Harry, he is safe, to the extent of my knowledge."


Without visual inspection of Harry, how in the world could Dumbledore have come to this conclusion? Based on the evidence alone, Lily could have dropped a grenade at Riddle's feet and shielded Harry. That would be an easier explanation, even with knowledge of the prophecy?

I realize that it's not a plot hole of your making, but at times it seems as big as the grand canyon.

Guest chapter 9 . 5/3/2013
I know it's a bit redundant bringing this up considering that Harry is in Slytherin in this fic, but I'm unsure whether you're unaware of it or if it was an informed decision, so I will: Andromeda and Nymphadora Tonks weren't Ravenclaws. Tonks was a Hufflepuff and her mother was a Slytherin.
*Kind of* liking the story so far. It's a bit too depressing for my tastes.
Mr Angry chapter 8 . 5/3/2013
I don't *want* to see Ron become Harry's friend. I have to remind myself that he's only eleven to not want him *dead*. As it is, I'm hoping for something violent and extremely painful to happen to him, along with Malfoy. Sadly, it seems the only people you intend to make suffer are the ones who don't deserve it. I really hope things improve very soon, I'm not sure how much more angst, frustration and hatred I can take from a simple piece of fanfiction. Right now, I wouldn't mind if Gryffindor tower burnt down with all its students, apart from Hermione, inside it.
Emeraldfireblade chapter 1 . 4/6/2013
First timer, here. The descriptive way you write is breathtaking. Even though most of the events of this chapter are quite well known,You managed to make every thing excited and emotional. You really have a knack for emotions, details, and pacing.

Simply fantastic. I can't wait to see what the rest of your story looks like.

Guardian of the Sacred Emerald Flames
lastcrazyhorn chapter 7 . 3/26/2013
This chapter made me bawl . . . repeatedly.
astala7 chapter 7 . 2/22/2013
Waah, I had to cry so hard when harry got hurt! The Gryffindorks were really awful to him. I dearly hope they will apologize! And I dearly hope Harry won't forgive them and become dark and kill them all! Would serve them right.
Well, at least he now has a friend in Hermione. And he won't stay in the dark for so long with Daphne knowing the prophecy.
Him not being rescured by rediculous luck in the troll and broom incident rids the story of the little-children-atmospere and makes it serious. I really like that.
Screen-seer chapter 7 . 1/13/2013
This story is amazing! I haven't reviewed anything in five months, and I probably wouldn't have under normal circumstances. I've read my fair share of amazing stories on this site, some have made me burst with happiness, coo at the romance, or feel like I'm about to cry. I've never cried when reading anything or watching any movie/TV show even, but the talk between Harry and Hagrid drew a few tears. It had been coming since he started at Hogwarts and the desperation he held just made me cry. This story is so bittersweet, so now I'm off to finish it.
Todd chapter 11 . 12/30/2012
Are you not capable of actually changing anything from canon? Sure, I can see you keeping the Norbert sub-plot. But having it play out in exactly the same way is pure laziness on your part. I want to read a story that is actually different from canon-not just the exact same things rehashed from a different perspective. It's indefensible to argue that Harry would have identical reactions to canon's major plot events despite being raised in a drastically different environment.

A little creativity would go a long way.
JT chapter 9 . 12/30/2012
Daphne's refusal to let Harry read about Flamel is bizarre. It's not like she can expect him not to find out about such a noted wizard from countless other people or sources. Even if Harry does find out that the stone is at Hogwarts, so what? Clearly Voldemort already knows about it, but Daphne doesn't even know that Voldemort is searching for it in the first place.
critic chapter 15 . 12/11/2012
seems the story is abandoned. and i'm sorry to say, that it may be better so.

you had a great start with daphne as a motherfigure and hermione for the pairing. but the story went down really fast. i can not believe harry behaving like he is considering beeing raised by the best auror there is.
and i can also not believe that daphne would not do anything. i would call snape a death eater in front of the wizarding world and demand veritaserum. then i would target dumbles for allowing everything to happen and supporting a death eater. and finally i would send harry to a different school.
bcgcdak chapter 11 . 10/31/2012
To what you say about Ginny I can agree, but I also say in the books she is vastly underdeveloped. There is fairly little character development and she kind of comes out of nowhere as Harry's crush. She is J.K. Rowling just making a big happy ending (of sorts) in my opinion. Hermione would seem a much more natural girl for Harry, although I understand why people dislike her as well. Honestly I think Rowling missed a bit on those last two books.
Liam chapter 15 . 10/2/2012
I liked this fic a lot - good characterisation (although I thought Snape was initially a little over the top), writing style and plot. When I read that Daphne was taking Harry to Newfoundland, I must admit thinking "oh no, he's going to come back as Canadian!Harry and the dialogue will be littered with Canadian English" (not that that's always a bad thing, but I'm British, and Harry is a British character, so it doesn't sit so well with me when he starts spouting North American slang), but you've avoided that. Generally, I think you've done Harry really well; not too sure about the sudden metamorphmagus abilities, but you certainly haven't turned him into an omnipotent mage, frying Draco with beams from his eyes etc. I do enjoy reading stories in which Harry is more interested in reading and learning, and you've also avoided the temptation of making life too easy for him. Some authors seem to forget that tension makes for more interesting an gripping stories- you are not one of them!
Thanks for writing this.
Noble Korhedron chapter 15 . 6/5/2012

P.S.: You just became one of my favourite authors! :-P
eneath chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
I just the first chapter, don't know if you still follow it, but I really like it! will continue reading!
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