|Reviews for Of Sun|
| threerainydays chapter 12 . 12/23/2015
Words can't even begin to describe how much I love this story. You're an amazing writer and even though I know this story has probably been abandoned this point after eight years, I couldn't just walk away from this without reviewing. Even though I imagine Yuna/Baralai isn't the most popular X-2 pairing for most people, I really do think Of Sun deserves more attention purely because your writing is phenomenal.
Your characterization of just about everyone is so incredibly good I don't even know where to start. I love how you showcase the relationship between Yuna, Rikku, and Paine, particularly how Rikku and Paine really care about Yuna. I also love how insightful Paine is about Yuna being fairly naive and sheltered, yet loveable because of all that. The way the two of them are protective of Yuna while still wanting her to be happy is everything and more that I could ever wish for in an ideal friendship and you've captured that brilliantly.
And Baralai! Don't even get me started, because I love how much depth you added to his character. I feel like X-2 didn't give us much information about him and his personality, so I love what you've done for him here. His interactions with Yuna are amazing, and I especially loved the scenes where they argued because I think those really showed how both of them put on this polite front but can get passionate about things they believe in.
And oh my god. The end of chapter ten. When she finally said his name. I loved the way you never mentioned his name in the chapters leading up to it, how nobody said his name. At first I thought it was a great nod to how his name is never said in X because you can change it to something other than Tidus, but I also thought it was amazing how you set it up to show that it was too painful for Yuna and everyone else to say his name. This is just one example of the ways you added really cool layers of depth to the story and I loved it. But wow, just that bomb drop when she finally admits it and then goes straight to kissing Baralai, well done. What a great chapter ending, just wow.
And the way you dealt with Yuna getting over Tidus and moving on was SO GOOD. And I love how Baralai didn't want to be a second choice and was waiting on her to be ready. Their relationship had some rough patches, but that right there should be framed and idolized because I think that's a much better way to handle this type of complicated situation. You can't make her forget him, you can't make her move on, and so the best thing to do is to wait.
Honestly, I could go on and on about Of Sun because I love it so much. I admit I stalked your profile a little and noticed you've moved on to a new account so you might not even see this, but if you do I hope you know that this really is a gem of a story and I sincerely enjoyed reading it.
| Danko Kaji chapter 3 . 12/31/2012
Arguably my favorite chapter of the entire story. You presented their intellectual intimacy gloriously! I always pictured Yuna and Baralai having plenty conversations-and debates-about anything and everything. They have such startling similarities it surprises me that there are plenty of Tidus/Yuna fanfiction when we have received plenty of their bond in the game. But Baralai/Yuna, they so much unresolved sexual tension and unexplored chemistry.
I love the creative backstory you gave for the Al Bhed, and the Guado, and both character's perspective for how they viewed Sin, Yu Yevon, and the Eternal Calm. You give so much into the world of Spira, it might as well belong to the actual universe. I applaud your imagination!
| Danko Kaji chapter 2 . 12/31/2012
I admire how you don't romanticize Baralai and Yuna's relationship, how you lead into their interactions slowly and with plenty of color. I also LOVE the map of your imagination when you describe the layout of Bevelle Temple. It really paints the place much broader than what the games give us.
I also love the addition of the Magic Academy and the anniversary of a faceless Maester, Bevellian holidays and events... Wonderful. The way you depict Baralai in his everyday normal busy-ness is also fun and entertaining, and we don't have to know exactly what he's doing. It's beyond our comprehension anyways (but in later chapters I love how you write out the scenes of politicking and stuffy meetings).
The most poignant part was how you introduced Baralai's awareness and knowledge of Tidus's existence, and how he came to know about it. Excellent execution.
| Danko Kaji chapter 1 . 12/30/2012
I'm impressed beyond words how you took the InternationalLast Mission ending, and started the story from there. Not many people go for that plot in fanfiction (which begs the question: what will Baralai do after he's no longer Praetor? Become a librarian? A university professor? Maybe even an archaeologist? The possibilities are endless.)
I also like that despite the fact they're all we-saved-the-world buddies, they have the capacity to argue and not get along also. Your dialogue, damn your dialogue, it's always my favorite aspect of your writing style. You have the knack to give characters memorable lines. Excellent job!
I hope by reviewing every chapter, you will be motivated to finish the last few chapters. This deserves to be finished.
| Danko Kaji chapter 12 . 1/12/2012
You're so close to finishing. D: Please, update.
| SmilesAtEveryone chapter 12 . 8/23/2010
| MinaDeville chapter 12 . 7/3/2010
Gah! Keep writing please! pretty pleeeeeeeease? '(
| o chapter 8 . 2/27/2010
No more gorgeously written BaralaiXYuna fic have I read. Brilliant beyond words and belief - the characterization and plot flow is amazing and well-paced; I love this to pieces!
| Corrupt Innocence chapter 12 . 7/27/2009
I'll give you a million cookies if you keep going?
| Corrupt Innocence chapter 6 . 7/27/2009
Gah, you write Gippal so beautifully! *squee!*
I'm enjoying this very much
| Dikitas chapter 12 . 1/20/2009
I love it! You gonna write more right? RIGHT? Please...?
| Panda-no-Yuuhi chapter 12 . 6/7/2008
Wow. This is a great fanfic, ( and my first YunaxBaralai XD ) Update soon _
| Keyblade Mistress Hikari chapter 12 . 5/31/2008
I am -SO- happy that this is continued. I remembered reading it all eleven chapters it had then in a matter of days a month or two ago. (I never have that kind of patience, but it was just so good, I couldn't stop.) This story, single-handedly, made me an avid BxY shipper~.
Well, at the risk of sounding redundant, it's beautifully written so far, and I can't wait to see how the rest of the chapters play out. And as much as I love Baralai, it would be nice to see him pushed in the water. For many reasons.
| Angry Girl chapter 12 . 5/31/2008
Wow I really had thought that this story was long gone you know? I'm really happy that you will be finishing though even if there only is a few more!
I enjoyed the begining Paine and Gippal talk and how she has kinda played god in how things are not expecting that exact result but being pleased with the results regardless. I never considered it really but now that I think back it would have been hard for her wouldn't it? Rikku is her friend and Paine knows that Rikku can't always be there to guard her Yuna may have to slowly figure things out on her own. Giving her something new to consider.
And the aftermath of what happened is on her mind as with her 'I think I've done something stupid and I don't regret it.. well maybe' kinda Rikku talk. And the cousins heart to heart of sorts where they both admit where they could have done things better. But it's all very believable all of their actions. And her moving closer to him after they climb out of the failed tent lol that was a very funny image by the way :-P in a no! and then them being covered lumps. I bet Paine and Gippal were amused. haha.
I'm also for the 'push Baralai into the sea' group he's in Besaid and he's wearing that green thing? he has it coming seriously. Also them debating whether or not to include Nooj... I agree lets leave him out he may kill them, and this time Gippal might not be so lucky and Rikku too! that memory of his was also good as well as the mention of his throwing a couple of insults the Yevonites way can picture that scene *nods*
Well I'll finish up with I'm happy that you're back!
| Angel Taisha chapter 12 . 5/31/2008
I'd forgotten about this story; I guess it was a good idea to put it on alert, lol!
Anyway- good chapter! It's good that R & Y kind of cleared things up for the most part- but the last part stole the chapter and had me giggling like crazy! SO funny!