|Reviews for Dumbledore's Little Errand|
| Catherine Chen chapter 4 . 7/20/2008
“We came here for bloody nothing, wandering around getting wet and lost and falling down a ditch!” Minerva says her voice rising and a note of hysteria is in her voice. Severus places a hand on her arm calming her.
“I’m really sorry I have only just had my fireplace done for the Floo network…” Minerva opens her mouth to say something but Severus squeezes her arm keeping her silent.
very amusing turnaround
“I’m going to kill Albus,” she says and kicks off her shoes.
“I would love to help,” he says through gritted teeth and she gives a light laugh.
ha! (no descriptive words come to mind)
To close: I love the romantic setting they created. nice choices there. except for this rushed sentence (“M very nice,” he murmurs and with one small spell the bath, champagne and strawberries disappears back into the bed and without wasting anytime they made love until the morning, where she lies across his chest.) which I thought could have been expanded a bit, I liked the ending. for fairly unanticipated twist, death threats, and a bubble bath, A-.
| Catherine Chen chapter 3 . 7/20/2008
OK. I really need to stop reviewing before I finish reading the chapter. I loved the last chapter. It was so cute. I like that the relationship evolves and has a lot of depth. The way the characters bounce from humor to intimacy to intensity is wonderful. That last bit was so well done it reminded me of some of my favorite Regency novels.
For this chapter. Something has been in the back of my mind for a while. I guess by now it is safe to assume that you meant both wands could only perform ten spells combined but for some reason I was under the impression that each wand could perform ten spells. Silly me. I've been wondering why they've been so worried.
Beginning of the chapter, total "Laws of Attraction" moment. Which made me curious...any inspiration there? /watch?vz6lTQqEQzQY right after that they exist their trailer and they realize the castle was just a walk away
going on to Severus being intimidating- he's beginning to remind me of Drake in Diane Farr's Duel of Hearts, a book, good read
the thing about avoiding people- reminds me of confrontation between Lanie and evil chick in She's All That
this line-(“We’re in Riverfield, there is a room to spare,” Minerva says sitting down on the bench. “The girl thinks we’re secret lovers.”) For some reason I found it incredibly funny, and my mind flashed a clip of it as though it were a movie. Very nice. From there it dissolved a little (for me) into a conversation that could have been between Ron and Hermione or Harry and Hermione. I think it begins trying to get back on track when the bed breaks, but the dialogue remains stuck until the end of the chapter which is not necessarily bad (I just enjoyed your writing and it seems like the je ne sais quoi [I can use that b/c I take French] is lost and it's a little plain/bland.)
In answer to the question you sent via email, I'm not totally sure what "beta" is so I looked it up on wikipedia. If you mean do I proofread work, I don't do it for particular authors or in any professional capacity but given my skill at doing so and my sometimes irritating idiosyncracy of telling people that no they did not "do bad" on a test they "did badly", I would be happy to proofread your work. If you mean do I give my opinion to authors, well, again, not in any professional capacity, but I would be happy to do so and anyone who knows me knows that I have a very hard time keeping my opinion to myself.
srry that this dissolved into mostly a bunch of references. i just had an eye appointment and am possibly affected by what he used to dilate my eyes
| Catherine Chen chapter 2 . 7/20/2008
Last chapter: cute moments, enjoyed it once they got to the room, I liked the subtlety of their connection in the beginning of the last chapter
this chapter: idk, the tense issues bother me a little by now, however this (Severus mutters darkly under his breath when he sees the forest ahead and Minerva catches the faint words, “Bloody trees” and “I hate Albus” and she has a hard time trying not to laugh at him. He caught onto her cheery mood and raises an eyebrow.) very cute
| Murgy31 chapter 4 . 12/22/2007
This is a great story!
| Eiramanna chapter 4 . 2/21/2007
That was really good!
Severus does kill Albus too! ;) HeHe
Well worth the wait x
| Joey chapter 4 . 2/18/2007
Its a lovely ending I enjoyed it very much. Severus and Minerva at least they had their own little adventure and made some fun out of it.
| Animal Princess chapter 1 . 2/18/2007
I like the story so far but i think the rating should be T/PG-13.
| rainiejanie chapter 4 . 2/16/2007
Sheesh, I'd kill Albus too! I can imagine the scene when everyone gets back to Hogwarts, with Albus dodging hexes left and right.
Thank you for finishing! Keep writing more! ;-)
| Joey chapter 2 . 12/12/2006
An amazing chapter 2 ..you got me so into this storie as well :) I can't wait to read the next chapter.
| Joey chapter 1 . 12/12/2006
I like this fic very much ..I love your ideas they are amazing keep writing and I shall always keep reading;)
| yyyyy chapter 2 . 11/15/2006
it is a very good story and I would love to see what happens next. Keep writing
| MQ1 chapter 2 . 10/25/2006
Continue please! This is excellent
| lynna.4 chapter 1 . 5/10/2006
I'm torn between two ideas : i like your style of writing, this simplicity is very pleasant( i've already told you that about a boy and a cat, i like very much the way that you built your story) and you're very good at painting little scenes between the two and at writing dialogues but there is, for me, a lack of storyline. I very don't want to be disrespectful, I tell you that because I like your stories very much and i want to read more. I think that with your originality and a little more of issues, your stories may be better. I take the time to write you that because i belive it very much. However, thanks for writing, as always I'm waiting for the update :-)
| rainiejanie chapter 2 . 5/1/2006
Heehee, I love romantic!SS/MM. Please don't abandon this one.
Just out of curiosity, do you know how long this story will be?
| StarGazer chapter 1 . 5/1/2006
Your story has potential, but your geography is a bit sketchy.
Hogwarts is somewhere in the Scottish Highlands In the books the kids get on the train at Kings Cross in London at 11 am and get off the train after sunset at Hogsmeade. Sunset in the British Isles on September 1st is after 8 pm so the train trip lasts 9 hours. The only way to spend 9 hours on a train out of Kings Cross is to head into the highlands - all other directions you run out of land.
Based on other clues in the book, Hogwarts is probably located at the head of Loch Nevis - and coincidently that is the loch shown in the movies.
So if you want to go further into the Highlands from Hogwarts, going to Kings Cross is silly.
The most likely route is down Loch Arisaig to the Great Glen and on to Ft. Williams.
From Ft. Williams trains are available to other parts of the Scotland.
Also there are very few forests in Scotland - the land has been de-forested by the deer. In Scotland, forests are fenced to keep the deer out.
A good source of maps on Scotland is