Reviews for When I Look at You
haruka chapter 1 . 4/17/2006
Oh? So Angel-san is ur nee-chan? I'm just mildly surprised. Now let's move on to d review...

I haven't read ur other tenipuri fics yet, so i can't make any comparison, yet. I have not yet known ur style of writing, but i must congratulate ur for writing such a drabble. The feelings have only been touched on the surface, but deep enough for the readers to know Ryoma's feeling for Fuji. The words are simple and exact, making it easy for the readers
kisumi chapter 1 . 4/9/2006
I think I like your first fic more, however this one's good too.

Ryoma is a bit off, to me at least.

If these were Ryoma's thoughts it would be just fine, because you can't say a character is OOC for thinking, but I get the feeling that Ryoma is talking, writing or comunicating with Fuji in someway, and that's why he seems off. Although it is true we've never seen Ryoma in love, so it's hard to predict how he would act, you should have made him a little more... let's say cold? I don't know... I just can't picture him saying all those things to Fuji.

Anyway, I do like your fics, and I'm looking forward to your next stories.

Until then,