Reviews for Harry Potter and the Psychic Serpent |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Damn this was an amazing story. You are a phenomenal writer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Stumbled across this story entirely by accident and after just one chapter, I love it and am fully committed! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder why Viktor Drum would go from being a total superstar to reserve seeker for the worst team in history. I kinda like the story so far, but there is so much room for improvement. My main complaint is this constant recapping of the story. 99% of the people out there who read fanfiction have read the books, or at least seen the movies. They do not need to have things explained. We know all the characters and past situations. It's almost as if you are writing this for people who haven't read the books, and need everything explained to them. I'm also surprised that you went with nicer Dursleys. He's even eating at the table and helping himself to food. Canon Dursleys would have made him do the landscaping without pay. So I'm hoping there is a reason that you are making the Dursleys less abusive and more reasonable. I like the idea of Harry having a snake and always thought it was odd that he didn't have one in canon. If I could understand snakes, you could bet your ass I'd own one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The chapters 2-5 are all mixed up |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your chapters are mixed up at least the first two |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not sure if anyone has mentioned this but the chapter order is all messed up |
![]() ![]() ![]() sorry I can't handle the angst |
![]() ![]() ![]() fun, its good to see em getting along |
![]() ![]() your fucking sick you should put in your bio that there could be rape in your story you sick fuck |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know it's kind of cute to have Ginny be so good, but it's just wrong. I read this a long time ago on Fanfiction Alley, so am not reviewing regularly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "... for times when I can't use magic" is... uhh... wildly inaccurate at best. The Restriction has an exemption for self defense. And "fair's fair" doesn't apply. She WILLINGLY sent him that image. She'd be furious if he walked in on her in her underwear, let alone if he did it intentionally and/or didn't immediately leave thereafter. I really hope that this isn't going to be one of THOSE stories where Hermione can do no wrong and Harry is a complete simp. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The amulet is suspicious. |
![]() ![]() ![]() If bigger snakes are better seers, then how come Nagini hasn't been far more useful to Voldemort? Like, say, warning him not to grandstand after his resurrection if he wanted to kill Harry. That was right in front of Nagini, and she should've been able to warn of something happening that soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Definitely an AU, as said at beginning. It is a good read with lots of ups and downs. Romance and spy like things. Most will like it, but a bit slow in places or that is how it felt. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, Harry "Longbottomed" during the summer and started dancing the hormone polka as well. Everyone suddenly looks attractive, and no one really knows what to do with those that they are attracted to, and... teen aingst. How much I do NOT miss it. But it's kinda fun to read about it happening to someone else! |