Reviews for Broken Butterfly
ddddaaaae chapter 1 . 1/20
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Guest chapter 1 . 1/19
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HelleBelle chapter 22 . 10/22/2013
It was a good story
overninethousand chapter 14 . 8/21/2013
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overninethousand chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
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HaleyMonroe chapter 8 . 5/18/2013
Neo Maxi Zoom Dweebie? HA! Love the Breakfast Club reference! :)
Taraah36 chapter 22 . 5/1/2013
Much better grammar from the middle onward. I still say you should go over your other chapters though :-) . In the beginning I mean.

I love your story, but some things are missing. Loose ends with kagura, the mating mark Sessh gave their official titles for each other instead lovers.

They do make wonderful parents if their children act they do.

You never explained Sesshomaru's .and or his special sperm.

I assume that once a female kisses it she's guaranteed to get pregnant.

I'm so glad their baby girl came out okay. That would have really destroyed Sessh more ..

Oh, what do the children look like? Still the same as the story?
Taraah36 chapter 19 . 4/30/2013
I knew she was preggars!
Taraah36 chapter 17 . 4/30/2013
About time she kissed his forehead. I'm curious as to what exactly is different about his sperm when his forhead is kissed.
Taraah36 chapter 10 . 4/30/2013
Wow, that was low... Really low of him to do that to her. I hope Karma bites him in the ass.
Taraah36 chapter 3 . 4/30/2013
Try a beta instead of auto correct. It gets highly annoying to see such common words misspelled.

Your plot is good so far, it's just hard to read with all the grammatical errors.

If and when you get the chance go back over your chapters and try editing again.
Kylila Kurosuki chapter 6 . 1/15/2013
btw i love that song i mean i am bullied
HeyItsTaylor chapter 22 . 12/5/2012
This was a really good story. But in the beginning there are MAJOR spelling and grammar errors. I understand a few since i make them all the time, but yours im afraid...they can be very distracting. So I'd go through all the chapters spell check and read them out loud. After that you're story will be lovely! Best of luck for this story and your future endeavors! :)
phsclassof2012 chapter 6 . 12/2/2012
She walks to school with the lunch she packed
Nobody knows what she's holding back
Wearing the same dress she wore yesterday
She hides the bruises with the linen and lace, oh

The teacher wonders but she doesn't ask
It's hard to see the pain behind the mask
Bearing the burden of a secret storm
Sometimes she wishes she was never born

Through the wind and the rain she stands hard as a stone
In a world that she can't rise above
But her dreams give her wings and she flies to a place
Where she's loved concrete angel

Somebody cries in the middle of the night
The neighbors hear but they turn out the light
A fragile soul caught in the hands of fate
When morning comes it will be too late

Through the wind and the rain she stands hard as a stone
In a world that she can't rise above
But her dreams give her wings and she flies to a place
Where she's loved concrete angel

A statue stands in a shaded place
An angel girl with an upturned face
A name is written on a polished rock
A broken heart that the world forgot

Through the wind and the rain she stands hard as a stone
In a world that she can't rise above
But her dreams give her wings and she flies to a place
Where she's loved concrete angel

im sorry but thats my fav song and i was getting mad through out reading that lol
BloodyCrystal Panora chapter 9 . 11/25/2012
can fix ur spelling pls its a little annoy okay and I hate butt sex anyway I luv it
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