Reviews for 17: A Step Too Far
Ruby 1334 chapter 2 . 1/29/2014
It was hard to read but I did mange to read the message that Valerie got. Well, most of it. One or two words I still couldn't read. Man, this series has had ALOT going on. I don't really get any of these characters since you have changed things up quite a bit. *Sighs* Looks like I got ALOT of reading to do until this makes total sense...
Ruby 1334 chapter 1 . 1/29/2014
Oh no.
Now his secret is in danger! :O
I haven't read any of the series...
Is Kat/Electra Technus daughter? Sounds stupid, I know. I'm most likely wrong.
hoheehum chapter 8 . 5/28/2008
You seemed pretty worried about the quality of this, but I think it turned out real well. Recaps can be fun, when they're done right, and this one was. The POV rotation made for smooth transitions between the different "chapters" of the journal, with each character well chosen for their part. I must admit, the scene with Dash and the binary code was my favorite. The image of him and Tucker just standing there, looking at one another really blankly, had me laughing for a while.

And the tension between Danny and Valerie was well played, with that climactic chase really frantic and, well, angsty.

And I'm inclined to think that Danny's going to disembowel Kat the next time he sees her. Though maybe Angry!Clockwork is punishment enough.
Adran06 chapter 8 . 7/4/2007
Oh. My. GOD! You are too good at plot twists. I was completely thrown for a loop with the twists this entire story took! Completely not what I expected at all. I can hardly wait for the next story! I am definitely expecting it to be big. Knowing you, I doubt I'll be disappointed. Keep up the awesome job!


mickomoo chapter 8 . 1/3/2007
Good work...
Guest chapter 8 . 6/14/2006
This was nicely written. I've been skimming through your stories and this is perhaps the best one so far. Keep it up!
Asteren chapter 8 . 5/14/2006
Wow, I love this story. It's my favourite so far. I can't believe you can write so much, you're amazing! I love the journal entry that's in binary code, the one where he's yelling at Technus.
WingsOfMorphius chapter 3 . 5/14/2006
serves him right for peeking at a friend's journal!
WingsOfMorphius chapter 2 . 5/14/2006
'groaning' NOW look what Paulina's done!
WingsOfMorphius chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
; I don't know if I should feel sorry for her, or reproach her for something like that...
magdilen chapter 8 . 5/8/2006
It thought this story was really excellent. The exerpts from Danny's diary and everyone's reactions to the diary was really realistic. Great job. So I went to read Dance of Pales. I'm afraid that that one isn't nearly as good. I'm really confused and I don't entirely get what happened after Silver came on to the scene. That story really needs to be rewritten.
Kirstyn.T chapter 8 . 5/7/2006
love this story, its great! i havent read ur other stories but i will ASAP! Love Kirst...
Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 8 . 5/7/2006
Epologue, eh? Hmm...intreguing. Moving onto your next story.

Someone really really likes original characters, and does a good job with them too. (That is one of the highest compliments in my book)
Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 6 . 5/7/2006
Please excuse me while I totaly whack Valarie. Thank you.

Well...I want to. Or just slap her up the side of the head to knock some sense into her. *sigh*

You just answered your own question Valerie. Why didn't he tell you? Because he feared you'd react like that.
Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 4 . 5/7/2006
I'm glad this is your story...and I'm really looking forward to seeing what's going on.

You see, if this were my story, Danny would be going all evil becasue he can't handle being betrayed...Like I said, glad it's your story.

I really like your pace and the description you have, although I do think it would be easier to distinguish the journals between the story with italics instead of apostraphies (sp?).
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